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Awesome keep up the good work!
you did discord pretty well
Man you're really pumping these out! You go girl!
Welp, that was a good chapter.
This chapter was particularly excellent. I like the way Aeron tried to handle Discord the first time.
This was an awesome chapter and I really liked how you changed the scene when Discord gets blasted but above all else the Transformers reference was awesome and made me fall on the floor laughing. Keep up the great work!
So as to why discord just sat there You should check out this story: "Just dodge " very funny and provides a satisfying explanation as to why discord basically surrendered.
Well...we know they have projector technology from "Hurricane Fluttershy" when Rainbow was showing how Cloudsdale retrieved water from local reservoirs.
sure there is. Hydrofluoric acid would fit that description nicely.
or maybe tire him with tomfuckery?
And he said HEY. WHATS GOING ON.
Sweet!!! Another update! So nice to have more of this story. I just love it.
Huzzah.
I see what you midnighted there, O Author.
Discord as a living embodiment of a force of nature.
Not evil. Not crazy (maybe.) He just is chaos.
I really like this view of Discord and look forward to reading more of your take on him.
Good chapter!
Great chapter all around! I felt like it was much weaker than other chapters at times, particularly with many of Discord's scenes, but much of the chapter also felt very strong in terms of character and story.
I'd be inclined to agree with your author's note in regards to your writing with Discord. He just felt... off. He was, in my opinion, too angry and stone-faced. He doesn't really need to be witty just sort of jovial. Don't get me wrong, what you wrote for him wasn't too bad, after all he is quite a challenge to write.
It is difficult to write visual jokes into stories, no doubt. I'd recommend using more jokes in the dialog and possibly meta jokes in the narration. Essentially, you have to have any visual jokes; short and concise. They have to keep with the flow of the narrative so it doesn't feel clunky or obtrusive.
I honestly dislike calling them the elements of harmony sometimes. I feel they're more in line with order than they are with harmony. If that were the case then it would use a blend of both order and chaos to mend balance. The way the equestrian universe function Discord is right, there is an over abundance of order in the world. There might be a chance that The Royal Sisters are using the Everfree Forest to fool the tree of harmony though. By surrounding it with an environment that is filled with vastly more chaos than order, they are making the elements lean more towards order and using that to make the rest of the world ordered, while the tree still senses an overwhelming amount of chaos.
Well, looks like i have a new theory behind why the Everfree forest is aloud to exist.
In the words of our misstress and savior, rainbow dash. "SO AWESOME!!!"
Despite your doubts you portrayed discord pretty well and added new flare to an old episode. And i feel you did do him justice. Plus you gave him the right amount of odd ball we know and love as well as a more serious/meaner version. I'd say you are in the goldilocks zone between show discord and say, "The lost element" discord up untill the end of his arc.
This right here! Was a great way to end a book in a series. A great origin, a twist or two as well as good foreshadowing. Not that I want it to end, it just sets things up for a new chapter with a different theme. Besides, it looks like there are others working behind the curtain. Looking forward to more.
The only part that irked me was when Aeron was introducing himself to the main six and spike. It seemed too Gary stu for me and wasnt enjoyable to read. Otherwise I'm rather okay with your portrayal of Discord, there wasn't anything wrong with it at all and I feel it matched his personality quite well. Also as a personal note, Aeron should totally mention to Applejack that one of her trees saved him.
(Snerk) Ya big silly, little blobs don't hula. They MAMBO!
Great chapter, nice way to bust Aeron out of the slammer
I figured Discord did not sit and let himself be hit because of what Aeron said to revive his sense of sense of fear.
Aeron made Discord feel confused, and doubtful, and slow, and reminded him of the stone experience while Discord was unleashing crude chaos in an effort to distance himself from that memory.
Aeron asked Discord to wake up.
Discord woke up.
GG Aeron, you played yourself, got the girls electrocuted, and maybe ruined the reformation this timeline.
Somehow Aeron was just pissing me off this chapter
Yeah, I personally think Discord, Zecora, and the Apple Family are the hardest to write about.
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Forget that weak stuff. Go for fluoroantimonic acid... or, even more appropriate, the slightly weaker magic acid.
