Applejack looked on at the scene unfolding between Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara with an ever-increasing sense of unease. If the pink filly couldn't even open up to her best friend...
She returned to her sister, still clinging onto the orange mare's fur as if for dear life. Her sniveling had somewhat abated a little, but Applejack still felt a wet patch where Bloom's face had been ensconced for the best part of five minutes.
Applejack's gaze fell on the two mares left outside. Could they do anything to break the tension and calm a few nerves? She noticed the face of Pinkie Pie, who'd been building up the 'big reconciliation' in her head between Spoon and Tiara, and obviously was not best pleased at the results. In fact, she looked on the verge of entering the room, to try and smooth things over, with her unique blend of insanity and vivacity...
Which Applejack instinctively knew, in the tenuous circumstances, would perhaps be the worst idea ever.
Mouthing to a crestfallen party pony not now, which Pinkie unusually obeyed, maybe finally learning her lesson from the whole Ponytones fiasco, Applejack's attention landed on the yellow pegasus standing next to her.
Fluttershy had been very subdued all this time, perhaps wondering why she traveled all this way to the hospital, when her contact with Diamond up until this point had been at a minimum, and worried that her poor pet Angel was starving to death back at the cottage.
Applejack thought about the mellow nature of the pegasus... How she hardly ever raised her voice... Her kind and patient demeanor... Her knack for empathising with almost everypony.
The orange mare had an idea. It was a bit of a long shot, but it surely couldn't make things any worse than they were right now.
"Hey Fluttershy, could you come here for a moment, please?"
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Rainbow Dash sped off to Twilight's castle as fast as she could. She ignored all distractions, such as tempting cloud formations she could have kicked into oblivion in seconds, and even dodged the occasional greeting her fellow pegasi dished out as she rapidly passed them in the sky. She was a mare on a mission, she could deal with the weather and catch up with her flying buddies later.
There was one small oddity that struck her as she set off from the clinic, though. A pair of unicorns, that Dash could have sworn she remembered from somewhere, anxiously glancing around, while trying to remain as inconspicuous as possible. This behaviour would have seemed strange in itself, but their attire would indicate they were more used to the salubrious surroundings of Canterlot, than the far more moderate charms of Ponyville.
Was there a snob convention in town, and Rainbow hadn't been told about it? Maybe I should inform Rarity she thought to herself with a laugh, before realising that she was in a hurry, and had no time to investigate the admittedly unusual pair.
Upon reaching the ornate new structure, the blue Pegasus went straight through an open window without knocking, and flew into the main chamber. Stopping just short of the table, she hovered above the Cutie Map and regarded the sight below her with interest.
For there was Spike, fast asleep in Twilight's throne, a (non magical) Power Ponies comic book being levitated by his snores, and a bowl of gems spilt all over the floor under his feet.
What a sight. Dash couldn't help herself. She knew that Twilight wouldn't mind for one second the dragon taking a little nap on her chair, but was the paranoid, ever-so-careful Spike aware of that?
Rainbow was banking that he wasn't.
"Spike wake up!" She yelled, affecting the voice of somepony in a state of panic. "Twilight is back, and she's looking for you! She asked me to check in here, and there you are, having some shuteye on her throne. I'll warn you in advance, she told me herself... If I catch that assistant of mine using my special chair as a bed again..."
The dragon yawned, stretched, and looked at peace for a few seconds... That is, until Dash's words began to sink in. "Oh no!" He exclaimed, springing to his feet. "She'll ground me for a week! She'll take away my ruby privileges! I won't be able to attend Blueblood's party with her! And, I haven't even done any cleaning, or fed Owlicious!! What do I do? What do I do?!" He ran around aimlessly, bumping into furniture during his groundless hysteria.
Rainbow would have loved to prolong the joke for a little longer, but alas her gag reflex got the better of her "Bwhahahahaha!" She laughed out loud, while holding onto her sides in midair. Spike stopped his frenzied rush to stare at her quizzically, before finally putting two and two together, and realising he had been duped.
