awww this chapter was seriously dissappointing.. at least in that the whole event ended so early and easily.... Surely she could have gone after RD or Fluttershy at least first as they both live outside town itself.... still interesting but i was hoping this chapter would come a bit later on...
So the rest of the main 6 may still get some kinky story time? Damn now you have my hopes up again! Really looking to see what brings it out in twilight again... and how applejack will react around her now... Though you have hinted that luna might get in on the action, still hoping to see some Twishy or dash action though.....
Could give an entirely new twist on the whole twiluna thing if luna gets involved though, don't want to see that family there die off after all...
834272 >and things shall become even more twisted and sick
After that Sweetie Belle chapter I don't if I'll be able to handle it. Well, I'll probably manage if I use enough booze. Yeah, that's the ticket. Also, has anyone told Celestia what happened? She gonna flip her shit when she finds out.
Twilight, the curse is gone. You wont loose control anymore. You wont go out and hurt other ponies again."
Should be lose. You can remember because the extra "o" in loose is loosely packed in with the other "o", while the extra "o" in lose has already been lost. Here's another:
"Spike looked as if he was about to loose whatever his stomach contents were."
And another small error. Personal pronouns aren't supposed to have apostrophes for the possessive "s". Example:
"As the princess and the dragon went about their search, Rarity went about her's."
It should be "hers" not "her's". A small error, but I thought you might like to know.
There might have been more, but that's all I got this time. Keep it up! Your stuff is fairly well edited...
Well then it at least looks clean. Maybe you don't have to edit it at all and it comes out as one solid stream of consciousness and you just have amazing typing abilities. I wouldn't know. My stuff comes out terribad and I have to go over it a billion times to make it less terribad.
So is there any possibility of AJ joining Twilight's hunts? Like as an assistant or something? Cuz at this point the only thing better than Twilight raping everypony is Twilight and a mentally scarred AJ raping everypony .
ok... so basically twi's already broken by this so now basically she's going to not control her urges or maybe a different stargazer maybe trixie will come into town and twi will have to stop her but in the end will end up getting recursed. and so then the entire town will end up getting fucked. or maybe luna gets cursed and twi's barely able to remove her endowment before getting raped by the princess. soo many ideas i'm salivating. and so now your gonna have all the cmc get raped o and make sure that the two bitches are unable to join in you know golden tiara, and silver spoon they don't deserve to know the fun joys the other mares will experience.
Forget my idea, this works great-ish. All I ask is that Twilight be allowed to see her foals. As I think about it from Applejack's reasoning, I see it like this; "How would y'all like if'n we covered yer eyes while ya gave birth, then knocked ya out soon as ya were done? That's how Twi's gonna feel." This is somewhat directed at Princess Luna.
That part made me sad. But at least there'll be more clop to distract me from it.
She'd never get to see any of her foals. I am a little confused here... Twilight will forbid to see them or Luna has cleaned pregnancy with some spell?
834413 skipping three months into the future It means, what we will not see the first meeting Twilight with AJ, Rarity or Sweetie Bell? Noooooo
You´re a horrible writer. A horrible GOOD writer. Like it was so frikking easy to enter and understand everyponys mind in this fic and making sense of it. Rarity, Spike, Big Mac, Luna, Twilight, AJ, no one felt OOC (i mean after what happend, they saw/heard/felt) and each had their reasoning which made sense for their reality. And i liked how sometimes those clashed like Rarity who wanted Twi to see locked up and Luna who felt guilty to be responisble for what the curse had done to Twi. And ofc Twilight with her confusing feelings about being a mare and a stallion at the same time.
I guess this is the end of the rape train as Twi will still have a penis but no longer is addicted/commanded by it like in book one. It will be interesting to see the reactions of her not-raped friends, of AJ, of Rarity and Spike and ofc of Sweetie Aloe and the other two mares who got pregnant by Twi´s virile large dick.
Or the old magic will come back with bravado and the rape train will continue like on drugs or something.
Can´t wait to read chapter 8 and i hope you´re already writing it.
834413 gotcha dood, all we need now is the Want it Need it spell, and this rape train will be equipped with a all you can eat buffet in the bait car, dood. (is that a decent analogy to add to this whole rape train thing ppl is talking about, dood?)
