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lorettafox


Twilight is best Mane pony and Vinyl is best BG pony. Discord is best draconqquus and I update on my own time.

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Discord has been turned into a pegasus colt by Celestia after the Elements Rainbow spared him as a sign of a second chance to redeem himself. Now under the name 'Accord', he remembers nothing of who he once was. Now he is being raised by the Mane 6 and living in Twilight's home with her and Spike. Can the Mane 6 raise him correctly and get him down the road of friendship and harmony or will he go back down the road to chaos and disharmony and become what he was before?

NOTE: Beginning of Ch. 1 uses the final battle of "Return of Harmony, Part 2" to show how the rainbow ended up affecting Discord in this story.

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Comments ( 26 )

Now what in Equestria did I just read? :rainbowderp: But still, you get the upvote. :twilightsmile:

699179 This is only the beginning. It'll get better. :twilightsheepish: But thanks for reading. :twilightsmile:

well, I can't say I'm a fan of TF to pony fiction- but i will go trough it. Anyway good job on this one. This has potential. As a all around reader, I must give you some advise for the next chapter and some back driving for this chapter. The plot is good, but I think you could writhe more about what is going on here. You must describe more. F.ex How do Discord look like for a pony? Or more specificity: How is Ponyville before the Mane 6 shut a good old rainbow to Discord? What type of personal is Twilight? Will she hate Discord, even If he is a pony? Why did Celestia have the memories eased? Be more specificity about lot of thing, like describing how someone looks like, or what he/she do. Not writhe the only minimum, use word to attack the novel of yours. I count 16 ways to make sure this story could be better in many ways, I will writhe you a PM for that.

Anyway, good work.

699245 Thanks for your advice. I'm trying to describe and use details, but I use mostly dialogue to explain what is happening. But thank you for reading my story. :twilightsmile:

699250 The main problems in use of dialogues is that you became very vague of important tiny things that can be Important in the following chapters. Show vs Tell as they say

Awesome story! I can't wait to see what direction it takes! :yay:

Yay, pony Discord having no idea he was Discord and Depressed Cheerilee!
The provided level of material relevant to my interests is insufficient to meet my personal required needs. :moustache: MOAR!

699712 Thank you! I'm going to keep on writing more. :pinkiehappy:

700552 *Rainbow Dash salute* I shall write more. :rainbowdetermined2:

700669
Wow! You responded to my comment. :pinkiehappy:
You sir, have gained a reader for life!:derpytongue2:

700669 um the dialog is very......blockish/bland when discord is talking

I found a mistake in it.
"Hey, I'm still pretty fast and the only only qualified here to teach little Cord how to fly!" Rainbow yelled. "Besides, who else can teach him how to do flight tricks?" :scootangel:
Shouldn't it be "Hey, I'm still pretty fast and the only qualified pony here to teach little Cord how to fly!" Rainbow yelled. "Besides, who else can teach him how to do flight tricks?"
But apart from that AWESOMENESS STORY!:rainbowdetermined2:

I truly love this story:heart:.. I've read it twice :pinkiegasp:.. Please come out with the next chapter! I also made you a Picture. I'm not the best at drawing but I gave it a go. http://bronyaustralia.deviantart.com/art/Accord-Drawing-307225010

718079 Oops. I'll fix that right away.
718671 My goodness thank you very much for drawing little Accord! I'm really thankful you made it for me. ^_^ I'm glad you love this story so much. I'll try to update right after my birthday is over.

719941 Oh Happy Birthday :pinkiehappy:! Also it is not a problem, I was bored today so I had to do something lol :rainbowlaugh:.

I say! I do indeed love this story! Good job sir/ma'am :moustache:
Looking forward to more! :twilightsmile:

790957 I'm sorry I haven't updated. I kinda forgot. :twilightblush: But I'm uploading the new chapter in a few minutes. :pinkiehappy:

Haha, this is going exactly NOT as planned, huh Twilight?
:twilightsheepish:
Yeah, we will be seeing a lot more chaos I predict :rainbowlaugh:
Nice chapter!!!

Pinkie always knows how to party :pinkiehappy:
Great chapter I must say, Looking forward to the net ones that comes out. yay :yay:

I really hope lorreta starts working on the this story again soon. I've benn waiting for a new chapter forever, I just really love this story!:rainbowkiss:

1878563 Perhaps I will return to this story someday. :twilightsmile:

I know i am late to reading this story but there is only one thing i wold change ...
I would recommend that you stop calling Twilight and her friends the "Mane 6". It is a serious immersion breaker. :unsuresweetie:

2676126 I could do that if I ever get back to this story, that is. :duck:

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