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PioneerofImagination


For as long as I can remember I've always had this powerful desire to make people laugh.

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The wedding is saved and the Changelings are beat but Twilight is gone. She's been gone for 3 years and now an evil organization of advanced robots called "Treble" who seek to destroy Equestria has arrived. Trixie Lulamoon the new element of magic must help the others defend their home meanwhile Cadence believes Treble is somehow connected to Twilight's disappearance and will find her no matter what.

This is a continuation of the story of the same name by Dark Colt Sabata.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/47701/grave

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Great work, it's nice to know that this story is indeed in good hands, I'm proud that you're continuing it :). The ending could have been more dramatic though, like 'The blue metallic creature looked down on them with a smile, full of determination and hope, and said,"I'm a man, a robot who's name is Rock, but I'm better known as Megaman."

Also, this line right here: Cadence then made her way to a table and crying the 3 items with magic then set them down on the table first the map followed by the monitor still showing Twilight and the book as she then turned it to a certain page showing a certain spell.

It should be carrying, not crying, also there should be a period after table so it isn't a run on sentence.

Other then that, you did a pretty darn good job ;).

7262758 I'll correct those spelling errors soon. Also oh my gosh your idea is great for my chapter ending is it okay if I use it?

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