"Yeah, very funny, Rainbow!" He frowned, crossing his arms and casting the pegasus a dirty look. " You don't know how many times I've nearly been caught in here. I wish I could ignore the allure of that throne, but there's just something about it. It's so much bigger, and more comfortable than my puny little seat, sigh..."
"I wouldn't worry about that." Dash landed next to Spike, and gave him a friendly rub on his head. "I'm sure Twilight has more than enough to deal with all the friendship problems around Equestria, than her number one assistant rubbing his scales against her throne. I'm sure if you asked her, she'd let you sit on it when she's not around, or maybe get you a bigger chair for yourself..."
"Yes, well I'll think about that, I suppose..." Spike walked over to the gems he knocked onto the floor during his nap, and began to pick them up. " Right now, I have to do some sweeping, get a bird to eat his lunch, deal with you..."
The dragon stopped for a moment, unconsciously putting one of the retrieved jewels in his mouth. "Why are you here, anyway?" He asked with a hint of suspicion.
"Oh. Oh! In the middle of all our fun, I forgot..." Rainbow put her hooves over her mouth in reproach.
"Our fun?!" Spike raised an eyebrow at that slightly biased comment.
Dash wasn't listening, though. " Yes, now I remember. I was supposed to check in with you to see if there was any way you could contact Twilight from here. I know she's in Canterlot on direct orders from Celestia, but this is something really important. Would it be possible to speak to her, now...?"
Recognising how serious it must be for the usually carefree Rainbow to sound so dramatic, Spike began to rack his brains. "No, I don't think so. I think she's due to return early evening anyway, are you sure it couldn't wait until then?"
"I don't know about that, Applejack made it sound pretty urgent." Dash was a little disappointed at the dragon's response. "But I suppose, if there's no other option..."
"Hang on just a second..." Spike had a sudden flash of inspiration, dropping all of his collected gems in the process. "There might be a way, if we're lucky. Just cross your hooves, and follow me..."
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"Hello, darling. It's me again." Rarity made her presence known to Loving Care at the reception desk.
"Oh, it is you! Welcome!" The hospital worker was desperately trying to hairdry the tea stains off of her important documents, without much success. "What can I do for you, and the Princess, this time...?"
"Well, actually it's just for me." Rarity pointed out. "And you needn't be so formal. I may like to be treated like a lady, but I know for a fact Twilight prefers a far more humble approach. You needn't roll out the red carpet on my account, in her name..."
"Yes, yes! Of course! Whatever the Princess wants!" Loving Care had obviously not taken any notice to what the white unicorn had told her at all.
Sighing internally, Rarity decided to put her cards on the table. "Listen, you know we were here earlier discussing Miss Diamond Tiara's mother, Spoiled Rich, who's also presently a patient here? Well, if it's not too much trouble, we'd very much like the number of her room, please. You see, she may be responsible for a unsavoury incident that took place in this very hospital..."
Loving Care's mood suddenly flipped on a coin from respect, to apprehension... "Oh no!" the receptionist wailed. " Is this involving the filly under the Princess' personal care? And you say her mother was to blame? What happened? What happened?"
Unwilling to make things even more frenetic than they already were, but always loathe to tell a lie, Rarity decided to be straight with her. "Well, you see, there was a restraining order against her on behalf of her daughter, so that she couldn't go within..."
"What!" Loving Care eyes began to bulge to the size of apples. "Nopony told me this! Why did nopony tell me this?! I'm not getting fired because of somepony else's mistake! What do I do? What do I do?" The clinic worker started hyperventilating, to the extent that it looked as though she'd need hospital treatment herself soon.
"Now, now dear, there's no need for that kind of display..." Rarity tried to calm the situation. " I promise that nopony is going to lose their job over this, the blame lies all around. If you'd just give me the number as I requested, I'll get out of your mane, and everything 'll be fine. You have my word..."
Loving Care looked unconvinced, but saw that her erratic behaviour in front of one of the Princess' attendants made her appear a little foolish. "Well, if you're sure... It's on 4A. Now, if that's everything..."
