A Message Written in Light and Shadow

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After Twilight returns from the "Humble and Penitent Trixie's Equestrian Apology Tour" with Trixie and Starlight, she apologizes to Celestia for all that had happened. Then, Spike rushes into the room to inform them that something very strange has happened: A mysterious entity has just left a bizarre message in the library. Now, it is up to the five of them to decipher the message, along with who could have left it.

(Also featuring Princess Luna)

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CatStar The Fourth

CatStar The Fourth #2 · May 15th, 2016 · · ·

Wait, will there not be moar?
But but, I want moar!

Z-blade Gracin

Z-blade Gracin #3 · May 16th, 2016 · · ·

7217793 Don't worry, there will be more. I'm planning on making this a series of short stories, all of them as sequels to each other. So, there's plenty more to come!

CatStar The Fourth

CatStar The Fourth #4 · May 16th, 2016 · 1 · ·

7219457

*GASP*
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Swashbucklist

Swashbucklist #5 · May 22nd, 2016 · 1 · ·

“Princess Celestia,” she turned, “do you know anything about this?”
Celestia shook her head.
“I do not. All this is as puzzling to me as it is to you.”

Major props for how amazingly in-character she is. Bravo!

The four of them scoured through every book in the library, leaving no page unturned.

Twilight, Spike, Princess Celestia, Starlight, and Trixie. That's five.

She pointed to an area where the pointed tip of the glowing orange petal was pointing, about a foot from the flower’s center.

I have a very pointed remark to make about the repetition in this sentence, but I'm sure I don't need to make it.

“I’m sure they still are, Spike. Dragonlord Amber is not a bad dragon, and I’m sure there are many others like her.”

Yes, Ember is so great that Twilight can't even get her name right.

“Perhaps Amber knows more about it!” Spike exclaimed excitedly.

Nor can Spike.

Z-blade Gracin

Z-blade Gracin #6 · May 22nd, 2016 · · ·

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Twilight, Spike, Princess Celestia, Starlight, and Trixie. That's five.

Well, technically, Celestia wasn't searching the books. While they were searching, Celestia was looking at the writing on the floor. But yes, you do have a point.

I have a very pointed remark to make about the repetition in this sentence, but I'm sure I don't need to make it.

*Sheepish grin* Yeah, ha, ha! I tend to do that a lot. Sorry. I'll be sure to edit that.

Yes, Ember is so great that Twilight can't even get her name right.

Nor can Spike.

No, no, no! That was my fault! I somehow thought that her name was Amber instead of Ember. Sorry, I'll be sure to edit that, too.

Thanks for the feedback! Most appreciated!

Luna Nightshade

Luna Nightshade #7 · Jun 16th, 2016 · 1 · ·

Hmm, it seems to be a nice idea. Though there are some parts that should be either more drawn out or changed a bit. Still it shows that you have a big idea and that this could become a long story with lots of adventure. It seems like a good and interesting idea and I would like to see where it is going. For the writing itself - it is good, but can be improved on (For example, the entrance of Luna you describe concern in one sentence and end it in the next, where you could have written her inner thoughts, why she is there (namely Celestia forgetting to raise the sun) and such things).

Z-blade Gracin