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The scale of the clocktower tickles me. The sheer unimaginable scale of this "Secret" society is mind boggling, its also an incredibly silly place but there is nothing wrong with that
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Anyway, I am enjoying your story, one of the best things about fetish fics is not the fetish itself but how the writer presents the fetish, what they highlight about it, its a wonderful thing to try to understand how someone sees something and you cant find such pure honesty in anything else.
Keep up the good work![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
This last chapter was good. I can see now why it took so long to release. It was a lot to write and describe. I love it keep this up. Just please don't take too long. I'm so looking forward to seeing what happens to Twilight when she finds Rarity.
Ayy, new chapter!
First off, the description of Clocktower's primary compound makes it look fucking immense. To quote the Ghost from Destiny:
Which leads me to, you guessed it, another question. Will we ever see a fully-fledged map of the compound? Or was one already in the story, and I just missed it?
Speaking of pictures, that first diagram made my spine scream in abject terror. Like, seriously, that thing looks like it would crush a few columns.
Granted, I'm speaking from a position of human anatomy; for all I know, pone bones are made of cartilage and rubber.
On to the clop, I've reall-
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Oh.
I need a moment.
Fucking aced it, my friend.
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Sure looks like it.
Ok, I wasn't planning on commenting on this since I didn't want to leave any trace I was here, but I have to ask: where are you getting these pictures?
Also, like the worldbuilding, looking forward to an excerpt about dom masks similar to the collar one.
7448349 well played
7449261 Uh, sure?
7449204 Most of them I edited from show vectors, General Zoi's pony avatar puppets and free domain art using photoshop and my MS Paint-level skills. Where the art is owned by someone I credit it in the author's notes.
I have a training manual chapter in the works on masks that will also explore domming.
7448756 Receiving a handknit 'My Player Two' scarf from your special someone? Can't beat it. But then we're small town geeks, we don't have to be cool so we're allowed to get away with more fun.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
7448349 We all know it's 100% sugar marshmallows.
7447887 Well, when you have several millennia and massive popular support to build your dream sex playground, you can get pretty carried away.
There hasn't been a map and there probably never will be one.
Because I'm too lazy. Because I'd like to keep that open-ended to allow for your imagination to fill it in.But this picture gives you a decent idea of its main divisions -
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The Clocktower there makes up the upper palaces and main floors immediately below it. The upper palaces are pretty expansive and house the private accommodations, maid quarters, banquet halls and big play party chambers as well as the main guard barracks. The main floors are where the main amenities, administration, instructors school, sexual health clinic, and other relatively vanilla stuff are housed. It also houses the tea house where many couples get together to discuss their plans and limits for play beforehoof.
The area immediately beneath it are the Upper Dungeons where most of the tamer kinks are catered for, including things like the public cum dumps, communal cum baths, feeding hall, breaking chambers, slave cages and kennels, etc.
Below are the Lower Dungeons for more intermediate kinks, divided into the Main Trunk District and Branch Districts. Access here is restricted to doms and subs of intermediate level. The Main Trunk houses the milking halls, movie studios, cock-augmentation center and other areas. The Branch Districts house the dragon lairs (draconic-equine interspecies copulation is relatively hardcore and not without risks, requiring both dragons and subs to be well informed on safety), hunting grounds, aerodrome for sky play, cloud play and weather play, etc.
At the bottom are the Deep Dungeons, also known as 'Root'. This area requires the highest level of access permission and houses the most extreme kinks. Here one can find the torture chambers (for which the doms themselves require specific licenses for various equipment), the deep pools for aquatic play, tentacle pits, beast pens. This is also where the secondary guard barracks are housed, where guards are allowed to keep 'prisoners'. This is also where CTRL and the Kindler Church are based. There are rumours that CTRL hides android and cyborg golem experimentation labs down there.
7447872 I am very easy to encourage to write. I thrive on feedback. Comments, ratings, readers, the more I get, the more I'll feel like writing. I'm simple like that.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
7445490 Uh, they can't justify it because they don't condone it in the first place. In fact the Clocktower (as was revealed in Chapter 3) works to find and educate ponies who demonstrate an interest in the lifestyle to prevent tragedies like Rosemary's from happening. It is quite rigorous in informing and preparing both doms and subs as part of their application. Clocktower is very much against ponies jumping into kink without information and guidance.
