Another human tossed into another Equestria. Hey, it happens sometimes. Our hero adjusts well enough and just wants to disregard mares and acquire treasure. But he soon discovers that in this land, the guys are treated a little differently.
There was a loud piercing cackle as a Pony rose from within the cauldron's interior in a flowing glob of shadow. Jet black with long, scraggly black hair and what appeared to be a set of goat horns, the creature raised its hooves. "Ahhh! After ten thousand years I'm free! It's time to conquer Eques-" Spike quickly slammed the lid down on the creature. The cauldron rocked a back and forth a couple times then was still.
"Th..thanks, Spike. They really ought to review their containment procedures here."
Instead of her own reflection, Twilight saw a shadowy shifting entity within the mirror. Two red eyes blazed from the darkness as it watched her. Her mouth dropped open and she began to walk toward it in a dreamlike daze, eyes dilating until she had almost no pupils left.
That should either be 'eyes constricting' if you meant the black part of her eyes were getting too small to see or 'almost no iris left' if you meant the colored part was being overtaken by the size of her pupils. As written, it currently says that her pupils got larger until they were too small to see.
Still reading through everything else, think it's a little cliche to use Trixie as an artifact seeking villain, but I understand your reticence to use an OC. I do like the idea of having to repeatedly deal with the hazards of fighting near so many cursed items, adds character to the fight scene, but I didn't like how it felt like it was primarily the heroes that were inconvenienced. An unfair distribution of hampering would have worked fine with an opponent portrayed as having extensively studied the vault's contents, and therefore knowing what to avoid, but Trixie was frantically searching through a catalog when they arrived, making it seem like contrivance that the battlefield favored her, rather than the fruition of intelligent planning on her part.
So, Trixie is the bad guy in this? I'll pass.
I'm tempted to upvote for Rita Repulsa alone... but I'll keep reading.
Secure Containment Procedures (AKA, "SCP") reference? Awesome!
That should either be 'eyes constricting' if you meant the black part of her eyes were getting too small to see or 'almost no iris left' if you meant the colored part was being overtaken by the size of her pupils. As written, it currently says that her pupils got larger until they were too small to see.
Still reading through everything else, think it's a little cliche to use Trixie as an artifact seeking villain, but I understand your reticence to use an OC. I do like the idea of having to repeatedly deal with the hazards of fighting near so many cursed items, adds character to the fight scene, but I didn't like how it felt like it was primarily the heroes that were inconvenienced. An unfair distribution of hampering would have worked fine with an opponent portrayed as having extensively studied the vault's contents, and therefore knowing what to avoid, but Trixie was frantically searching through a catalog when they arrived, making it seem like contrivance that the battlefield favored her, rather than the fruition of intelligent planning on her part.
omg.....craced up at the power rangers reference lol......now zordon appearance mandatory