I was dying laughing so hard. Poor Twilight and Cheerilee! Definitely not a combo I thought of, same with So curious about this! And for Applejack's reactions...she gets to hear ALL about Big Brother's sex life...bahahahaha.
Wow. Gotta agree with Rarity there, "atrocious bad luck" doesn't begin to describe it.
While this chapter was nowhere near as titillating as its immediate predecessor, I still liked it a whole lot better, because it feels more in-character and more realistic (admittedly, it does tend to dive off the opposite end of the board compared to Rarity's story, getting almost too unlucky to be believable, but unlike said chapter, it never actually takes the plunge). Back to form there, CG, hope you can keep this up.
Ouch. Gotta say, I've been accidentally injured many times in... similar circumstances, but Twi and Cheer have got to have the absolute worst luck. At least this is better than the alternative of Twi's first time being with someone who was selfish or treated her badly or something along those lines. That was my biggest worry at the end of last chapter.
Twilight is so dense and clueless sometimes... ...it's hilarious Also, way to go with almost traumatising Spike. Good thing she and Cherliee were only kissing and not doing anything more intimate
Prisoner of Asskaban? The Mammoth Cockroach, which is a bit "grown-up"? Soft and Slippery: The Wonders of Nature? Is Twilight really trying to find things in common with ponies she's never met by discussing erotic novels?
I quite enjoyed this chapter (including all of Twilight and Cheerilee's mishaps). And how adorably nerdy Twilight was. Awkward/nerdy Twilight is my favorite Twilight. I'm eagerly awaiting the Fluttermac chapter!
CheeriLight. That was the EPITOME of adorkably d'awwwkward right there. I really didn't know whether to giggle, cry, facehoof or just d'awwwww all through the text. And while I tried to do all of them, I kinda smacked myself in the nose and dropped my glasses...
Haha great stuff, Adorkable Twilight is always entertaining. Looks Like AJ is about to explode, take cover Flutters! My body is ready for the next chapter!
There's no disrespect intended in writing in a character's actual voice in a fictional story, but when writing a story it's kind of your job as a writer to give a character a "voice". Applejack's accent is one of those things that sets her apart from the others, no different from Fluttershy's stuttering or Pinkie's abuse of exclamation points. Writing her obvious accent "normally" would be simply pretending it doesn't exist, which seems more disrespectful to me.
And this is coming from someone with roots in Tennessee and Georgia.
Being a big fan of TwiLee I can say; yaaay. Super adorkable and glad it had a happy ending. Noot a fluttermac fan, but I think the next chapter will still be a lot of fun.
I have a feeling that AJ will be proud for both her bother and Flutters. I'm even thinking she will get sauper protective of Fluttershy and threaten her brother if he doesnt treat her right.
I don't imagine many ponies getting far with offering a roll in the hay with her like that. 'I told her it'd feel as good as her first time. That's when she hit me with the bookcase
847147 RR is pretty much why two of the pairings in this fic are Fluttermac and Twilee. More the latter, as I already kinda liked Fluttermac, but RR really cemented it for me and the sequel is one of the few fics I am/will anxiously follow update to update rather than wait til it's done.
847127 Here's a hint: As is fitting for somepony as.....special as Pinkie, you'll have to think outside the box a bit.
Glad everyone liked this chapter! Flutters' story on Thursday.
Wow. Cherrilee and Twilight. Did not see that coming. I had my bits on that it was Luna and didn't even THINK about Cherrilee. And I'm sure AJ will be ok that Big Mac is with at least one of her friends. The two quiet ones in Ponyville.
848086 Hades is also used as the name for the Underworld itself, depending on the source.
CG, I actually want to thank you for writing at least one of the six to have an awkward experience. I have to say, as well as it was done, Rarity's chapter kind of bugged me as being too perfect.
848216 That depends on your definition of 'perfect.' If you're just looking for raw pleasure, then sure, but if you want emotional fulfillment out of your intimate partners, Rarity's experience was about as far from perfect as possible.
Just to nitpick/reiterate how the theme of the story is each of the girls having a very different experience. =)
you are seriously unpredictable in your stories. i did not see any of the parirs comming ok, i kind of expected the fluttermac, but only because you hinted at it
848812 Yeah I know right? I mean gosh, what is WITH me, liking a popular pairing? So mainstream! Clearly I should have done exactly what YOU wanted me to do.
849319 You must love getting baseball bats to the face then, if you're here reading it!
I am very pleased with how this story is going. Keep up the good work.
.....ME GUSTA (btw yay for big mac x flutter)
and first
wow poor Twi and
this is for the yays
this is for the yays
this is for the yays:yay
I was dying laughing so hard. Poor Twilight and Cheerilee! Definitely not a combo I thought of, same with So curious about this! And for Applejack's reactions...she gets to hear ALL about Big Brother's sex life...bahahahaha.
called it!
Wow. Gotta agree with Rarity there, "atrocious bad luck" doesn't begin to describe it.
While this chapter was nowhere near as titillating as its immediate predecessor, I still liked it a whole lot better, because it feels more in-character and more realistic (admittedly, it does tend to dive off the opposite end of the board compared to Rarity's story, getting almost too unlucky to be believable, but unlike said chapter, it never actually takes the plunge). Back to form there, CG, hope you can keep this up.
Oh sweet Celestia, that was the far too close to home on adorkable first times. I can still feel the pain.
Me Gusta this to hell and back!
Big Macintosh was lay on his bed when he heard a shout that shook him to the core 'WHAT!' He knew he'd have to keep an eye open for the night
I almost forgot poor big mac he is so screwed
I alternatively went from laughing my ass off at this and facepalming at Twilight's awkwardness.
Most of the time both.
