Switched By Earth

A small family shrine on the Pie family rock farm is shifted around by a few rats. The resulting problem creates a lot of confusion.

The four marbles are out of place and the Pie sisters ultimately suddenly have new views on life.

(No this is not a crossover of any kind.)

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SuperPinkBrony12

SuperPinkBrony12 #1 · May 21st, 2016 · · · Sister Swap ·

This isn't bad, but it was kind of short. I would've liked to see more of this idea.

Mystical Rainboom

Mystical Rainboom #2 · May 21st, 2016 · 2 · · Sister Swap ·

7234428 I wasn't too sure how to advance in a reasonable way I'd be good at, but I'd love to see some other stories using the idea.

Gamer Script

Gamer Script #3 · May 21st, 2016 · 1 · · Sister Swap ·

There are a few minor spelling errors. Also, there is nothing wrong with this idea, I actually very much like the thought of the pie sisters being switched, but I think that it'd be better to elaborate further in most places of the story. Also, you've split up every sentence of the story like it was a script, but in truth, it's not. Another thing... It ended almost as soon as it began, and though you attempt to make it a comedy, there are little to no real comedic parts in it. Something funny would've been to have the sisters split up to get things for the picnic and have each of their friends meet them one at a time, as well as have confusing confrontations with background characters. This is simply my opinion and a thought I had, so please don't believe I'm trying to be harsh or overly critical. All-in-all, it's an alright story. Keep it up.

Mystical Rainboom