Sorry if all those lovely comments disappeared into a negative space wedgie putting by erasing the first chapter. I did not know that was going to happen.

Ah, that explains it.  Well it is certainly much better.  I can imagine why condoms weren't working.  He's not 'Big' Mac for nothing *nudge nudge wink wink*

>>863410863410

I still can't believe I'm even implying that.

Errrr! need update now! this is really good! And about the "Big" Mac thing... wow. just wow.

AJ's gonna be pissed.

You tease!

I kid, I kid. Anywho, a solid rewrite. I'm glad you found a prereader, although from the previous response I expected you to get more than one.

There were still some errors here and there, and since I had time to kill I copied it into Gdocs and went at it. I'll shoot you the PM with it after I finish this praise-filled ramble.

I'm super excited to see where this goes, and if you end up needing another set of eyes, let me know.

>>864139864139

Thanks, I will consider it.

Twimac is still best ship!

And you've outdone yourself,  the old version was awesome but this is even better!

Need update! July is half over and I check my notifications every day for an update. grrr.

>>908891908891

I said second to third week. I finished the next chapter, have to edit it myself, and then send it to my pre-readers. Hopefully it will be here by next the Sunday after next if not sooner.

The next chapter will come out when the next chapter comes out. I promise that it won't be twenty days past forever, but it depends on the schedules of my editors after I actually finsh the first draft.

YAY UPDATE! You have no idea how happy I am right now! I love you, and I love this chapter, and don't even think about Twilight having an abortion! SHE'S NOT THAT KIND OF MARE!!!!!

this is a good one. i just KNEW it was Ditzy...but WHO is kingston?

>>938721938721

Kingston is my headcanon Doctor Whooves/Hooves.

Love it!

Oh dear, poor Daisy. I hope Twilight doesn't end up like her

i don't see twilight sparkle getting an abortion it's just not her

great chapter can't w8 for the next one

Well, that was harsh. Why, Rarity? Why?

Great chapter though.

liking the story until now just please please do not make a scumbag or transform ponyville in a city of haters pleaaaaaaaaase

>>10126061012606

There is nothing wrong with earning your happy ending. I really wish Fimfiction had a drama category. It along with humor are the two oldest genre's in existence.

I don't think that we need to worry about what some of the more small-minded citizens of Ponyville are going to do. I should think we should worry about what is done to them when BBBFF joins the debate. Angry apple farmers and judgmental divas are one thing; over-protective siblings who have access to weaponry and the loyalty of armed stallions are quite another.

>>10156271015627

>:D Thank you for just inspiring and awesome scene for a later chapter.

>>10162311016231

Glad to be of help. The instant she'd been told the news, my common sense started tingling and warned me about Shining Armour and his need to look out for little Twiley. Knowing him, he'll do it with extreme prejudice.

>>10127721012772

Still, Ponyville shoudn't be almost completely turned against Twilight and Big Mac.

I wonder who it'll be harder for Twilight to confess her pregnancy too.  Celestia or her parents?

And then Big Mac's head exploded.

>>10645801064580 I lolled hard

Yes Its finally here!

Oh yeah and it says chapter 3

CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE! XDD

like to take care of his family i dont think he will take too hard i am afraid of applejack and shining armor

I wonder what it is that AJ's mother did that so angers her. Finding that out would explain a lot of why Rainbow is going to be the one pulling a headstrong nitwit by the tail this time.

dun Dun DUNNNN! I'm afraid of what AJ and Shining Armor will do when they find out. Especially Shining. Protective big brothers can be... scary, to say the least. Can't wait for Tia's reaction, and really hope Mac will take responsibility. Anyway, great chapter, please update soon!

My guess is his brain will shut down for a few minutes as he tries to process what she says, then he will talk to her.

While Big Mac should be worried about Twilight's brother, I feel that the greater threat is from AJ, her hate toward her mother, and her, at least implied, possessiveness of Big Mac will make her quite a threat to both Twilight and the foal.

HA! that was awesome. more?

pinkie! Where did you come from? Never mind. Great chapter. can't wait for the next one!

About time she told him, was afraid she was going to wait till the real signs showing.