"Yes, darling. That's all I wanted. And if I may be so bold as to make a suggestion, I've always found hot water and vinegar work wonders at removing tea stains. Give it a try. Hope to see you again, soon..." The unicorn took her leave.
Meanwhile, Loving Care was caught in a bit of a quandary. What should she do first, mix Rarity's concoction, or hire a lawyer for a potential employment tribunal...?
Decisions, decisions...
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She didn't know why she did it.
She'd been given strict instructions to find out the room number, and return to Applejack...
But she just couldn't help herself.
And now Rarity stood, right outside Spoiled's door, planning her next move in earnest.
Why had the unicorn walked all this way, instead of going back as she was supposed to?
If Spoiled had done something as bad as Applejack suspected, she was probably long gone, anyway, having had plenty of time to make her getaway...
Rarity suspected there was nothing inside, but an empty bed, and a long checked-out mare, but she had to see for herself.
With extreme trepidation, she trotted forward, ready to grasp the handle and turn it...
But then, it moved of it's own accord, and there Spoiled stood, in all her glory.
"Ah, Rarity. The only one of you six troublemakers with any class..." She casually remarked. " I trust after this little misunderstanding with my daughter has been cleared up, I win her back and receive a full apology, I can go back to shopping at your boutique. You're just had a new line of shimmery dresses in, yes? I can't wait to see them..."
Taken completely aback by Spoiled's nonchalance, the white unicorn stammered in her reply. "E-er y-yes, b-but t-that's n-not w-what..."
"Let me guess, my Diamond has been telling tales about me again?" Spoiled rolled her eyes in mock annoyance. "Honestly, fillies. You can't live with them, and you can't live without them. They can be a hoofful, but you know that already, right? I bet your Sweetie Belle gets up to some mischief, too..."
Forgetting who she was talking to for a moment, Rarity's natural friendliness bubbled to the surface. "Why, yes dear! She most certainly does! Why, there was that time she nearly messed up my deal with Sapphire Shores! Not to mention, when she helped to write that gossip column for the school newspaper. I believe your daughter was the editor... Wait a second!" She suddenly recalled why she was there in the first place, and snapped to attention.
"Yes, I remember the Foal Free Press incident, and my Diamond's subsequent demotion to printer." Spoiled's mask of amiability slipped for a moment, and she pursed her lips. "It took Randolph two hours to scrub all the ink off of her that night. He almost didn't serve my dinner on time! I don't know why my pushover of a husband still keeps that doddery old fool in a job, any self-respecting family would have put him out to pasture years ago..."
Feeling they were veering somewhere off topic, Rarity interjected. "Yes dear, that is a shame, but I'm afraid I'm here regarding slightly more important matters than your difficulties with your servant..."
"Yes, I suppose..." Spoiled let out a long sigh. "Maybe we can talk about it more over coffee and scones at my mansion, once this whole sorry saga is over. I think I know what this is about, and I'll willingly come with you. I have nothing to hide, as you'll soon find out. Don't forget about our dinner date, though. After all, we have so much in common..." And with that, she sauntered off down the corridor, nose held high.
I very much doubt that Rarity thought, before following her lead.
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"Come come dear..." Jet Set was desperate to get out of the hospital.
"I told you, darling. I wasn't going anywhere until I'd washed my hooves. Don't you know where they've been..." Upper Crust emerged from the bathroom at last.
"Yes, I was a little surprised at what you did myself..." Jet Set commented. "What exactly was that in aid of?"
"I just wanted to be certain we weren't being played for chumps, my dearest..." Upper Crust took up her position at the side of her husband, as they stealthily left the building. "Don't you know how valuable a cutie mark like that could be in the wrong hooves..."
" I understand your worry..." Jet Set replied. "But to go to such lengths, just to be sure..."
"It was mildly unpleasant, to say the least..." Upper Crust wrinkled her nose. "But in the long term, I'm sure it'll be worth it. If we can get on the good side of that filly, or whoever controls her, we could..."
