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Closer-To-The-Sun


You gotta kick at the darkness until it bleeds daylight.

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"The lights go out, I am all alone./All the trees outside are buried in the snow./I spend my night dancing with my own shadow,/And it holds me and it never lets me go." -Of Monsters And Men, 'Slow And Steady'

In the early, snow-covered morning, Rarity goes out to find her friend and apologize for how she acted. While she is repentant, will her apology be accepted?


Written for Everfree Northwest's Scribblefest 2016.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 5 )

very heart warming and beautiful! you captured both rarity and applejack beautifully! kudos and well done on this fine one shot!!

Hello there! I've reviewed this story on my blog. You can find my review here. Thanks for the read!

7021117 Thanks for taking the time for the review! I understood where you are coming from on your review, and you raised some good points in your review. I guess I'm just a creature of habit and need to take my time with editing and rereading.

Thanks again and hope you enjoyed!

Echoing previous review. This one really needs some editing to smooth out all the verb tense issues (among other things). I did my best to ignore them and push through, but the constant switching made it a quite fatiguing read. :applejackunsure:

7110400 I understand, but I finally got some free time, and my friend was able to help me out, and we fixed it up. Hopefully it should be a more enjoyable read.

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