Yes moar

Hurray!!!

okay read all the chapters present at the moment and i will fav

>>11016221101622

dude it's pinkie pie  she could pop up on the moon durring Luna's banishment if she wanted to, i just expected it to be sooner her appearence

Hmmm. At least we're getting to see why the Apples are the way they are. Give ponies what they want (Auger on a slab) and they'll beat a path to your door.

Poor Big Mac. Hate to say it but good riddance to that prick. Also, Pinkie Pie.

I think that Pinkie might explode if she finds out that Twilight's pregnant.

Pinkie knows all

Who knew that the Apple family had these sort of issues. What I want to know is what Augar did to Mac's first marefriend, and why would Augar, and now Applejack, be against Mac having a romantic relationship? The only reason I can think is that it could distract Mac from work, but that excuse just seems petty and uncalled-for.  

Also, is Honey Crisp going to make an appearance, possibly to make amends?

I'm glad to see another great TwiMac story. Has anyone else noticed that a number of them have appeared recently?

>>11052021105202

I have a theory in the case of the first marefriend: it was because she was a pegasus. He sounds like he would be the whole same race staying with the same race type.

>>11056241105624

That could explain Augar actions, and all the members of the Apple family we have seen have been Earth ponies. However, from what we have heard so far. Applejack is preventing anyone getting too close to her brother, rather than checking if they match some form of 'racial profile'. Also, if the Daisy mentioned in the second chapter is the same Daisy from the 'flower trio', than it doesn't fit as she is an Earth pony.

>>11088891108889

Possible that AJ didn't understand the whole racial profiling thing at the time, and assumed it was for another reason. From what I can tell, or at least what was implied, was that she worshiped Augar without being capable of thinking that he was in the wrong. Man her world is about to be shattered, if they can get her to listen.

Poor big Mac, at least he seems to have things worked out with Twilight, for now. Pinkie's randomness was a perfect way to end this chapter, leaves things on a weird note. Can't wait to read what happens next, great story so far!

Now to break the news to AJ without having her murder everyone. Hm.

luv it

her motherly instincts are kicking, great story, please tell me that will a super protective applejack rampage to put some drama to it

That's another reaction I can't wait to see. Let's chalk it up now, shall we? Spike, AJ, And Shining Armor. This is going to be good!

>>11718621171862 i dont think shinning will be so bad he will have a bro talk with big mac and let it go the problem is applejack

Oooooo!  I maternal Twilight!  Guess what Spike, you've been upgraded to first-born!

Gotta love those raging hormones, I sense a very funny chapter 7 coming on!

yeah cant wait for the AJ and Shining reactions for sure

  awww

Pinkie Pie. . .  only one thing to say.  The road to hell is paved with good intentions.  

She may mean well, but she really needs to put down the cupcake and pick up a slice of maturity topped with a helping of tact.

>>11718621171862 You forgot parents Granny Smith and Princess Celestia

>>11720281172028

And Twilight's actual parents as well as Big Macintosh's mother.

Throw in more apple family, the birds and the bees with Applebloom and why not Blueblood insulting Big Mac because Twilight is his secret crush

Applejack's overly protective instincts shall be an interesting thing to see...

*popcorn appears out of no where* This is going to be good.

>>11719401171940

dude Big Mac knocked up Shinning Armors baby sister, do you really think there will only be a big brother talk?

>>11730791173079 I don't think its AJ being overprotective, I think it was something that her Grandfather instilled in AJ

>>11720141172014

Indeed. Very indeed. Pinkie will be troublemaker here with her behaviour.

>>11734231173423 i dont now he doesnt look like the kind of  guy who would become angry for something like this he might want to test big mac but i dont think he will be violent

Loving it, loving it, LOVING IT!

>>11720141172014

Yeah, not everything can be solved with a party.

Poor Pinkie, she means well. But that doesn't excuse her behaviour. Anyways, loved the chapter. I really liked Rarity and Rainbow Dash protecting their friend.

Well all depends on who you find scarier Celestia, Luna, or Shinning Armor. Personally I say Luna.

I'm glad Twilight was able to work things out with Spike, although I am still worried about AJ and how she's going to react, as well as Twilight's family. As always great chapter and I look forward to reading more.