"Stop, who's that?" Jet Set had abruptly halted his slow stride forward, so his wife bumped into him.
"Ow, what the..." Upper Crust exclaimed.
"Shh!" Jet Set motioned for his wife to be quiet, pointing at a strange blue blur above them that appeared to be monitoring them closely.
"Who in Equestria is that?" Upper Crust shielded her eyes from the sun, trying to see the identity of their spy in the sky.
"I have no idea..." Jet Set replied, though something niggled at the back of his mind that he'd seen that pegasus before.
They didn't have much time to ponder though, for a few seconds later, the figure seemed to lose interest, and flew into the horizon.
"How bizarre." remarked Upper Crust. "You don't suppose they're onto us already..."
"Nonsense dear. We've only just gone outside." Jet Set was sure they'd escaped undetected. "Now we must return to our hotel room like Spoiled said, and plan..."
"Yes, let's..." Upper Crust smiled a little at her husband showing initiative for a change. She liked the rare occasions he took control...
As long as he didn't do it too often.
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It had been around quarter of an hour since Rarity and Rainbow Dash had been dispatched on their respective missions, and Applejack was still waiting to hear back from them.
Apple Bloom had wrung herself dry through crying, and was now just holding onto her sister, a downcast expression set in her face.
Silver Spoon had long since given up on eliciting any emotion from the distant Diamond, but still refused to leave her side.
The pink filly in question continued to stare at the remains of her tiara, the only clue she was still even alive being the occasional blink.
As for Pinkie Pie, she'd been relegated outside the room, her usual antics not readily appreciated in such a solemn atmosphere. To pass the time, she'd been trying to solve the new puzzle sensation, known as 'Rubuck's Cube'. It looked easy enough, but she always ended up with one mismatched colour each side.
She was so frustrated by the whole experience, she was on the verge of cheating. After all, nopony would ever find out if she swapped a few of the stickers around, surely...
Fluttershy on the other hand, had a slightly more important task to fulfill.
Waiting for her cue from Applejack, she carefully made her way over to Diamond, firstly addressing the nearby Spoon.
"Um... Silver, is it? Listen... I hate to be a bother... But if at all possible, could I have a little word with your friend on my own, please? I promise I'll be quick..." Fluttershy requested, hopefully.
The grey filly looked at the pegasus, then back at Tiara. "Okay, fine." She reluctantly agreed. "But, I'm going to be right over there. Do you hear that, Di? I'm not going anywhere."
Spoon looked at her friend, wishing for a response, more in hope than expectation. Getting none, she frowned in concern, before making her way over to where Applejack and Apple Bloom stood, and all three watched as Fluttershy sat next to the unresponsive Diamond.
"Hello there. You might not know me very well... My name is Fluttershy." The yellow pegasus attempted to break the ice. " I'm not going to try to get you to talk to me if you don't want to, and I don't want to cause you any more anguish than you've suffered already, you poor thing. But if there's one thing I can tell just by looking at you now, it's that you're in pain. I see it in the eyes of the animals I treat, the birds I heal and even everyday ponies who I walk past in the street all the time. I can't say I know what you're going through, but if I've learnt anything about pain, it's that bottling it up never works..."
At this point, Diamond's gaze slightly drifted to her right, where the yellow pegasus was sitting. As soon as she realised what she was doing however, she quickly returned them to her smashed jewelry.
It's not much, but it's a start Applejack noted.
Undeterred, Fluttershy continued. "You'll just get sadder and sadder, until the feeling becomes unbearable. Of course, I don't expect you to open up straight away, but please remember, anytime you might want to confide in somepony, me, Applejack or any of my friends would be more than happy to listen. The only thing I ask of you is to not leave it too long. You're too young and pretty, for something like this to be eating away at you from the inside. Just think about what I've told you today, and when you're ready, we'll be here waiting for you."
Having said her piece, the yellow pegasus simply stood up and slowly walked away.
