Wow. Had not been expecting that. I find this explanation for why Dash didn't finish flight school to be hysterical though, all things considered. I wish there had been more of a conclusion to Dash and Gilda's friendship troubles though, it felt like it had been left hanging a bit. Gilda seemed to be pretty cool with Dash when she came to visit, like they'd parted on good terms as friends, so I wonder how that went.
And if Gilda ever heard to real reason Dash had to leave. That would have been an... interesting conversation to listen in on.
806051 Gilda's story was left hanging kinda intentionally. There will be an epilogue of sorts at the end to kind of wrap up each story, more or less.
Glad you guys liked it!
806117 I usually ship Dash straight, actually. Soarin'/Dash is one of my OTPs and I'd love to write those two together at some point. But for the purposes of this story Derpy was just too entertaining an option to pass up.
806119 Awesome! I would have been disappointed in the lack of closure there if you'd never followed through (especially since AJ's story had a better sense of conclusion), but I am content to wait for the epilogue wrap-up for such things, though it would have been nice if somepony in-story had asked about it or something to acknowledge that it wasn't addressed/imply that it would be addressed in the future.
Oh, and I have to point out now that the distinct lack of mention of Gilda's roommate (when there was so much drama from Gilda over not being able to room with Dash) has led me to the conclusion that she/he has possibly suffered some terrible fate. Unless Gilda was getting laid concurrently with her roommate. Who knows.
Well, I suppose I had to read a Derpy clopfic at some point. Great chapter, by the way. Also, if you don't have an editor, I'd be more than happy to edit yer stuff. PM me if you're interested.
Wow, I feel so bad for Dash and Derpy. You did another great job with this one. This could actually fit in to the canon timeline.
Hmm, you know what would make this story 20% cooler? If Twi reveals that she's a fillyfooler too and Twidash occurs.
I'm sorry. I can never resist trying to squeeze some Twidash out of a story. Twidash is best ship (but I don't hate on other ships) and I'm a biased bastard.
So Rarity was even worse to her first (somepony we know, since you said no more OC's - why do I want to guess Filthy Rich?) than Rainbow was to Lady Bubbleflank ... interesting.
well this was an interesting chapter this was... so sad uh... dude? I'm not a lesbian Blegh! Dashie would never do that... buuuut this was very good! a little TOO many detail, don't you think? SWAGSWAGSWAGSWAG ugh, spike... oooh, Rainbow Dash Darling, you never told me of this b-beacuse I never had this... derp?
806329 You think that was bad, we actually toned it down compared to the first draft. She was downright nasty about it originally. Thank Ariamki for pointing it out and suggesting she lighten up.
806559 I'm not quite sure what you mean by 'worse' here....? In any case Rarity's story is again a fair bit different from the previous stories, both in the type of relationship and the.....content level, let's say.
808022 808874 The main thing to take away from Rarity's response to Rainbow's story is that she's completely okay with WHAT they did, but not so much WHERE they did it. If they'd been in the privacy of their own dorm room she wouldn't have cared. But since it was a public, communal shower where anypony could have walked in at any moment, well, she had something to say about it. Exhibitionism isn't her thing in this fic, regardless of what "Purely Scientific Interest" may have implied about her (if for no other reason than I didn't really imagine the two fics as canonical with one another; they COULD be I suppose, but they just as easily could not).
806203 Saw this one late, and thank you for the offer! But I do in fact already have an editor at the moment. (Not to mention a co-author, and if you've never co-authored with anyone before you'll find that you often edit for each other a lot. One thing I have a bad habit of that my coauthor catches and edits, for example, is that when I get deep into a specific character's head and the narrative becomes almost like stream of thought, I tend to start a lot of sentences with "and" and "but," which are okay if used sparingly and appropriately but for the most part are no-no's.)
806230 I know. Unexpected, but what was even more unexpected was how well it was handled. It may be competing for AppleDash as my preferred Dash pairing, now.
first we got AJ in a setting that fit her perfectly. she is the type that would want a worker like herself. then we got RD doing it with derpy ???? at first i tought it was a joke, but it turned out to be damn good. it even was something RD could do.
the best part is how you mix canon and fanon content to make it more believable. that was damn genious you earned the star. i can't wait to read the rest
The reference to how Derpy consistently uses Rainbow Dash's full name and the explanation of how Dash feels about it were what made me fave this story. I also enjoy the idea that Dash wasn't sure about her sexuality at first, and only evaluated it on a pony-to-pony basis.