So why then is Twilight wandering around unsupervised and uninformed?
The biggest reason is because I'm (not very subtly, I admit) promoting the message of safe, sane and consensual kink. Rosemary's and Twilight's story are examples of what shouldn't happen, what could be avoided with guidance and information and the dire consequences of misinformation and rushing into the lifestyle. The second reason is Twilight's experience is meant to be an allegory for public perception of the lifestyle.
As for the in-story reason? A few ponies bucked up royally. As Wind Waker said, like most things in life, Clocktower is decent but it isn't perfect, neither is the system. It provides as much safety-netting as biking helmets, safety lights, rules of the road and specialized bicycling lanes. But it's still up to the biker to stay safe.
7443917 Thank you. I quite like it too, I thought it was pretty heartwarming myself. It's lovely when two lovers share something unique.
7442898 That's part of the reason. I don't feel like copy-pasting all the stuff I wrote to CinnamonRollTheBreaded for the sixth time though. You can search the comments if you feel like seeing the full explanation.![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
7441380 Huh, that just gave me an idea. *takes notes*
7436122 Yeah, I don't think I was very subtle with the mask/collar thing. As for the cutie mark Twilight chose, the story mentioned it was an electrocardiogram pattern....![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
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Yep, just as I thought. Immense. Looks like the place would be capable of withstanding a siege (possibly capable of withstanding airstrikes from modern equipment??).
But, on an unrelated note, I'm fairly certain somewhere in Clocktower has something to do with hypnosis. Not, y'know, the kind of hypnosis Twiggles was expecting; erotic hypnosis, I mean.
And I'm certain there's been a few summonings of succubi/incubi here and there.
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One can only hope Twilight gets a good dicking out of this story...
7450039 Hypnosis is prohibited for the same reason drugs and alcohol are prohibited. Kink is like driving in that it has risks and should not be done while under the influence of anything that affects one's decision-making ability, regardless of whether it's the dom or the sub. It's the dom's responsibility to remain aware of what's going on at all times and act in a timely fashion if the sub is ever at risk. It's the sub's responsibility to be aware of everything that's going on to his/her body and be quick to alert the dom if they sense something's going wrong.
Succubi and incubi are totally a constant fad though.
7450079 You know you're with true friends/love when you can have fun talking like that and not feel stupid later on.
7450419 She'll be able to list and catalogue them when we're done.
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Well. Now I feel kinda stupid for saying that. When it was expressed multiple times that mind-altering conditions are a big no-no in the Society.
Yet, I would think that summoning creatures from Tartarus would be a little worse.
And now I think there maybe actual Summoning Pits in the Society.
Yay! Twilight's finally starting to (consciously) grok what's going on! And then promptly panics. The Clocktower PA system immediately begins playing the Benny Hill theme.![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
I think I will start a continuing story within the comments, revolving around Shadow Walker.
"What would Celestia think about this? Good thing she doesn't know. Makes my job easier." He thought while walking into the next room. "Public cum dumps" was written above the large doors. Checking his watch, he decided that he had to contact her in ten minutes from now. The only thing that was annoying him was the lavender unicorn that obviously did not belong in here. Sadly he could not catch a glimpse onto her cutie mark yet. Still, it was impressive that her cover had not been blown. However, that was just about to change. She tripped and when a guard offered to help her up, she bolted away, a bunch of guards closely behind her. Not that he would mind the uproar. It would distract the ponies further and maybe even allow him to sneak into the archives to collect valuable information for his current employer. Having seen enough, he retreated into the shadows and made a call. It was answered by a friendly female voice.
"Did you find anything important?"
"Indeed. It seems a few ponies are here to get over the events in Starlight Glimmers village. Further, a purple unicorn mare has also sneaked in the facility, her intentions are not clear by know. I think she went here on her own. I was not able to identify her yet." Shadow reported.
