I write horse words. Sometimes people pay me to.
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It was kind of hard to follow what was happening. This has the potential to be made into a great story, but it's very hard to follow who is who and what each character is doing. If you elaborated a little, and had a little more setup, it could be much better. A proofreader could also be helpful to determine where things don't really make sense.
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I'll probably have an editor go through in the near future, thank you for reading it though!
Alright, I'll admit, even I had trouble keeping up who was who here, but I'm proud to say I managed... I think.
I liked this just as much as your Little Pip X Calamity story, Well done here with the inner monologue again, Icey's thoughts were hilarious.
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Oh thank you! Glad to see someone who likes the inner monologue!
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