Applejack watched her slow retreat with trepidation. It had been a bit of a gamble to expect Fluttershy to act as a trainee counselor for the obviously disturbed pink filly, but in the short term the farm mare felt it was a better option than doing nothing.
At least Tiara hadn't blown up in Fluttershy's face, which is what had happened when Applejack had tried to comfort the child earlier. Only time would tell if she'd had made the right decision...
"I...I'm ready to talk."
Huh? Where did that come from?
It was Diamond, finally turning her cold stare away from her shattered tiara, and looking apprehensively at those present in the room, Fluttershy in particular.
Everypony present jumped a little in surprise, and even Pinkie, in the middle of deciphering her toy, poked her head around the doorway.
Applejack was the first to speak. She took a tenative step forward.
"Are you sure, sugarcube?"
"Yes... Yes, I am."
I hope Spoiled, Jet Set and Upper Crust all get thrown into prison for this kind of child abuse!! Either way good chapter and I hope Diamond will tell the Mane 6 + Silver Spoon everything to incriminate the snobs!
burn the witch!
(spoiled even has the nose!!)
Well to be fair you DID write something questionable.
6922398 Nope, not worth PMs full of personal insults and profanity. I don't accept that as an excuse, and neither should anyone else.
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Please don't believe that I disagree on that.
6922412 You said 'to be fair'.
There's nothing fair about trolling someone with unprovoked personal attacks and swearing, because they disagree with the mere mention of something controversial in a story you're writing.
There is no in-between here. What this person did was wrong, full stop.
So what, exactly, did you "ruin" about this story?
6922432 Because I chose to bring up the topic of child abuse, and changed the rating to a 'T'.
That's it. Hang, draw and quarter me. How dare I even approach the subject. Woe is me.
6922437 Wow. That... is not what I expected. Honestly, I perceived the entire premise of the story as being centered around such things. Anyways, keep up the good work!
6922461 Another more serious kind of abuse. starting in chapter 30, part 2. Read it, and you'll see what I mean...
The issues presented in this story are very deep, very personal, and very dark, but they are also very real. While I would have loved to see the canon-style, one episode happy ending, this story has, thus far at least, followed the more realistic path of, "Two steps forward, one step back." I know how hard it is to heal an abused child, having one spent nearly two years attempting such a feat myself. So far, this story's portrayal of the emotional roller coaster that process entails feels spot on.
I love your story! This chapter was really good and I can see its setting up for the next chapter.
Oh by the way are we going to see Filthy or even Silvers Mom soon? It's been while since Diamonds Dad hasn't been seen... U know I won't be surprised if he was already setting up to divorced.
Oh yea to who ever it is sending those hatful PM's, Get out of here!
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I still keep thinking something might happen like him going to his Dad, Stinkin Rich, for advice, who then decides to take back control of Barnyard Bargains and the bank accounts, leaving Spoiled Bitch nothing to fight with. And only giving them back to Filthy once he grows a backbone and starts doing what is right instead of being a checkbook his wife uses to control everything.
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That person seriously only now realized that child abuse is a topic in this story when things get physical?
Do they think abuse is only physical? The worse pain and damage are those that aren't physical.
Seriously the fact the tags from the start included Sad and Drama also that the antagonist is Spoiled should tell it's not all gonna be sunshine and rainbows.
6922492 Huh forgot that Diamonds grandpa is still around. I think so to he would step in to help his son & granddaughter.
Wait can he see Diamond?
Wow...I never would have guessed someone would go that far in terms of hating this story. I love it! It's really great! Sure, there's some spots I don't care for, (I think Applejack isn't written completely right in this, she's usually more confident and more stubborn.) but...It's really good! I enjoy how this story flows with Diamond and I love how Spoiled is written in this. She's such a monster and a great villain!
6922494 I must say, I have stepped things up in the last few chapters, which may come as a shock to some readers, but still... To send someone insulting personal messages like that (that were barely legible, might I add) is not justified on any level.