*Three months later* Luna: "Ahhhh no world ending events, no annoying diplomatic events, now I can enjoy a nice long...." *servant crashes in* servant: Princess there are more rape incidents in ponyville!!!!" Luna: The shit I have to put up with..."
I hope Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash or Derps next. A pegasi must be next! So far only earth ponies and unicorns were Twi´s targets, time to get kinky with wings and feathers.
I do think though that Twi´s friends and victims deserves to know the truth, not just Twi. After all they´ll demand answers to why Twi got a penis and became a raptist. Otherwise it wouldn´t make much sense.
I swear, every time I read the part where Twilight knows she can never see her foals, it brings me nearly to tears. I swear I am this close (). So Please, if there is any mercy in your soul, for the love of BOTH Princesses, let it not be so. PLEASE!
Edit; When I reread this part; ""And..." Twilight couldn't say it. She was already trying to hold back tears. She already knew it, even without the princess having to say it. She'd never get to see any of her foals.
'Please... I... I don't know if I can take that...'
"I'll take care of them, Twilight. You have my word.""
I don't feel like reading clop, I just feel that sad/depressed/sympathetic. I may be getting into the story too much but here's what I feel; My eyes start hurting in that peculiar way they do just before I cry, my chest feels tight and warm, and I keep feeling like crying out "no no no no NO!" Rarely if ever has an entire STORY moved me so, much less one scene. Again, I throw myself at your mercy great author, divert thyself from this course, save my heart from imminent shattering upon cruel earth! - Too much?
I DON'T WANT TO READ THIS!!! ooohhh but you do? NO I DON'T But you liked it and EVERYTHING! LEAVE ME ALONE! Not until you admit you love it! OK OK I LOVE IT! WHYWHYWHYWHYWHY!!!!!!!!!!!!
argh i keep coming back to this story... you must continue it soon! And am i the only one who has the feeling that Luna should be wanting a little Stargazer bun in her oven as well? For the good of the family line of course.....
-sighs and rubs the bridge of my nose- this does it. i believe this is the story that has made me go to pony hell. i love this story. im not ashamed to admit that i loved the twirape. well written, deprived of moral as a homeless kid deprived of a xbox or ps3. you. you my good sir/madam, im tracking. following. what ever it is that ill have to do in order to read this magnificent piece of mind fuckery.
All this text! And there's not a single bit of clop in it?
Ohh... So it's all plot. Well that's fine then.
Wait.. You don't mean that kind of plot, huh?
What the hell was I thinking?!
And thus ends Book One. Chapter 8 will mark the start of Book Two, and things shall become even more twisted and sick. Also, cloppy.
Another update? Where's the rape train stopping next? *reads*
awww this chapter was seriously dissappointing.. at least in that the whole event ended so early and easily.... Surely she could have gone after RD or Fluttershy at least first as they both live outside town itself.... still interesting but i was hoping this chapter would come a bit later on...
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Ah, you give up too easily. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_hmph.png
I never said that the story was over. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
Only that this part of the story has come to an end.
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So the rest of the main 6 may still get some kinky story time? Damn now you have my hopes up again!
Really looking to see what brings it out in twilight again... and how applejack will react around her now... Though you have hinted that luna might get in on the action, still hoping to see some Twishy or dash action though.....
Could give an entirely new twist on the whole twiluna thing if luna gets involved though, don't want to see that family there die off after all...
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>and things shall become even more twisted and sick
After that Sweetie Belle chapter I don't if I'll be able to handle it. Well, I'll probably manage if I use enough booze. Yeah, that's the ticket.
Also, has anyone told Celestia what happened? She gonna flip her shit when she finds out.
No rape? Not even a little rape?
Sorry bro but you've got to remain true to your roots.
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Well, look at it this way. Twilight's whole life just got raped by reality.
Don't worry though. I'll make up for it doubly in the next chapter.
Expect twice the rape, and twice the depravity! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Applebloom_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Cheerilee.png
End of Book One? So you are going to spawn a new fic as a sequel or is the next book going to be added chapters to this one, dood?
Inquiring Minds have to know, dood.
