Waking up as a strange alien bug was certainly not something Thornton ever expected to happen. And yet, that was just the circumstance he found himself in when he and his family awoke one morning with strange new bodies in a strange new world.
Radiant Dawn thought that she was ready for anything when she volunteered to make first contact on behalf of Equestria. But is all the preparation in the world enough when she has to face the unexpected?
You are a newly spawned changeling queen. It is your job to establish and care for your hive. Will you be subtle or hunt for love? Will you find allies among other changelings hives and ponies or conquer them all? A comment driven story
"The ambient noises, he was used to by this point."
The syntax of this sentence is a little weird, and makes it hard to understand. It almost feels like a fragment. I think you would be better off using "He was used to the ambient noises by this point" since it flows more naturally, and is less jarring when read in the context of the paragraph. Especially if you combine it with the following sentence in this manner: "He was used to the ambient noises by this point, rumbling wheels on the track, pathetic hugging of a damaged, pony-assisted engine, all of that was in the background now."
Alternatively you could try: "The ambient noises; he was used to them by this point." Although it still feels a little awkward given the surrounding sentences. Sorry about editing, I don't normally but I kept thinking about that one sentence as I was reading the rest of the chapter. Anyways, seems like this is going to be interesting, can't wait to see the next chapter
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"The ambient noises, he was used to by this point."
The syntax of this sentence is a little weird, and makes it hard to understand. It almost feels like a fragment. I think you would be better off using "He was used to the ambient noises by this point" since it flows more naturally, and is less jarring when read in the context of the paragraph. Especially if you combine it with the following sentence in this manner: "He was used to the ambient noises by this point, rumbling wheels on the track, pathetic hugging of a damaged, pony-assisted engine, all of that was in the background now."
Alternatively you could try: "The ambient noises; he was used to them by this point." Although it still feels a little awkward given the surrounding sentences.
Sorry about editing, I don't normally but I kept thinking about that one sentence as I was reading the rest of the chapter. Anyways, seems like this is going to be interesting, can't wait to see the next chapter