NICE!!!

A fic that's complete upon being put up!

YYYYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!

Finally, the story that got me playing an amazing game is here! Thank you Pen Stroke!

I have an idea about a sequel: Mr. Scratch in Equestria.

An Alan Wake crossover? I for one loved that game, and look forward to reading this.

If you've never played the game (directed at person who might read this comment) i'd recommend playing it. It's quite fun and has a great story.

The story that got me into this amazing part of the fandom

This was a perfect cross-over

about time only 1 left

WHY DOES THIS HAVE DISLIKES?

WHYYYYYYYYYYY?

AWWWW

Ohai story that I loved.

Good to see this one here! I read it right after playing "Alan Wake", I and I have to say I was impressed by how well you preserved the atmosphere of the game in this.

YES, THE FIRST REAL FANFIC I EVER READ IN THIS FANDOM.

I still think this is the best one XD

>>686463686463

Just like all of his fics.

On FiMfiction at least

This is in my top five favorites. Number three, topped by Past Sins at number one, and Through the Eyes of Another Pony at number two.

This was the story that fully introduced me to MLP:FIM and how awesome it is, and Alan Wake too. Glad to finally see it on here.

Next will be Past Sins....i hope

This story made me want to play Alan Wake, but computer doesn't like the game

Nice! I remember reading this on EqD!

*GASP*

Fav'd

This is getting featured if not already done so.....

It's been one whole, solid year since this was released?

OH GOD!

I FEEL SO OLD!

SO OOOOOOOLLLLLLLLDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD!

Image: http://3.bp.blogspot.com/-F0cnDJqz2ek/TtNzP-NmEwI/AAAAAAAAAsI/662d6kfmt6M/s1600/005.png

One more addition to my read-later list. Let the nostalgia commence!

Yea, now I can read this over again.

OMG this fic... I just finished American Nightmare, and I remember reading this right after beating Alan Wake last summer... So good... and it makes me feel old! I hope gems like this start popping up more often like they did last summer.

May I now call you "God of the Pen"?

>>687267687267

I already do.

>>687300687300  LET HIM BE THE SAVIOR OF A NEW RELIGIOUS BRANCH OF PONYDOM!  FROM THIS DAY FORWARD, WE SHALL WORSHIP PENNISM.  THE RELIGION OF PEN STROKE, GOD OF THE PEN!

>>687332687332

Are you aware that you're awesome? Cause you are.

>>687411687411  Thank you, but clearly I am not as awesome as you are.  Can you not see that?  

>>687435687435

*bows deeply* thank you. I try.

and thus, we creep ever closer to  Past Sins...

This story has been live for almost five hours now. WHY hasn't it hit the Feature box yet?

and with that, one step closer to the past sins. Alan wake; the america nightmare has came to the store. I missed the scary woods in Alan Wake.

"Alan, wake up!" Alice

That comment was mind blowing.

Pen? You do realize this is the sort of writing material that should be on the shelf of a bookstore as a must read or best book. ITS F***ING BRILLIANT!!!

nyx is born. Soon the real story will come.

Yes! It's here! This is one of my favorite fics!

Oh, and I just have to add that you did an amazing job of mixing the two universes!

Yes!

BUT...could this mean...the next one...is...

PAST SINS!?

(PLEASE)

>>690731690731

I think he will post just the season 2 version of "past sins"

What in the... this isn't meta, yet it comes so close... ah well, entering geosynchronous orbit of this fic, and begin scanning. Prepare away teams.

Note to self: do not read any form of grimdark past 1 AM if need to sleep...  

Ill read this when i have the time

Daaaaaang... the initial plot similar to this story and mine is kinda hammering. Now that I read it I may have to re-write mine.

talk about game-breaking power there... Twi when mad enough is a WALKING BONFIRE!

How is this horror if the protagonist canonically is a walking WMD to these taken?

Not even halfway and all hope is lost? These things must be worse than I have been thinking if they are THAT nasty...

How are fireworks macro-scale light producers? They don't produce THAT much light...

Heroic sacrifice enabled. May it not be in vain.

And so the adventure TRULY began. All that came before was nothing but a single stone as compared to the avalanche.

Here my little mare... you will truly know darkness. How fitting your name is Twilight Sparkle.

Wait... how EXACYLU does this relate to Past Sins? Is this the BUCKING PREQUEL!?