.....is it me or does rarity sound like a total inconsiderate...*long line of derogative adjectives later*, bitch no one can really control when or where (for that matter) they are overcome with hot compulsive passionate sex.
well written chapter, but lesbian sex does nothing for me (not saying there is anything wrng with lesbians) strange since m/f with the female perspective are my fav
I like the titles of the chapters.
Ah man, that story is kinda sad.... And kinda unfair to Derpy and Dash, honestly.
I feel pretty sorry about what happened to them, all things told...
Wow. Had not been expecting that. I find this explanation for why Dash didn't finish flight school to be hysterical though, all things considered. I wish there had been more of a conclusion to Dash and Gilda's friendship troubles though, it felt like it had been left hanging a bit. Gilda seemed to be pretty cool with Dash when she came to visit, like they'd parted on good terms as friends, so I wonder how that went.
And if Gilda ever heard to real reason Dash had to leave. That would have been an... interesting conversation to listen in on.
Oh... That's really sad. I'm not one to harp on about OTP's, but you make me really want Dash and Derpy to make up and work things out.
806051
Gilda's story was left hanging kinda intentionally. There will be an epilogue of sorts at the end to kind of wrap up each story, more or less.
Glad you guys liked it!
806117
I usually ship Dash straight, actually. Soarin'/Dash is one of my OTPs and I'd love to write those two together at some point. But for the purposes of this story Derpy was just too entertaining an option to pass up.
806119
Awesome! I would have been disappointed in the lack of closure there if you'd never followed through (especially since AJ's story had a better sense of conclusion), but I am content to wait for the epilogue wrap-up for such things, though it would have been nice if somepony in-story had asked about it or something to acknowledge that it wasn't addressed/imply that it would be addressed in the future.
Oh, and I have to point out now that the distinct lack of mention of Gilda's roommate (when there was so much drama from Gilda over not being able to room with Dash) has led me to the conclusion that she/he has possibly suffered some terrible fate. Unless Gilda was getting laid concurrently with her roommate. Who knows.
Well, I suppose I had to read a Derpy clopfic at some point. Great chapter, by the way. Also, if you don't have an editor, I'd be more than happy to edit yer stuff. PM me if you're interested.
Wow, Rarity was a bit bitchy at the end there...
Wow, I feel so bad for Dash and Derpy. You did another great job with this one. This could actually fit in to the canon timeline.
Hmm, you know what would make this story 20% cooler? If Twi reveals that she's a fillyfooler too and Twidash occurs.
I'm sorry. I can never resist trying to squeeze some Twidash out of a story. Twidash is best ship (but I don't hate on other ships) and I'm a biased bastard.
:(
Apparently Derpy's hung like a horse.
Didn't see that one coming.
So Rarity was even worse to her first (somepony we know, since you said no more OC's - why do I want to guess Filthy Rich?) than Rainbow was to Lady Bubbleflank ... interesting.
Ooh. Completely unexpected and kind-of sad! Poor Derpy and Dashie
This was really a sad chapter... poor Derpy and Dash.
Sad, but also good. The sane excellence I've come to expect from you. Jolly good show.
well this was an interesting chapter
this was... so sad
uh... dude? I'm not a lesbian
Blegh! Dashie would never do that... buuuut this was very good!
a little TOO many detail, don't you think?
SWAGSWAGSWAGSWAG
ugh, spike...
oooh, Rainbow Dash Darling, you never told me of this
b-beacuse I never had this...
derp?
806329
You think that was bad, we actually toned it down compared to the first draft. She was downright nasty about it originally. Thank Ariamki for pointing it out and suggesting she lighten up.
806559
I'm not quite sure what you mean by 'worse' here....? In any case Rarity's story is again a fair bit different from the previous stories, both in the type of relationship and the.....content level, let's say.
Derpyyyyyyyyyy!
I'm surprised nopony called Rarity out on exhibitionism in response to her judgements.
aw man, I feel bad for derpy and dash...still a good story though, and rarity's story is gonna be awesome!!! i just know it!!!
