It's the day! Finally she has her cutie mark! But then... Why is she so upset? When she looks out into the dark she realises something, something that will crush her. She screams her pain to the night and somepony finds her... Will she be enough to ease her worries? Why is Scootaloo so cut off? Why does she sit there for hours after the sun has set to just look into the dark? Why tell her secrets to a stranger instead of her 'sister'?
Because a stranger won't lie...
um...more please...I mean, if it isn't too much trouble...
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More coming right up!
Short but nice cliffhanger. I'd like to see how this is going.
You could use an editor.
Otherwise, a great concept, and a wonderful cliffhanger.
7333372 YAY!
I hope this gets a sequel because of that ending.
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It already has a sequel that I decided to do a prequel for...
Prance –> Prench