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I just randomly decided i felt like adding to the many great stories hear hopefully if not maybe get a laugh i swear by my mohawk i will get at least one laugh .
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Okay, I'm not even going to comment on the plot, your mechanics are a mess. Commas with a space before instead of after, the first word in a sentence often isn't capitalized, I isn't capitalized, does as dose, this is a mess.
I agree with Europa ...all three segments of this story need polished, grammatical errors need addressing,
dial it back a bit as each installment feels very rushed and why was his little trip to the Everfree with Fluttershy completely whitewashed out ..? 
Feels like a missed opportunity to give more details on the main protagonist or hints on his history 
Story premise is fresh and new, you have scratched my curiosity, I shall follow
6743783 sorry I have been using my phone because my laptop is down and the dose and does thing is a bad habit I have.
6743858. Thanks for the feedback and the reason I cut out the trip is because I couldn't put much the way NT is he would not have had anything to talk about and he doesn't have much of a past ,but you will still get to know what happened. Please keep it up the feedback is really appreciated.
6743854 Bye Thank you for coming.
6743995 word of advice... Don't let trolling get to you
Everypony isn't always nice or supportive of somepony's work
Stay positive and Smile Smile Smile
fun story is fun keep writing please
6744035 There's a difference, most people are giving him criticism and ways to improve his story, sorry it isn't filled with damn sunshine and rainbows.
Also, don't use "Everypony" because one, people don't take you seriously If you do, (trust me on that one)
And two, you're not a Pony, so its incorrect.
Why all the downers I don't see the problem
7166591 hmm did I miss something?