" A purple unicorn mare? Oh no... The mare you are describing is most likely Twilight Sparkle. That makes everything more complicated. She was not supposed to arrive until tomorrow evening. Anything Else?"
Shadow hesitated for a moment. "Twilight Sparkle as in Princess Twilight Sparkle? Poor mare. Whatever. The slaves are only mares, I have not seen a single stallion wearing a slave collar. I find this place mildly disturbing, but I will carry on. Next call when I reached the archives. Shadow over and out." He ended the call and resumed his mission. Being the best infiltrator in Equestria had its downsides too. His clients expected perfection. However, he had his price. And while not many hired him, he was able to live a life into the upper half of middle class without any problems.
Having seen enough, he decided to return to his home for a few hours to grab a snack and maybe some additional equipment to breach into the high security areas.
It doesn't really surprise me that Candace would be involved in this society of crazy love. It will be interesting to see her role in this story. I mean... if you planning to have her personally in be in a chapter.
7450079 everyday? With every sentence? I'm a gamer too, but this is more or less the stereotype for people who know nothing about gaming and think this is how we act.
Hmm. Wandering away from my particular set of kinks, but still interesting, especially with the Safe Word Room. This was a relatively good place to pivot out on Twilight; her panic-OCD loop doesn't usually last half as long as this, and some things are starting to get a bit stretch the mind coincidental. I really laud both seeing the loving side and the areas where the weight of the society's complacency are starting to make certain aspects squeak, possibly even dangerously. One of the things I hope you'll do is continue to have Twilight be an active hero through the end, and find social-leadership (aka, not sub/defer to others outside of the specific kink acts/relationships) ways to shake up that complacency and find new, effective safeguards.
From a certain point of view, after all, if this really tends that original flame, the place 'belongs' to the Princess of Friendship more than even Love or the Moon/Night.![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
Looking forward to more, especially when the inverse direction parallels to what I'm concentrating on in my own work start to kick in: the learnin'.
This is a great story so far, and i love the idea that Twilight is trying to investigate this even confusing it as some sort of mind control conservancy, I can't wait to see more soon.
I love the idea that doctor Stables or is it doctor Horse being Twilights Dom, and I can't wait to see how surprise that he will be about Twilight having his curie mark on making her as his property. I would personally prefer that she comes out of this even untouched, somehow manages to "recruit" him for her undercover investigation to see what lay deeper in the Clock towers vaults as her stand in Dom and that they are supposed to act the part of Dom and Sub to prove to the cult/conspiracy to one of them, only to discover that it all wasn't actually an act.
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I'm in favor of foalcon here. After all, part of the Utopian paradise thing is the whole paradise part for everyone. Plus, it's not that hard to stick a [foalcon warning] tag at the head of a chapter. The only problem I see here is the controversy.
We have age of consent controversies here, to the extent that they are, because we have an effective ban on informing ourselves on childhood sexuality. (see the rind et al. controversy.) We have no (scientifically) valid way of determining consent, so we stick an arbitrary age and largely ignore the consequences of it. Even if someone was open about being sexually precocious, absolutely no good could come of it. Just picture someone talking to Obama about it in front of the media. A life ruining trainwreck is the best case scenario. There's little to nothing he could do even if he wanted to.
However, Equestria doesn't have those problems. They had no Puritans to develop deep taboos on nudity and sexuality. Ponies mature in a magical flash of light, so you can tell an adult at a glance. Even if getting your cutie mark != age of consent, they have access to means both mundane and magical to determine if you're ready that we don't. The range of what they can do that we can't covers from simply asking for consent all the way up to time travel. Finally, if all else fails the princesses have the authority to go in and deal with the situation manually. Reconciling the two might be a story in and of itself.
Overall, though, I don't see foalcon as a big deal even in an absolutely sexually permissive environment. Not all kids are going to be interested in it all the time, just as not all adults are. Even the most sexually precocious foals are probably only going to be interested in the normal kid stuff- light bondage, bestiality, roleplay, maybe incest at the most. The main bulk of lifestyle BDSM isn't going to be of primary interest except for the older foals anyway. So, unless there's a clocktower site dedicated to it then it's not going to come up a huge amount.
