Hey there. My name's Dave; not Dave Twinkles, or Davebubble, or even Donut Dave. It's just Dave. I'm a salespony, and I live in a little town just south of Canterlot called Ponyville. If that name sounds familiar, it's because, even though Ponyville is a tiny town in the middle of nowhere, we've got something that no other town in the world has; a six little super heroines. Or, at least that's what they say...
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Interesting, I'm curious as to how this story will progress.
Keep up the good work
Interesting, indeed. Very entrancing. Will spread word.
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peep I love you.
Not sure that "interesting" was the response in general I was looking for (more like friggin' hysterical), but I'll take what I can get.
I>>785664
I also must say that you might wanna add more adjectives and excite, as it were, the title a bit, and add a picture.
that may get it a little more attention than it already is.
I love you too.
It is hysterical once you get pass the wall.
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I'm afraid I don't know what you mean by the wall
I may need to commission an image or something, but a large point of the title is how mundane the character is, so I feel that needs to stay.
Still, I appreciate the advice!
The Wall is referring to the lack of emotion in the text. This could be improved by adding adjectives, loaded words, or something of the sort.
It's a serious 
sometimes.)
example1: I went to the market.(has wall)
Example2: I rode the pink train to the Canterlot market.(wall is less foreboding)
Example2 grabs the reader's attention and demands that they read more. Example1 is more like someone glancing over a newspaper.
Still love it though, and can't wait for a new chapter.
(sorry for being critical, I also stuggle with the wall on many occasions.
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I see what you're saying, but part of the problem is that's just the style of writing; it's supposed to be as casual as possible.
Still, I suppose some more descriptive wording couldn't hurt
And don't worry about being critical, I can always use improvement!
She reports the magic of friendship to Princess Celestia
What kind of job is that?
Haha so true! Twilight is so friggin spoiled
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You make me so happy.
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Thank you! I try my best.
Also, image derped!
What is it?
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hehhhh...it is too short. Maybe he shoulda met somepony else, too. man, I missed Dave.
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It still took for fucking ever to write
I'll add another chapter or something soon. I just wrote like 3 fics worth this week.