Sunburst is thrilled to be learning in Canterlot, even under the direct tutelage of Princess Celestia herself. But he's struggling with his secrets. As he tries to get up the bravery to ask Celestia for a favor, he struggles with keeping his friendship with Starlight Glimmer in tact in spite of the distance and the truth he's keeping from her.
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Its an interesting read. Not really fan of gender-swap but its okay. I like it so far.. But I recommend you do your chapters longer. I like the idea and all. I will recommend it.
I'll give you an 8-10
Good start I wonder though could Sunburst actually be sunset shimmer's brother? Has anyone noticed the resemblance ?
Hmm.... I'm intrigued. Go on.
OMG! That just blew my mind what you did there. Sunny? Really!?! Now you have my attention!
Please PM me when you get the next chapter out!
Well, I can already see how this plays into the shows/movies story line. Well done, if not then it was a good diversion.
That letter was quite sad to read. I've heard stories of people having trouble identifying themselves and feeling trapped in their own bodies based on how they feel versus how they look. I can see how the fear 'she' has telling her parents when it's such a fundamental part of not only herself, but something she clearly fears her parents won't agree with.
But I can see how Star goes nuts afterwards. Or at least I have theories.
keep the chapters coming. But if I may, a tiny suggestion?
It would be a bit easier if you could please double space the paragraphs. If it's not too much trouble. Just a slight mechanical improvement I feel would make this a lot better. I hope you don't think me rude...
Also please tell me when the next chapter comes out and thanks for letting me know!
6901806 everyone at first was convinced Starlight was the daughter of Twilight and Sunset for a while. But i can see that too.
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Thanks for the tip! I'll see if I can figure out how to do that from now on. I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far!
6909359 Oh that's easy. Just hit enter twice instead of once after every paragraph and voila!
Double spaced!
6908610 woah that would be so cool if that were true story idea !
Haha, well, looks like this is officially an alternate universe, now! Not that I mind-I absolutely adore canon Sunburst! Adding the au tag up now!