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MyLittleGeneration


Don't let people stop you from using creativity. Some may be bad, some may be dreadful, but that's the thing with creativity. You create ways to make it even better. That's the creative truth.

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Art by NekoJackun!

There's no NekoJackun on this site...

7084672 Well, on derpibooru/deviantart

7084719 What's their FimFiction account name?

7084731 I don't know. I don't think he has one.

What do I think will happen?

Sonata and Aria will really flub making it romantic and impressive, and instead Adagio just flat up seduces him.

My only comment really is that is this that if you'd going to follow a story point keep the names and such constraint. It kinda changed between story's and that can throw people off.

But all and all great writing a few grammer issues but great otherwise.

7182478 Well, I did say in a chapter in my story before this (which is deleted because I realized I can't have that chapter out because it adds nothing) that I changed some things, as I felt that 2nd person is kinda strange, and a guy PM'd me through it, saying how it's better off having no 2nd person. So, yeah, things drastically changed.

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That's cool but a heads up in the author notes at the beginning might helpsome people.

I see you switched "second-person Anon" to "first-person Brian"

"Where?" you asked.

Except here.

Also, does Brian not have any parents?

edit: Also also, tracking for news of the sequel.

7191935 Yup. Kind of a... strange thing I did. Also, thanks for following this story! :twilightsmile: Hopefully thought comes strong for the next one.

Aria gonna do it, kids?
Aye aye, captain!
I can't hear you!
AYE AYE, CAPTAIN!

I had to. Stuck in my head for too long.

Twerking on dicks isn't really something that couples do... or at least none that I know of.

Good story though.

Well, two down, one to go.

I smiled back. "Alright." She inserted the two bills in the machine, making two people available to play. She looked at the screen, wondering what song to play. "This one!" She pressed on the song 'Stamp On The Ground'. "This is gonna be fun! Eeeeee!"

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