This is the tale of T.J., an average guy with a very unusual problem. He is a Wanderer. Like a Traveler, he has strange powers and is practically immortal. Unlike a Traveler, he has no choice of where or when he goes. Join him and his companion Umbra as they try to figure out what their supposed to do in a land of magical, talking, marshmallow ponies, and avoid causing havoc where ever they go.
This is my 1st fanfic, so don't hold back your criticism.
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In my read later list. I'll be sure to get back to ya!
Well... that was certainly interesting... and I like it! Will read part 2 soon, and I'm sure I will say continue... Few errors here and there... but I will track this!
Surprised nopony else has commented on this...
1007758 Would you mind pointing out the errors? Thanks for the watch and fav.
1010128 When I find a minute or two, I'll send ya the errors I find in a PM. Also, no problem!
I doth like thy story!
1019370dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png We doth thank thee for thine assistance in bettering our tale and for thy complement.
1019431 Thou art welcome! I doth believe I hath found a minute of mine time to better thy tale! Prepareth for a message typed by mine own hooves!
Seriously though, just give me a second to go back over the first chapter, 
Hello!
I was just browsing stories and this Story just caught my eye!
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My hooves have volunteered to write this for my brain (Because my brain can't write
It's a very interesting story! I shall track this story closely!
you have a good plot! can't wait to see what happens next!
There's 'in medias res' and there's THIS.
THIS is you dropping two characters who apparently know each other into Equestria, showing us that they know each other and are capable of telepathy, and are in new bodies. And are okay with this.
And then Rainbow Dash apparently finds them and acts brash and tells them to come out and still I'm left with not much.
I'm left confused, somewhat left out, and without much motivation to learn more. So I'm not going to. I'm going to stop reading and look for a story whose intro will suck me in more.
I just figured that I'd make this comment so that you knew this and understood why I'm doing this, so that you can make an introduction that's more compelling next time.
5563806 Thanks for the feedback, I'll try to put together a better introductory chapter. To be honest, the first few chapters are kinda rushed, and I'm really just making this up as I go; I've got only the barest bones of a plot and the beginnings of an ending swirling about in my mind. This was originally intended to be the last story in a series; as I got done with each story, I'd start on the previous one, working my way back to T.J.'s origins. Looking back, I can see that I was stupidly ambitious to even think of doing such a thing. Again, thank you for the feedback; I can't improve if I don't know what I'm doing wrong. I'll make it my priority to patch the gaping holes I've left in my story.