I enjoyed this chapter immensely. I loved the universal greeting
That was awesome!~ I also like how you managed to write pretty much all the characters true to form, but more realistic than a cartoon. That is not an easy feat, so don't cut yourself short. Especially with Q, I mean Discord, I thought you pulled him off quite well, and the bits behind the scene with the sisters really worked. To the degree that I believe something like that could have actually happened, but just wasn't shown on the cartoon.
In any event, waiting with baited breath for the next chapter :)
Have a seal of approval!
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7465595 End of Evergreen Heart: Season One. Evergreen Heart: Season Two is green lighted for writing.
You did really well in this chapter.
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I agree the elements are definitely more of an order thing... or at least how they are usually portrayed thankfully there are quite a few fanfictions that address this issue... then again there are some that make it worse...
Well this was certainly a interesting chapter.
I would agree... if that were the only instance of canon Equestria having such technology.
There are at least two other moments that aren't during songs, one where Rainbow Dash talks about a movie, and another where we actually get to watch one in-universe:
7465720 ya hit me right in the childhood and I loved it
7465856 oh yeah, id forgotten about those two. but it does prove my point. the technology is used so infrequently it might as well not exist at all. I actually like to think ponies prefer plays over movies. it somehow seems to fit more with the overal aestetic and technology level of the show. which is inconsistent at the best of times.
too bad he did not leave him with 2 gifts one a plant that changes color and shape at random times (bit of a olive branch) and the 2nd being a earwurm that gos a bit like this
Oh boy more please.
7465897 Even so, the fact that movies are at least prevalent enough in Equestria that their existence is common knowledge means that his explanation of what cartoons are should have been met with something like:
Spike: Ooooh, you mean like a movie!
Aeron: Wait, you guys have movies?
Spike: Well yeah, but they're still kinda a new thing, not to mention pretty expensive, so... (shrugs)
Aeron: ...Huh.
7465923 I guess that would have worked too.
“If you can do that, you will find not one, but two friends on that day. Think about it.”
Also, I'm from the future and you end up marrying Fluttershy, but let's keep that between just us, ay, old chap?
:discord: O_O
:Celestia: O_O
:Luna: *clops her hooves together* "squeeee!"
7465954 hahaha oh that would have made a fun omake
I really like that Aeron tried to talk to Discord, and that he saw him for what he truley was and not some power crazy elder god that needed to be destroyed.
to me he is now talking in his core form.
In a way, while tellim him that, he could change something, because Discord would maybe start to form a plan, which he maybe wouldn't have done without knowing he had a chance.
To be fair, he doesn't knows for sure that he get's to be free, but he could have given him that idea.
My opinion on Discord is not fully clear, yes I like him, but in most chases he is never going to be my favourite. My favourite Villains where
NIghtmare, Chrysalis and Starlight, however I'm not to sure about Nightmare, because from the show itself me being excited about what I saw is gone, since it was kind of fast and only to start the show.
Nice chapter, I just hated it that I once again have read it when I actually had no time for it.
I skipped a third of the chapter. The narrative and style doesn't appeal to me as much as it had before: T
Universal greeting
Here have a cookie m8
I really hope this isn't the end of the story. He hasn't even tried recreating human technology in Equestria. Magic could make up for a lot of the fiddly bits or help with manufacturing tiny parts that require microscopic tolerances. First thing would be pens. Not sure if fountain pens are canon but I know Bic pens are not. That would blow Twilight's mind.
Television is a bit like a magic mirror so it's not a completely foreign concept. Hard part is editing of pre-recorded content, a bit like TV at the very beginning.
Self propelled carts would be a challenge-- using more magic to make it go that it would take to manually levitate the cargo. Steam is a possibility and who doesn't geek out over steampunk ponies?
(Could be wrong but I suspect steam tech is new to ponies seeing as how the first train was pulled by four Earth ponies, indicating to me it was broken or somepony didn't bring enough fuel/water)
Another excellent chapter, as usual from you, eh?:D
honestly I find it surprising celestia and luna missed out on the fact that chaos is life entrophy is expressed most greatly through death and death is the purest form of order. if chaos where to be totally removed from an environment it would stagnate and die. twilight and friends have a lot to learn about the necessity to fight, I look forward to aeon teaching them about this during the invasion. he deserves better then they treat them, and honestly I expect the ferrets and snakes and the bear well be giving fluttershy the cold shoulder for a bit, if being a carnivore automatically makes you bad.
Good, good. Moar Evergreen horse words plz
This is fun.
7466972 yes sir, captain general sir. *types faster*