Oh well, hopefully they'll stop now... *crosses fingers*
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I don't know if he is still around. He might be though. I am hoping he is as he is one of the few probably able to do something from the inside.
6922513 If she wasn't stubborn, she wouldn't have insisted everypony stay outside the way she did, and attempt to console DT on her own. I just thought she was smart in recognising that traditional methods wouldn't work on a child in DT's state, which is why she employed the services of Flutters. And, it proved to be a good move...
6922545 True...I don't know, I still love this story, please keep going!
6922421 Dude. Ignore him. With a premise like this, of course there were going to be hot button issues. What I find admirable is that you didn't skim through any of it.
While unexpected the darker turn is well executed so far and I am enjoying it. good job.
Hopefully Jet Set and Upper Crust get caught soon and hopefully in front of the Canterlot nobles! As for Spoiled Rich I hope she has another episode and gets sent to a nice padded room for the remainder of her life.
As a long time reader of this story I have been throughly enjoying this story and am awaiting its resolution. You cannot appease everyone but as the chapters went on it should have become apparent before to long that something was seriously wrong in Diamond Tiara's life. Now we can watch as Applejack shows why family is very important to her!
This is getting better and better.
With plans for the future being prepared by everypony in the story I on the verge of ny chair awaiting for the next chapter.
Thanks to you I love Diamond more than ever. Best filly!
6922727 Glad to see another person who's seen the light. Prepare yourself for a new follower.
Now all we need to do is see more of the new DT (reformed, but still with her lovable sassy side intact) in season 6... With more singing, of course..
I'm so sorry about the troll. I hope you reported them. Anyway, looks like the snobs are getting out of Dodge...well Ponyville Hospital anyway. I hope Spike and Rainbow are able to get a message to Twilight. The snobs need to pay...dearly. Thank you for the quick update. Know that there are those that do appreciate it and I am one of them.
That sucks about the troll... seriously you don't threaten an author when the story doesn't go the way you want it to...
6922794 No arguments here...
"I'd love to slap Spoiled senseless, but that implies she had sense in the first place."
"And it probably counts as animal abuse."
"Hey! Calling Spoiled an animal is an insult to animals everywhere!"
Wait, someone's giving you grief over this story's themes? Seriously? They should've known what they were getting into when they saw the first couple chapters.
I personally am enjoying seeing how it progresses and looking forward to the hammer being brought down upon Spoiled Rich and Upper Crust. Jet Set can get off a little easier, but not much; dude's still a party to child abuse and, arguably, molestation, and that's earned him a place in the special Tartarus. Along with ponies who talk during the movie.
So, Jet Set and Upper Crust got out in time. Well, it makes little difference. Other ponies like that nurse saw them in the hospital, so if the heroes ask around, they will have ponies who will confirm that they were there.
Are Spoiled and Rarity going to Diamond's room? Because Spoiled is not supposed to be in the same room as her daughter regardless of rather there are other adults or not. This would be the second time she'd violate the restraining order in less than 24 hours after it was issued.
Seems Spoiled has some sort of plan, don't know what It is, but if she's thinking of tricking Rarity into thinking that Applebloom and Diamond's tale is a lie, it won't work once Rarity sees the two wit her own eyes, and AppleJack is able to confirm how upset her sister was.
"six troublemakers" huh? So she's blaming Pinkie Pie and Fluttershy for something they had no part in. Wow! What a c**t. I really hate that retarded guilt by association idea that a lot of retards go by. If someone tried to blame me for something I had no part in, they would suffer.
lets add up: She is an emotionally and sexually abusive parent, a racist, a child hater, a bad boss to Cheerilee and Randolph, a corrupt slimeball (withholding funds for the playground, which is illegal), a hypocrite (she calls Applebloom a mud pony even though she's also one), a person with no respect for royalty (if the first chapter is accurate, she seems to consider herself Twilight's superior), and now we can add this to the list as well. It really seems like you want to make her as unlikable as possible. If there was someone in my neighborhood like this and the cops did not do anything, I would burn the persons house down (and get away with it of course). This is protected under free speech, so people better not try to arrest me for saying that.