Ultimately my kink is rational adult discussion on the issues that divide us, but it's up to the author if he can and wants to work that in.
Statement: Cults are mostly a mix between masochists and sadists gathered into a community.
60/40 Evil good, this was touching and all, but good people don't have tentacles that they feed people to. So slightly tipped on the probability scale, but the lack of a mind control spell (which we all saw coming) does say something good about this place.
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Lefties spent several centuries without mainstream acceptance, to the point where they would have their hands tied behind them in school at one point. With religion, taboo, and sex it can be worse. 40% of the population are atheists, 1/3 are juvenile masturbators, and something like 10% have at least some type of experience with bestiality. Time and prevalence don't automatically end in acceptance.
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Simple consent can be determined through communication. The more advanced forms of consent (informed consent and CEV) are either undemonstrable in the real world or can't be proven to exist or simply ill defined. With our current constraints, it is impossible to say either way. At most we can say that the most recent study (conducted in the 12th century) observed consent and that more science is needed.
Equestria need not operate under those constraints however. They can just ask. And even if they couldn't ask the foals, they can always just ask Cadence who can find out through magic, or Luna who would have observed directly via dreams.
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How are new tallies printed as ponies die or leave the scene?
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If you knew Twilight personally, like family, would you let her in on this? Cause I would let Spike into a BDSM group way before Twi, He might push himself too far and need a Dom to tell him to stop. Twilight's liable to blow up the place.
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Time for rampant speculation on the rest of the clocktower sites!
Crystal Empire: married/polyamorous couples.
Neighpone: tentacles.
Canterlot: Vanilla sex (not technically clocktower.)
Griffonstone: Pred/prey fetish (feasability of vore/dolcette?)
Zeborica: Drugs, potions, and altered state sex of all types.
Saddle Arabia: Dressage.
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Well to be fair all her friends were in middle school when she was in kindergarten and Twi was never the most social of ponies. One might even call her pretty oblivious.
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Except we're well aware that this is not always the case, and often time implicit consent isn't the same thing as actual consent. If you're a secretary and your boss comes to you and tells you to blow him, even if he doesn't say that you'll lose your job or there will be consequences to doing so, you might believe it so and end up engaging in oral sex with him even though you don't want to.
This is rape even though you may verbally say 'alright'.
Which is why people like Doctors are very, very careful in trying to make sure you understand what you're agreeing to--not because it's simply illegal or they might be at risk of being sued, although I'm sure that's a factor, but because it's clear that true informed consent is a hard problem to really assess and determine the legitimacy of.
Which is why there are safeguards and restrictions on how consent can be given. For example, if you have a serious mental disability, we recognize that you're probably not capable of consent--regardless of what you might say--which is why we have guardians and medical proxies to act in the place of such people.
Other than the absurdity of suggesting that half of the Equestrian government should spend their time scanning the brains of five year old children so someone can have the go ahead to fuck them, this is very much the sort of thinking and reasoning that I was getting at in my original comment.
The brain is physically still developing in a child post birth, and continues to do so long into puberty and to a degree, into adulthood.
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You'll notice, for example, that myelination starts before birth and continues for a very long time. The brain is forming new synaptic connections up until adolescence, etc.
And this is merely a blunt overview of brain development, but the inference should be obvious: below a certain age, individuals don't have brains capable of processing the world as adults do. This isn't to say that 18 or whatever is a good bench mark, but we can at least say by the time people reach this point, many of them are capable of thinking as an adult and are fully aware/awake/whatever you want to call it.
7462600 She was diliberately trying to stay unnoticed, if there was a tour, she probably walked right past it.
7455745 "I'm for foalcon"
Oh boy someone wants to have their testes stomped on until they pop!
7462600 wow. Someone forgot their wheaties this morning.
In general it seemed pretty clear that Twilight was on a guest list and connected to the groundwork that was being laid in the first chapter. We don't have a 100% clear idea of what their protocols are. Seeing as Rarity and Dr were more or less courting Twilight, it's easily conceivable that she was not marked as needing any sort of escort because why else would she come without one of the ponies drawing her into the society?
