My my this did catch my interest i wish to see where this is going, but as a reader try not to dwell into murdering the victims afterwords I know its just my opinion but it just puts a sour taste in the back of my mouth thinking about it. Otherwise good read.
It needs more Rainbow Dash, and please don't make her lesbian like in don't have homophobia but I like to call myself RD soo make her by-sexual, because I will say please..........PLEASE Ow and love the story, I will follow a story for first time
>The sun had started it's slow slide >and it seemed to move to it's own devices When used possessively, "its" does not have an apostrophe
Tense: >Twilight giggles quietly to herself >Eventually, however, it all slowly subsides
"of" in place of "have": >Twilight would of been amazed at this startling reaction >but that would of spoiled the surprise >it could of been a lot worse >But the doctor didn't seem to of heard her
"Y'all sure had us worried for a sec there, sugarcube."
Use: Ya = you
Y'all = you all. ____________________________________
Her trip to dream land was delayed as she heard the door to her room opening. With a sigh she slowly opened her eyes only to see Spike just reaching the top of the stairs, his old basked held in front of him.
Yes, please! I can't wait to read this. Nothing says win like, 'I'mma gonna be rapin' ya Twilight'. Let's hope it lives up to my expectations.
As a side note, there aren't going to be any stallions involved, right? RIGHT!?
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To quote another infamous clop-fic....
"The stallion has been.... provided for..."
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Also, no Spike, too, right? Not trying to push any way or anything, but -hint hint-
Ch2 nao plz
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Nah. He'll be involved, but he's not in Twilight's sights. She has a very particular reason for all this.
And I'm working on it
My body is ready.
Do it.
You've got my attention.
My my this did catch my interest i wish to see where this is going, but as a reader try not to dwell into murdering the victims afterwords I know its just my opinion but it just puts a sour taste in the back of my mouth thinking about it. Otherwise good read.
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So, in a nutshell, It's "Princess Molestia" With Twilight doing the molesting.
It needs more Rainbow Dash, and please don't make her lesbian like in don't have homophobia but I like to call myself RD soo make her by-sexual, because I will say please..........PLEASE Ow and love the story, I will follow a story for first time
Also
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OMFG!...
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lol, don't suppose Spike will be caught? It would make sense seeming as he always with her! :3
How close are you to chapter two?
And, who was the tawny earth pony?
I can't guess D:
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yeah...i totally didn't see that coming after reading the discription
Candlestick knew there was nothing to worry about, that her home town was safe, even in the dead of night
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*Updated Comment*
Well.. Well... Well..... We meet again rape
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If you can't guess I would be Pinkie Pie in this
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Dam i wouldnt mind if twilight raped me XD
I am tracking out of sheer curiousity. I wanna see where this heads.
Tracking. Can't wait where this's gonna end up
I had to stop at the beginning to find out what color milk and orange juice made...
am I missing something? I saw nothing I herd from the comments.....
theres no clop i chapter 1! how can this be a shameless clop fic if theres no clop in chapter 1?!?! i'm looking forwards to more
General errors:
>Spike old basket was starting
>The sun had started it's slow slide
>and it seemed to move to it's own devices
When used possessively, "its" does not have an apostrophe
Tense:
>Twilight giggles quietly to herself
>Eventually, however, it all slowly subsides
"of" in place of "have":
>Twilight would of been amazed at this startling reaction
>but that would of spoiled the surprise
>it could of been a lot worse
>But the doctor didn't seem to of heard her
>Covered in posters and questionable pictures
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>Smoke filling her lungs
HEY! Smoking is bad for you! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Twilight_Sparkle.png
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Now, just what fic are you quoting there, hm? Also, followed.
EDIT: My mind is telling me that's from Peppy's story, but I read too much; can't keep it all straight.
Well...Twilight has gone crazy. *grabs a sword* TIME TO GO AND KILL SOME PONIES!
I hate it when writers don't read over their own writing. This thing is filled with spelling and grammatical errors.
Use:
Ya = you
Y'all = you all.
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basket
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Interesting fic, I'll read more tomorrow.
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Why are so many people giving this downvotes?
He's just pointed out two minor corrections. The note on "y'all" is also correct. It's a contraction of the words "you all".
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Can confirm I live in Texas this is right