I'm glad she got the happiest ending so far though. That's always a plus.
Oh. Mah. Gawd.
IT FEELS LIKE THE FIRST TIME! IT FEELS LIKE THE VERY FIRST TIME!
Sorry, had to make that refrence
LIFEHOUSE!!!!!
Great so far.
Ouch. Gotta say, I've been accidentally injured many times in... similar circumstances, but Twi and Cheer have got to have the absolute worst luck. At least this is better than the alternative of Twi's first time being with someone who was selfish or treated her badly or something along those lines. That was my biggest worry at the end of last chapter.
Twilight is so dense and clueless sometimes... ...it's hilarious
Also, way to go with almost traumatising Spike. Good thing she and Cherliee were only kissing and not doing anything more intimate
Prisoner of Asskaban? The Mammoth Cockroach, which is a bit "grown-up"? Soft and Slippery: The Wonders of Nature? Is Twilight really trying to find things in common with ponies she's never met by discussing erotic novels?
I quite enjoyed this chapter (including all of Twilight and Cheerilee's mishaps). And how adorably nerdy Twilight was. Awkward/nerdy Twilight is my favorite Twilight. I'm eagerly awaiting the Fluttermac chapter!
CheeriLight. That was the EPITOME of adorkably d'awwwkward right there. I really didn't know whether to giggle, cry, facehoof or just d'awwwww all through the text. And while I tried to do all of them, I kinda smacked myself in the nose and dropped my glasses...
Twilight and Cheerilee are so incredibly adorkable here. It's so sweet.
I actually wanna read about their summer plans....
Yeah, Twi might be dense and clueless... but she also has entirely realistic first times. ^^()
Let's just say that *someponies* decide to arrange for such things in hotel rooms for *good reason*....
flutter mac
As soon as school lets out, I bet Twilight and Cheerilee are gonna have a do over.
Haha great stuff, Adorkable Twilight is always entertaining.
Looks Like AJ is about to explode, take cover Flutters!
My body is ready for the next chapter!
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There's no disrespect intended in writing in a character's actual voice in a fictional story, but when writing a story it's kind of your job as a writer to give a character a "voice". Applejack's accent is one of those things that sets her apart from the others, no different from Fluttershy's stuttering or Pinkie's abuse of exclamation points. Writing her obvious accent "normally" would be simply pretending it doesn't exist, which seems more disrespectful to me.
And this is coming from someone with roots in Tennessee and Georgia.
Go Fluttershy!
It's your birthday!
Not for real-realz~
Jes' fer play-play!
Yes thank you for a sweet romantic funny story
Being a big fan of TwiLee I can say; yaaay.
Super adorkable and glad it had a happy ending.
Noot a fluttermac fan, but I think the next chapter will still be a lot of fun.
I have a feeling that AJ will be proud for both her bother and Flutters. I'm even thinking she will get sauper protective of Fluttershy and threaten her brother if he doesnt treat her right.
That ending... Both of them.
So far, we have:
Applejack/Chip
RD/Derpy
Rarity/Wonderbolt
Twilight/Cheerilee
and Futter/Mac.
And I have to say. I have ABSOLUTELY no clue about who Pinkie is going to be with.
845993 Brohoof dude, same here! Then again, after Romance Reports, that's kinda my Twilight OTP
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I don't imagine many ponies getting far with offering a roll in the hay with her like that. 'I told her it'd feel as good as her first time. That's when she hit me with the bookcase
847147
RR is pretty much why two of the pairings in this fic are Fluttermac and Twilee. More the latter, as I already kinda liked Fluttermac, but RR really cemented it for me and the sequel is one of the few fics I am/will anxiously follow update to update rather than wait til it's done.
847127
Here's a hint: As is fitting for somepony as.....special as Pinkie, you'll have to think outside the box a bit.
Glad everyone liked this chapter! Flutters' story on Thursday.
Wow. Cherrilee and Twilight. Did not see that coming. I had my bits on that it was Luna and didn't even THINK about Cherrilee.
And I'm sure AJ will be ok that Big Mac is with at least one of her friends. The two quiet ones in Ponyville.
I so love fluttershy for this! so epic!
and this chapter was pretty good/clumsy
keep up the good work!
I nailed it! (to an extent)
I want a bonus chapter at the end.
WHAT HAPPENED AT THE CMC SLEEPOVER?
Dude please upload the next part soon! I bursted in to a laughing fit at the end of this chapter!
"...taken off like bats out of Hades."
Isn't Hades the god of the underworld? If came out of Hades like bats...Ugh! curse my immature and sick mind!
848086
Hades is also used as the name for the Underworld itself, depending on the source.
CG, I actually want to thank you for writing at least one of the six to have an awkward experience. I have to say, as well as it was done, Rarity's chapter kind of bugged me as being too perfect.
848216
That depends on your definition of 'perfect.' If you're just looking for raw pleasure, then sure, but if you want emotional fulfillment out of your intimate partners, Rarity's experience was about as far from perfect as possible.
Just to nitpick/reiterate how the theme of the story is each of the girls having a very different experience. =)
DUN DUN DUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUN
Can't wait for next chapter now!
Fluttermac...
How refreshing...
every time i read one of these. it's like taking a baseball bat to the face! AWESOME!
oh god i can't wait to see how AJ reacts
you are seriously unpredictable in your stories. i did not see any of the parirs comming
ok, i kind of expected the fluttermac, but only because you hinted at it
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Thanks for the grammar notes, fix'd now!
848812
Yeah I know right? I mean gosh, what is WITH me, liking a popular pairing? So mainstream! Clearly I should have done exactly what YOU wanted me to do.
849319
You must love getting baseball bats to the face then, if you're here reading it!