Bearuacracy is a mildly miraculous thing, but the idea that a system that tracks a million individuals to some extent and in some way can't have cracks or miscommunications is ridiculous. I worked in a law office with 4 people with anywhere from 5-25 cases open simultaneously and communication and co-ordination were a problem, and that will only get worse the more cooks you have on the proverbial kitchen.
I've been wondering how she came to be on that list. My first thought was that she was let in by a disguised Dr. Horse, who was subsequently following, unseen, to ensure that she didn't get into too much trouble.
My better theory is that the "tall, stallward-looking stallion" correctly identified her and that there is an established rule that royalty gets a free pass. I suspect that if Twilight Velvet ever finds out who let her daughter wander around the place uninformed, she's going to feed him to a tentacle plant.
I would certainly expect that normally an uninformed pony entering the clocktower would be identified and swiftly guided towards the proper induction and training, but, as heated debate noted, Twilight is intentionally pretending to know what she's doing to evade detection.
Between that and
I can now imagine an alternative story in which Twilight's reaction on the viewing platform is one of disgust, rather than the fantasy of taking Treehugger's place. Because of this she leaves the area earlier and arrives in the collaring room too soon to witness the events of chapter 2, thus having no idea of the significance of the collars. She picks a commonly appearing white collar, coupled with a purple band to match her coat. Remembering that she saw ponies with studs on their collars, she picks up some silver ones. Anyone who can't work out what happens after Twilight walks into the dungeon thus dressed and still with no knowledge of the safe words needs to either re-read Lyra's collar coding guide or get a better imagination.
To get back to this chapter (and the actual story) though, I think Wind Waker and Rosemary need to address one issue. When Rosemary's shift ended, she was, as Wind Waker noticed, uncomfortable with the situation and apparently not comfortable using the safe word. If Wind Waker had not been there to use it for her, this could have got a lot worse. Rosemary definitely needs to avoid such situations again until she can use her safe word when needed.
Love the story so far. The lore and structure of everything is amazing. I do have a question. How big exactly is this clock tower society palace? It sounds like she is in a whole town sized area in the dungeons.
Also, Does this place imply married couples are in open relationships such as Night Light and Velvet?
And greater exploration of the stuff, Twilight finally getting it into her head this is not some mind control cult... if through a rather plot device, deus ex machina way.
The couple was so sweet and cute, and such a great example of how this sort of life can help, can be a good thing and, I just love it. Their dialog however... ehhhh.. what they were saying was so perfect, but it was to perfect, felt to direct, to "As you know" exposition just for Twilight's sake and the audience's. Felt less like real people taking and just...
Characterization (outside of the roleplay) is definitely a place the story could use work, Twilight still feels off, and a comment you made here makes clear how and why. Twilight is meant to be an allegory for society as a whole finding out about something like this, That right there is the problem, the story and Twilight are being made to be what is needed for the allegory, rather then acting in a natural manner for the character. Leading to her acting WAY to naive, way to panicky and taking way to long to piece this together, as well as being way to into the ideas way to hard and fast to really buy. The overall idea is fine, just the execution feels rough, rushed, and to clearly just doing what the story needs, rather then stemming naturally from who the character is. Hopefully once this acr is done it does abetter job treating her like the intelligent, rational Princess she is. As is here.. again, it's to clear she is being used for the allegory, thus not herself, not a character, but simply this blank, meaningless in the story representation of what the story wants you to see.
Also a big reason Allegory so often fails and kind of sucks to use. Far better to just stick with Applicability and yet things be what they are.
Yet for the issue I am having with character presentation, ohhhhh damn am I loving this as a whole and the Society is SO damn good. True not perfect, clearly having some faults, yet also clearly trying and meaning well. That they are not perfect simply makes it better, makes it more real.
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The Society is not perfect, this chapter mentions as much.
bosom? bottom?
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Ugh... More to the point just imagine the AFTERMATH... How both Twilight and ESPECIALLY the eventual Dom involved would feel... [There is also the point that probably that dom would be splattered somewhere as Twilight is DEFINITELY not defenseless...]