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Chapters adding to this one. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
I read a lot of novels where they break up the story into 'books' within the same novel. So it's actually one book, but the acts are divided up as 'Book One', 'Book Two', ect. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_rainbowderp_flip.png
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things shall become even more twisted and sick. Also, cloppy.
Shit.
How will all of Twilight's victims react to their stallion's reappearance?
What will Rarity think?
Since the foreshadowing was as thick as wet rice paper, who will Luna get down and dirty with?
What will Celestia think of her protege turned maniacal rape-train conductor?
Will the rest of the Mane 6 get any?
Will Rainbow Dash get some Rainbow Dick?
Will Pinkie Pie get Pinkie poked?
Will Fluttershy get Flutter-fucked?
Will Rarity get Rari-raped?
And will Twilight ever get rid of her malicious, monster-sized, mare hungry member?
Fine out, in the cumming(HA!) installments of... Twilight's Midnight Violations!
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Still enjoying this thing. Here's some stuff:
Twilight, the curse is gone. You wont loose control anymore. You wont go out and hurt other ponies again."
Should be lose. You can remember because the extra "o" in loose is loosely packed in with the other "o", while the extra "o" in lose has already been lost. Here's another:
"Spike looked as if he was about to loose whatever his stomach contents were."
And another small error. Personal pronouns aren't supposed to have apostrophes for the possessive "s". Example:
"As the princess and the dragon went about their search, Rarity went about her's."
It should be "hers" not "her's". A small error, but I thought you might like to know.
There might have been more, but that's all I got this time. Keep it up! Your stuff is fairly well edited...
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Will I ever do anything that you guys are expecting?
Probably not, but I like to hear you all guessing dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
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"Your stuff is fairly well edited... "
*snerk* *snort*
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Well then it at least looks clean. Maybe you don't have to edit it at all and it comes out as one solid stream of consciousness and you just have amazing typing abilities. I wouldn't know. My stuff comes out terribad and I have to go over it a billion times to make it less terribad.
excellent! i enjoy a bit of plot with my clop, if you know what i mean!
So is there any possibility of AJ joining Twilight's hunts? Like as an assistant or something? Cuz at this point the only thing better than Twilight raping everypony is Twilight and a mentally scarred AJ raping everypony .
Remember no Derpy Hooves >.> im watching you
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I promise nothing!
Aaaahahahaaa nothing stops the rape train!!
I eagerly await book two! And I applaud the prescence of storyline.
ok... so basically twi's already broken by this so now basically she's going to not control her urges or maybe a different stargazer maybe trixie will come into town and twi will have to stop her but in the end will end up getting recursed. and so then the entire town will end up getting fucked. or maybe luna gets cursed and twi's barely able to remove her endowment before getting raped by the princess. soo many ideas i'm salivating. and so now your gonna have all the cmc get raped o and make sure that the two bitches are unable to join in you know golden tiara, and silver spoon they don't deserve to know the fun joys the other mares will experience.
Fore a shameless clop fic its a pretty damn good read even when theres no clop. Cant wait for more.
Forget my idea, this works great-ish. All I ask is that Twilight be allowed to see her foals. As I think about it from Applejack's reasoning, I see it like this; "How would y'all like if'n we covered yer eyes while ya gave birth, then knocked ya out soon as ya were done? That's how Twi's gonna feel." This is somewhat directed at Princess Luna.
That part made me sad. But at least there'll be more clop to distract me from it.
So, Twilight's going to curse herself back?
...
GENIUS!
She'd never get to see any of her foals.
I am a little confused here... Twilight will forbid to see them or Luna has cleaned pregnancy with some spell?
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skipping three months into the future
It means, what we will not see the first meeting Twilight with AJ, Rarity or Sweetie Bell? Noooooo
And here I was thinking today would be boring.
Wow, that...wow.
You´re a horrible writer. A horrible GOOD writer.
Like it was so frikking easy to enter and understand everyponys mind in this fic and making sense of it. Rarity, Spike, Big Mac, Luna, Twilight, AJ, no one felt OOC (i mean after what happend, they saw/heard/felt) and each had their reasoning which made sense for their reality. And i liked how sometimes those clashed like Rarity who wanted Twi to see locked up and Luna who felt guilty to be responisble for what the curse had done to Twi. And ofc Twilight with her confusing feelings about being a mare and a stallion at the same time.
