Charcoal was never really a social stallion. But when he's given a new chance at life by moving to somewhere new. His world turns upside down as he is introduced to all sorts of ponies and emotions, and learns the value of friendship and love.
Charcoal was never really a social stallion. But when he's given a new chance at life by moving to somewhere new. His world turns upside down as he is introduced to all sorts of ponies and emotions, and learns the value of friendship and love.
Oh now
I have a good feeling about this
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I like to keep it short so it appeals to readers that like to read in short chapters. and i did intend for it to be short so it'll be easier to read. It'll be easier for me to do updates on this as well since this will be an ongoing thing
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well i'm not entirely up to date with the show itself. i tend to forget some things. sorry if it doesn't follow suit to the show itself ^^;
weknowmemes.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/03/what-the-fuck-am-i-reading.jpg I have no idea.. But it's very awesome
Is applebloom gonna die?! Is applejack gonna kill charcoal for killing applebloom? Or will it be big Mac? Are we ever gonna find out what happend to cinnamon? And I think you should employ the use of cliff hangers. I can't wait for the next chapter!
NNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!! WHY U END IT THER!?!?!?!?!?!?
NNNNNNEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEDDDDDDDDDDDD MMMMMMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Okay these short chapters are starting to piss me off. But it makes me want to read the next one even more so there's a pluse. Question: exactly how dark is it going to get and will it be disturbing?
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well that depends on a variety of things. I keep most of the concepts from the show in this fic. I do make some adjustments here and there, and add some creepy factors on certain situations -spoiler- [ it'll happen on the next chapter ]. and sorry if it pisses you off that my chapters are shorter than most of the other stories. it makes it easier to maintain updates and brings in more readers that don't usually like lengthy chapters. and as i've said before, this is ongoing, so this series isn't going to end anytime soon
Sorry for not addressing you personally but I'm a total newbie here. Anyway I can see why shorter chapters are better in some aspects than long ones, so I'll try not to be a bother over it any more.
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it's cool, i can understand your point of view because i can assume that a majority of the people who are here would prefer longer writings, but i want this story to appeal to everyone, so no harm done bro
Dude I'm a chick. Wait you are a guy right?
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i use bro as a general term XD and yes, i am a guy.
I can't believe it just ended like that!
HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
lol
LOL AJ and your thats who I hit
It's good but it feels a tad rushed. In my opinion I think you should draw it out a bit more. But so far so good! Keep it up, you're bound to get better with time!
Obvious question: when are the other ponies gonna be introduced? And are they gonna be introduced one at a time? And what will the others think about the obvious love? Sorry I'm chalk full of questions.
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it's alright, i like answering questions. The series are composed of arcs, where it revolves usually around one character, but several others will take part as well. The next arc will introduce a new oc, and revolve around her and pinkie pie, with rainbow dash, charcoal, and a few others being a supportive role. All characters will have their moment to shine in this series, including the background ones, so i mean it when i say it's gonna be one hell of a show. Also, all the arcs will tie together in some way, so the love interest between AJ and Charcoal will become apparent throughout the series.
Interesting delivery, mind if I steal it?
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it's a style of writing, it's available for everyone to use so go right ahead
lol
this seems fun
Wait what did she do
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read "stress and adoration" and then you'll know
nice so far
-DoubleRainbow
Not much to comment about. A very neutral chapter.
This gonna be goooooooodc
-DoubleRainbow
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No need to correct
Lol it would b. funny if big Mac stalked him
Noooooooooooo Appleblooooooom
-DoubleRainbow
Nice
-DoubleRainbow
Can't wait for more! Also it seems like the chapters are getting longer!
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Sadly, i agree with you. Every time i write the next one it keeps getting shorter though i intended for it to be longer. I'm trying to keep the stories within a 900 - 1200 word range. i have a lot of things to deal with right now so it's a bit hard to keep up with the updates. I'll be sure that the next few chapters will be longer.
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better? anything else that needs to be done?
925212 Well look, two one thousand word chapters followed by two nine hundred word chapters is an improvement.
Yet again, another great chapter. Keep this up, this is really entertaining.
THIS IS SO DAM GOOD.
but I'm still stunned by the "bonus" chapter
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thanks for the comment. i hope this story gets popular like all the others with 2000 likes
I just got to keep on pushing
Awesome!!!!
I understand that this arc may seem a bit shorter than the last one, but if you compare how many total words there are for each chapter (excluding the bonus chapters) they are relatively close in terms of word count. Well.. maybe not.
anyway, bonus chapter and the 3rd arc coming soon!
Are all of the mane six gonna be in a relationship by the end of this? I'm assuming not because of the picture. Cant wait to see what happens next, so please keep writing!
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no, not all of the mane 6 will be in a relationship. I wanted to get all the lovey and gushy stuff out of the way before I get into the nitty gritty.
there will be romantic interests later on, but the next arc will consist of mostly action and build up rather than romantic tension like the last two arcs
The beginning of a new arc! this one is going to be real good! Didn't expect to do a biology lesson here, but it went so well with the chapter that I threw it in anyway, it just makes so much sence haha, hope you enjoy