Cadence thought her relationship with Shinning Armor would never falter. But it did.
At the same time the Apples are visiting to sell more pies.
And a certain a certain green coated Apple can help with that.
An absurd individual who like ponies.
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I would like t know what happened with shining
7218091 Ok! Good to know!
This has potential but needs work. You've really got to watch out for typos, especially when it comes to characters' names. Granny and Cadence were pretty OOC too. On which note, Granny's dialect and accent was almost entirely missing from the fic. Overlooking that, though, it was still pretty bland. It went nowhere—even by oneshot standards—and could easily have been summarised into 100 words as opposed to 1,000. For this sort of thing to work, you either need deep emotional trauma or an ongoing storyline really.
Sorry to be so negative, but I hope my comment'll help you improve.
7218271 Thank you. To be totally honest, I kind of rushed this story out. And there's certain characters that I'm just bad at writing for. I'll definitely be working on editing this.
7218288
I'm glad to hear it!
I can dig it.
7218545 I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Great idea. The execution needs a lot of work. Not much more can be said that has already been said.
I shall follow you, in hopes for the better.