I guess this is the end of the rape train as Twi will still have a penis but no longer is addicted/commanded by it like in book one. It will be interesting to see the reactions of her not-raped friends, of AJ, of Rarity and Spike and ofc of Sweetie Aloe and the other two mares who got pregnant by Twi´s virile large dick.
Or the old magic will come back with bravado and the rape train will continue like on drugs or something.
Can´t wait to read chapter 8 and i hope you´re already writing it.
I will not lie, I was a bit worried when I read this. It felt like the end.. But then you said there would be more. I was so happy.
Happy that a rape fanfic would be continued.. Dammit you have me under your spell! I don't know if I should be worried or not.
834413 gotcha dood, all we need now is the Want it Need it spell, and this rape train will be equipped with a all you can eat buffet in the bait car, dood. (is that a decent analogy to add to this whole rape train thing ppl is talking about, dood?)
On one hand I'm sad there's no clop.
On the other, I'm very excited for this to continue.
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*Three months later* Luna: "Ahhhh no world ending events, no annoying diplomatic events, now I can enjoy a nice long...." *servant crashes in* servant: Princess there are more rape incidents in ponyville!!!!" Luna: The shit I have to put up with..."
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Sex getting repetitive?
Surely you must be joking! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Twilight_Sparkle.png
Just ask any married couple dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png
I hope Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash or Derps next. A pegasi must be next! So far only earth ponies and unicorns were Twi´s targets, time to get kinky with wings and feathers.
I do think though that Twi´s friends and victims deserves to know the truth, not just Twi. After all they´ll demand answers to why Twi got a penis and became a raptist. Otherwise it wouldn´t make much sense.
That's messed up.
I swear, every time I read the part where Twilight knows she can never see her foals, it brings me nearly to tears. I swear I am this close (). So Please, if there is any mercy in your soul, for the love of BOTH Princesses, let it not be so. PLEASE!
Edit; When I reread this part; ""And..." Twilight couldn't say it. She was already trying to hold back tears. She already knew it, even without the princess having to say it. She'd never get to see any of her foals.
'Please... I... I don't know if I can take that...'
"I'll take care of them, Twilight. You have my word.""
I don't feel like reading clop, I just feel that sad/depressed/sympathetic. I may be getting into the story too much but here's what I feel; My eyes start hurting in that peculiar way they do just before I cry, my chest feels tight and warm, and I keep feeling like crying out "no no no no NO!" Rarely if ever has an entire STORY moved me so, much less one scene. Again, I throw myself at your mercy great author, divert thyself from this course, save my heart from imminent shattering upon cruel earth! - Too much?
Man....I have no idea where this is going next.....
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I have no soul. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
HA dis slaps me on de knee
Make Twilight lure Derpy with muffins... make it ironic.
i literally danced when this chapter came out but wait no clop!? i guess i can wait wait how twisted is it gonna get please dont go overboard with it
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I DON'T WANT TO READ THIS!!! ooohhh but you do? NO I DON'T But you liked it and EVERYTHING! LEAVE ME ALONE! Not until you admit you love it! OK OK I LOVE IT! WHYWHYWHYWHYWHY!!!!!!!!!!!!
seems lagit
WHY DO I LIKE THIS? THE STORY IS ADDICTING AND WELL WRITTEN.
I cannot wait for Book 2.
I feel like such an awful person.
842675 yup its gonna get crazy isnt it
argh i keep coming back to this story... you must continue it soon! And am i the only one who has the feeling that Luna should be wanting a little Stargazer bun in her oven as well? For the good of the family line of course.....
Reading now. I am going to go to pony hell for this.
-sighs and rubs the bridge of my nose- this does it. i believe this is the story that has made me go to pony hell. i love this story. im not ashamed to admit that i loved the twirape. well written, deprived of moral as a homeless kid deprived of a xbox or ps3. you. you my good sir/madam, im tracking. following. what ever it is that ill have to do in order to read this magnificent piece of mind fuckery.
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Only on chapter 2? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_rainbowderp_flip.png
You ain't seen nothing yet dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
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Too tired. Will finish chapter 8 tomorrow. Coma now.