Jason Brolly was a human child one who has gone throw grate pain, so grate hi soul had broken into 8 pieces and each has a mind of its own.
Twilight Sparkle and her friends are asked to take care of a young colt who had gone through grate agony. great enough that he had chosen that to be his name well one of 8 names she doesn't know what the colt has gone throgh but she has tasked herself to get throw his mental defenses who call them selves the 7 sins and connect with the boy. is she up to the task?
needs an help dont know were i was going with this and i lost my notes
Chapters (3)
This is a great contender for this weeks Worst Fic... and it's only Monday.
Hoo boy... Awful grammar, spelling mistakes, wrong tags (lacks Human for one).
"needs an editor/proofreader" No, you need to learn how to write. Try a proofreading software. Read a dictionary. Just don't expect someone to come and clean your mess up for you, you lazy bum. That's not what editors or proofreaders are for. They exist to polish your writing, and you can't polish a...
7179663 wana take a guess on why its badly done oh if you really want to see a bad one check my first one
Welp, and I thought I was terrible. Isseus already pointed out the flaws, I can't really add anything more.
I like it it's only your second but I'm already hooked can't wait for update you get a like and a follow and fav
7187407 thank you
Yay update day after read best day