Oh god here we go...*brings out the popcorn* bring out the crazed Applejack!

dear lord why did you end it there, come on what is it with writers and ending chapters on such a nail biting moment

Lé me- going through old emails looking for something. I find an old update alert for this and think, "sigh, they need to update". I scroll back to the top and refresh, and boom! there's an update! Amazing. truly amazing. Great chapter, can't wait for more AJ!

>>12565611256561

Writing 101: Keep the readers wanting more.

>>12565731256573

CURSE YOU WRITING 101

I really don't want to distract the comments from this chapter, but was I to subtle on the shower sex in the previous chapter?

WHOOO i wanna read more,please?

>>12566141256614

Where do people find pictures like this? Is there some kind of internet repository for visual pictures or movies representing words?

high there fan! let me introduce you to sh*t. Sh*t meet fan, I hope you two have a lovely time together....

>>12566031256603 by subtle do you mean that we got the fact they had sex in the shower? yes, we got it. was it fully graphic clop? no if that's what your worried about... thought I'm feeling sorry for Spike, it's hard to tell what Rarity's feelings are for him in this.....

>>12566031256603

No I don't think you were XD I got it :P

Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one :3

>>12566601256660

I was just wondering if readers knew it actually had occurred. As for Spike, lets just say the difference between romantic ideals and what is an adult relationship will be important.

>>12566541256654

Honestly, I just Googled "Cliff" then "Hanger" and took the first two images that were about the same size

>>12566811256681

No need to apologize, I was just wondering.

>>12565731256573 Writing 201 Once is Okay, twice is reasonable, trice you're a troll.

>>12566981256698

Well I guess if you don't like my style I could always not continue the story...

Now that is trolling

>>12567221256722 you have done this every other chapter

>>12566931256693

No worries, the only bad thing is that I have used up a weeks worth of clever with that.

As for excessive cliffhangers, I don't see it. The only real cliffhangers have been this chapter and the original reveal of the pregnancy to Macintosh. I agree that true cliffhangers should be used sparingly, but this story definitely hasn't abused them.

I want to write something but dont know what!

So onto another topic. I'm thinking of switching up the story picture. I like this one, but at the same time I want something that shows a little more frustration. What about this one by Raikoh?

That cliffhanger...

Part of me kinda hopes twilight will slap some sense into applejack, but can't tell until the next chapter

AAaaaaand now we're about to have Rainbow Dash beat some freaking sense into Applejack.

AHA!!!  I knew they had shower sex!!!

Meh, it was bound to happen.  It's always best to be open with some things otherwise the people who tend to over react the most find out in the worst possible ways and it all gets blown to hell.

I new Applejack was a fan of fluttermac and a over protective sister, if she is angry now i can't wait to see what happen when she discover Twilight is pregnant

This is not going to end well

The fact that I've added this to my favorites should say a lot about what I think, and I hope that will softne the blow about to come. I have a mechanical nitpick that's driving me crazy: plurals and apostrophes.

Plurals should never have an apostrophe unless the plural item possess something else (The Apples' farm) or the plurals can't be written with a normal -s or -es at the end  to make them plural (dot your i's and cross your t's). Apostrophes and S's are usually reserved for possessives.

Sorry, disgruntled English teacher going to go prep for tomorrow now. Interesting story; will read on next update even if you keep doing that with the plurals.

>>12611391261139

Actually I do know about that rule, BUT I have received opposing opinions through various levels of education and jobs on whether you should actually use t.

>>12612911261291

There are some situations where one gets a bit of leeway, especially in fiction. However, there are some times when it's quite simply never ok. For example:

Twilight had suggested the swan's as replacement for the geese.

The swans don't have anything. There is no situation where that apostrophe would clear anything up (might be different if there was a character named Trumpeting Swans or something).

The Apple's? Not really standard, but I can understand it. Swan's? That's distracting.

I don't mean to be the belligerent commenter, but as someone with a degree in this stuff, when I notice small, easily fixed things like that, I feel an obligation to at least mention it.

I knew this was coming eventually, I know that both Twilight and Big Mac are probably in for a quite a bit of conflict coming from both sides, at least that's what I sense. I just hope that everyone can be happy in the end. As always another great chapter

>>12615891261589

No, that is fine. I know there are some spelling errors still.