Loyalty's Breath

NOTE: this takes place during season 5 BUT the Friendship Castle, Starlight Glimmer and Rainbow Power does not exist.

"There's a storm approaching…just like last time."

All they wanted was to find the ruins of a lost empire, but find out more than they barged in for…

Cover art by: yogurtyard.deviantart.com/art/Waiting-for-the-storm-305549186
Link connecty thingy isn't working so just take the link itself T_T

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EarthRainbow

EarthRainbow #1 · Dec 22nd, 2015 · · ·

and proud, but our it is one thing we don't like to share.

Grammar error

EarthRainbow

EarthRainbow #2 · Dec 22nd, 2015 · · ·

Review:

Good story, short but effective

You never really explained how he was there, and I guess we will never find out. Other than the a fore mentioned error, I couldn't find any bad grammar. The story seems prequel-ish in it's cliffhanger nature and seems like it isn't a main story but instead backstory to a main plot-line that hasn't been created yet. All in all it's a good story.

Can't wait for a sequel (if there will be one, I'm making assumptions here)

Dusk_Writer

Dusk_Writer #3 · Dec 23rd, 2015 · · ·

6757462 ah thanks, and thanks for the fav!!

Dusk_Writer

Dusk_Writer #4 · Dec 23rd, 2015 · · ·

6757507 you're right! I did that on purpose because I'm working on the sequel right now it will be multichapter. Though, I'm not sure if I will complete it.