Wasn't really expecting Derpy here, but... damn I liked this one. Far more than AJ's I have to say.
So, Rarity next, huh? I'll go get the popcorn.
We need a happy ending where every situation is resolved and everyone is satisfied.
I demand my sugur coated marshmellow ponies are satisfied!
Derpy and Dash need to get back together.
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By "worse", I mean that I felt that Rarity was admonishing Dash so strongly for her behavior, having done as much or worse to her own partner.
But yeah it´s kinda sad ending though. You have to make it up in epilogue, you totaly have to, or I just won´t be able to fall asleep anymore
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808874
The main thing to take away from Rarity's response to Rainbow's story is that she's completely okay with WHAT they did, but not so much WHERE they did it. If they'd been in the privacy of their own dorm room she wouldn't have cared. But since it was a public, communal shower where anypony could have walked in at any moment, well, she had something to say about it. Exhibitionism isn't her thing in this fic, regardless of what "Purely Scientific Interest" may have implied about her (if for no other reason than I didn't really imagine the two fics as canonical with one another; they COULD be I suppose, but they just as easily could not).
806203
Saw this one late, and thank you for the offer! But I do in fact already have an editor at the moment. (Not to mention a co-author, and if you've never co-authored with anyone before you'll find that you often edit for each other a lot. One thing I have a bad habit of that my coauthor catches and edits, for example, is that when I get deep into a specific character's head and the narrative becomes almost like stream of thought, I tend to start a lot of sentences with "and" and "but," which are okay if used sparingly and appropriately but for the most part are no-no's.)
Why do I have the sneaking suspicion a certain griffon just *might* have reported hearing noises in the showers...?
noo Poor Derpy I mean thats so sad
What did Gilda wanted to say to Dash that was so important?
806230 I know. Unexpected, but what was even more unexpected was how well it was handled. It may be competing for AppleDash as my preferred Dash pairing, now.
810785
Oh snap. I'd almost put money on this!
I might have to write a sequel to this chapter. If I decide to, I'll tell you when it's done, I've got 4 other fics I'm currently working on.
I hope derpy and RD are gonna come together again later on in the story.. LOL! now tht i look at my own words.... Pun intended
oh god this is great!
first we got AJ in a setting that fit her perfectly. she is the type that would want a worker like herself.
then we got RD doing it with derpy ???? at first i tought it was a joke, but it turned out to be damn good. it even was something RD could do.
the best part is how you mix canon and fanon content to make it more believable. that was damn genious
you earned the star. i can't wait to read the rest
This? This chapter made me fall out of my chair the second I read Derpy.
I am completely serious. My sister asked what that sound was.
820386 You and me both. In fact I had re-read it several times to make sure I read it right.
Rainbow and... Derpy?dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png
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Poor Derpy... :derpysad:
Dammit Rainbow!
Fucking make up with her and have more "consensual mating"
Edit:
Damn. Derpysad didn't work. Fuckin hate mah life.
I thought they ran away from school instead
Caught!? I'd be mortified. Rarity and I do not see eye to eye, but I'm completely on her side with this.
Don't get caught.
Totally did not expect RD x Derpy. My housemates most certainly heard me shout 'WHAT!' when I read whatever it was that clued me in. *laughs*
I drew a little picture for you...
The reference to how Derpy consistently uses Rainbow Dash's full name and the explanation of how Dash feels about it were what made me fave this story. I also enjoy the idea that Dash wasn't sure about her sexuality at first, and only evaluated it on a pony-to-pony basis.
.....is it me or does rarity sound like a total inconsiderate...*long line of derogative adjectives later*, bitch no one can really control when or where (for that matter) they are overcome with hot compulsive passionate sex.
rarity quite being a stuck up bitch
i like the story its just .... that its derpy ya know rainbow just dosn't seem like the pony to go for that
Ugh why did rainbow have to be gay seriously??
so this is why derpy is such a clutz in the air, because she never finished flight school.
still don't explain why her eyes are DERP (and for the french brony's out there PEEM )
this pony emoticon just got 20% more meaning
well written chapter, but lesbian sex does nothing for me (not saying there is anything wrng with lesbians)
strange since m/f with the female perspective are my fav