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My OCs aren't crazy, I was just having fun with my profile picture.

Comments ( 24 )

6866284 Your username is oddly fitting considering the circumstances.

You need to work a bit on your grammar and phrasing.
You have got a good idea, wirk it out. Dont rush it.

6871246Blothread, than you so much! I really appreciate your advise. I promise that I will be more cautious about my grammar. :twilightsmile: :heart:

I can't wait for next chapter!

A bonus chapter for this would be interesting

swiping is

hard swallowed

His
Swallow

Well, that escalated rather quickly

I have to say.. this does not at all seem like how Big Mac would talk and act.

Comment posted by Nishi deleted Feb 28th, 2016
Eldorado
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Don't post, embed, or link NSFW artwork anywhere on site. No exceptions. Please read the story posting rules again to familiarize yourself with site policy a little better, and definitely don't post blatant pornography in the middle of a story chapter again.

6970476 agreed. totally out of character

6970476 Maybe things change behind closed doors :trixieshiftright:

Grammar and pacing definitely needs some work. I couldn't even finish the first chapter. You may also wish to proof read your story. For instance, there's no such thing as 'people' in the world of pones. Yet you used people in dialogue.

I might come back to this story in the future, not sure. If you'd like for me to possibly have a go at editing this, just send me a pm.

Sorry too much like Sweet Apple Masuer creepy as buck

So SR does have a kinky fetish.

6970476 Seriously, whatever happened to Brotherhooves Social...?

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