Death would be too nice of a punishment for Spoiled, Upper Crust, and Jet Set.
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It's a sad fact but there are people so blatantly stupid as to convince themselves that only physical abuse is damaging to a child. When frankly emotional abuse can be so much worse at times.
6922824 This comment is win.
Have a moustache!
Tactical Fluttershy always works
6923244 Well, there wasn't much sexual motive behind it, but still...
Another chapter already. Watch out for the burnout.
6922665 At this point, I feel like Tiara is the one close to finish her life in the mental ward. It's a good thing the tag tragedy isn't here.
Do this really work ? I don't think putting liquid on paper is a good idea
Calling it now, Jet Set will be the first one to chicken out of the pact.
Yeah sure, gropping fillies is such a good ice breaker. How could she possibly hate you for that ?
Wow, that was fast, almost too fast. She is really as strong as a stone.
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Oddly enough, I never have a problem with writer's block, only slackness. Go figure.
No, but the tag 'dark' is now. So, bring a torch. (or flashlight, if you prefer)
Meh, I'm sure she'd rather have watermarks on paper than tea. At least it would look presentable.
Maybe she doesn't see it as 'groping'. The rich have an entirely different way of thinking to you and me... It's a scientific fact.
You don't know what she's gonna say yet. Hold ya horses. (JOKEZ!!)
Meh. Don't let the f**knut(s) who send you PMs ('cause they're too scared to use comments or have it archived) get you down man. I'd suggest bringing it up with a Moderator or an Admin if it's a significant threat though.
Anyway:
The story is good enough for me to follow, touching on some themes that are actually quite difficult to pull off convincingly
Your writing skills are actually pretty good and the only fault I can find with you as an author is liking any of Paloma Faith's
noisemusicI'm shocked you can write this quickly. I'm not complaining, but maybe you should try and pace yourself. Writer's Block is horrible. (Just look at my submissions if you have any doubt )
Looking forward to the next chapter at any rate!
6922437 I actually think what you've done with the story makes for a very good read. You manage to bring up a controversial subject and make it seem real. It's hard to not make things overly dramatic, and easy to break character when writing about a heated topic. I especially liked Applebloom's 'why you suck' speech to Spoiled *itch. Well done and I look forward to the next chapter.
And frankly, I can't understand why someone would be upset over a changed rating...
Now to find Spoiled *itch and introduce her to Tydal. (From The God Squad, it's another good story on this site. Not to everyone's taste, but I think you'll agree that they should be introduced...)
I love your story mate, and not just because it's beyond something I expected. It deals with a lot of what I've seen happen to people in my life, and it's a breath of fresh air to see at least a few people wanting to touch on these issues.
That being said, the little rotnugget who was sending you those rather hurtful PMs? Yeah, I don't have any respect for people who do that. People think that just because they're online, they can be "offended" at something, freak out, and everything will go their way.
You've shown them that you're not going to bend over backwards for them, and I respect you for that.
Loving the story so far mate, you do a good job of setting tone and keeping the plot moving along without it becoming too predictable. Kudos to you, and don't let some deter you from writing your story the way you want. In the end, your the one in control and you have the power to take your story where you want it. Always keep constructive criticism in mind, but ultimately, go with what you feel is best. Your not gonna please everyone here, and to those who send you nasty PMs for the sake of it without regards to adding input to make it better, don't even sweat them, because their opinions ain't worth the waste of sanity trying to appease them. Do what you do and go with what you like, and i'll eagerly be waiting for the next chapter.
I think your story is pretty damn entertaining, I remember when it first came out it looked like an interesting read. And well, here I am now, reading through it like there's no tomorrow~ I'm not one too heavily involved in abuse topics... eh.
Just ignore the fools who send those notes. I know I would :P they're just fueling the fire of... of... bread :I
This is why fluttershy is best mane 6 pony.
Fast updates are always nice.