Negotiations

MNegotiations Part II: Third Party
MLP: FiM
Romance
Celestia and Chrysalis have been having some fun with each other for some time and now feel that Luna should join in the fun as well.
Sex
Anthro
Alt. Universe
Celestia
Luna
Chrysalis
Dark Tail · 6.3k words · 53 8 · 2k views

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nioniosbbbb

nioniosbbbb #1 · Jan 9th, 2016 · 3 · ·

Oh wow. Your first time on this site and you write a clopfic? Wow you got guts.

Narasu Tyrule

Narasu Tyrule #2 · Jan 9th, 2016 · · ·

A few simple mistakes, but. Well done. I've certainly seen worse.
*clap* *clap* *clap*

Sigmacipher

Sigmacipher #3 · Jan 9th, 2016 · · ·

Peace through constant fucking...nice...

Grasshopper Keller

Grasshopper Keller #4 · Jan 10th, 2016 · 1 · ·

To Dark Tail! *hands out a cookie* Here! Have a cookie! For what you've written!

nioniosbbbb

nioniosbbbb #5 · Jan 10th, 2016 · · ·

6819908 me too... kinda.

Dark Tail

Dark Tail #6 · Jan 10th, 2016 · · ·

6819908

One assumes this is an alt account.

Unsure if I should take that as a complement or not.

TGnPT

TGnPT #7 · Jan 10th, 2016 · · ·

6816595 Plenty of people write clop as their first submission.

nioniosbbbb

nioniosbbbb #8 · Jan 10th, 2016 · · ·

6820719 I am sure but the guts are real regardless.

Madman The Mad

Madman The Mad #9 · Jan 11th, 2016 · · ·

That was pretty sexy, and rather well written, for a first timer. From one new writer to the other, I wish you the best of luck in your writing endeavors.

Dark Tail

Dark Tail #10 · Jan 11th, 2016 · · ·

6821608 Thanks. Good luck to you as well.

NoLongerSober

NoLongerSober #11 · Jan 11th, 2016 · · ·

It was like treasure, one that the queen could not wait to enjoy. Celestia licked her lips before diving right in.

Wait, wut?

Dark Tail

Dark Tail #12 · Jan 11th, 2016 · · ·

6823146 Good catch. I need a proof reader.

Razzy

Razzy #13 · Jan 12th, 2016 · · ·

6816619 I think you meant *clop* *clop* *clop*

That was nice. I think Celestia really likes negotiating now.

Cya
Raziel-chan

Narasu Tyrule

Narasu Tyrule #14 · Jan 12th, 2016 · · ·

6824961
No, I mean clap. I'm applauding your story.

Milky Dreams

Milky Dreams #15 · Jan 13th, 2016 · · ·

You could use a proofreader, but it's a good start nonetheless.
The sexual acts could use more detail though.

Dark Tail

Dark Tail #16 · Jan 13th, 2016 · · ·

6829905 Already found a proof reader for my next one, and I will work on detail as well. I just finished my second story yesterday and waiting for it to be submitted. Does it normally take a about a day or so?

Milky Dreams