Before her long trip, Maud Pie is invited to Ponyville by her sister. However, as the only pony in the family with enough experience and strength to gather edible rocks, she decided to stockpile a huge ammount of them and send some to Pinkie Pie.
Surely a few tons would be enough for rock-candy-necklaces.
And so, Maud and her pet Boulder go on a boring adventure into some underground dungeon. Clearly nothing interesting is going to happen.
Editors:
TheDawgBrony
Kydois
Pre-readers:
Feather Note
Chapters (1)
Huh...so boulder really is a pet rock. That's awesome.
Also, an error:
Maud’s thoughts were interrupted the moment she tripped over some crystals. Her eyes narrowed slightly as she smashed it into pieces, unloading her anger. She sighed as she bypassed the pieces, shallowing in self-guild.
I think you mean guilt.
You're very good at writing the Pie sisters
Lovely tale!
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Thanks, fixed.
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I fear I'm not good at it. The story barely have any likes and no feedback, so it seems it was a failure, and I had such high hopes.
The worst is that no one say what I did wrong, so I can't improve this story.
7312754 I'm surprised it didn't
I really enjoyed it.
I liked it!
Maud's relationship with her sisters is well done, and the magic crystals help explain a lot of things
Also enjoyed Boulder's story, it makes totally sense!
P.S. multiple PS's at the end of the letter should be PPS, not PSS, meaning post-post-scriptum, not post-scriptum-scriptum
P.P.S. unless, of course, Pinkie's mistake is deliberate
I dunno what to comment, tho, I had alot of fun reading it
You're right. It is uninteresting.
Just not enough of Maud Pie excellent adventure