I do believe they just cheated Cthulhu, then stabbed him in the back. So this IS the prequel to Past Sins?

Also, I don't think I fully understand what it's a crossover of. I know it IS one, that much is obvious, but still...

>>687864687864 I have absolutely NO idea...

And now I understand what this is a crossover of. Forget my previous commentary.

>>691115691115 The difference being the plot changes required by the infusion of new canon I presume?

>>698408698408

Just to clear up your apparent misconception: This story is unrelated to Past Sins. The IDEA for Nyx came from here, but the Nix from Past Sins is a completely different character.

Everything in this was absolutely perfect. The plot flowed perfectly as if it was an actual sequel to the game. It also preserved the feel and story of the game without being just a pure pony insert. Whenever I came to a journal entry I was amazed by how well you wrote Wake. The story was beautiful, the characterization flawless, and the imagery vivid. This is how every crossover should be done.

Well... Wow. I don't really know what to say here, but if you took the time to write this magnificent story then I can take 3 minutes to write out some praise for you. This story was absolutely amazing. I'd never even heard of Alan Wake, yet after reading this I feel like I know the character quite well. You also seem to have a way grabbing me by the emotions and dragging me into the story. The entire ending sequence left me with a mixture of shock, sadness, and happy tears. I'm glad that this had a happy ending.

Honestly, the fact that this didn't degenerate into a nasty grimdark makes me incredibly happy as well. The horror in this story was built from pure emotional connection with the characters, rather than a sense of "Dear sweet Celestia! He's got an axe!"

I know favorites don't mean much on this site due to their making it easiest to track something, but rest assured that when I click that little star I am being completely truthful. I have a new favorite amongst favorites... Now, if you'll excuse me, I need to find out more about this Alan fellow.

An amazing piece of writing! I'd never heard of the Alan Wake game before, but you're correct in saying that no such prior knowledge is necessary to enjoy this story. You did a great job setting the atmosphere; I could really feel the dark and foreboding setting, and I literally couldn't look away until the characters had gotten somewhere (relatively) safe.

Great job again! Truly one of my favorites.

hmmm i never played the game this is about, but, a stabbing sensation when darkness fills you usually means there is some good inside i sense a plot twist in later chapters

>>698397698397 No, not a prequel; a different story. Both Past Sins and Creeping Darkness have Nyx in them, but their canon would contradict one another. In Past Sins Nyx was created from an incomplete spell, but in Creeping Darkness Nyx is Nightmare Moon's innocence and childishness personified. The idea of Nyx was created in Creeping Darkness, but Past Sins explored more the concept of Nyx.

>>699138699138 You misspelled Nyx.... for shame.

>>738604738604

Fixed. To be fair, I was probably half asleep at the time. The other half was most likely undead. X_x;

Silly Twilight, it was a prank.

The solar princess has to do something at night for entertainment.

...

I thought he could keep them alive, separated maybe but alive.

And then she sees the sign

: The Great And Powerful Trixie

Spurgin -Try the big ones you shoot up, sideways. Light, explosive, sparks and anything wood or plant on fire.>>698166698166

>>750175750175 Ah, roman candles... but those have such short run-times... ah well. point taken.

I would like to see one where it is the side character who acts like a hero and gets the protagonist killed.

Better not die, or I am gonna have to go in there and make The Dark Presence the main character, in an asylum maybe, possibly with the fear of a Final Destination character. Could make it a splicer in Bioshock or a pony with regret tearing its soul apart. I would subject it to the Luna Games but they scare me half to death. have any good suggestions? As the writer I could slightly twist personalities...

>>698166698166

It's actually a call back to the game. Shooting at fireworks, or specifically crates of fireworks I guess, caused them to catch fire. Any Taken in the direct vicinity when the fireworks started going off got blown away, and others in the distance got pushed back.

They don't have to produce a of consistent light, just that one big burst fireworks are famous for.

I thought she might end up being called 'Innocence'

Poor Alan Wake and Thomas Zane, two burning bright lights to remain in the abyss of darkness.

And then this brings us to Alan Wake's American Nightmare.

Poor Alan Wake and Thomas Zane, two burning bright lights to remain in the abyss of darkness.

By the way you misspelt 'Axe', you put 'Ax'.

>>752330752330

While I was reading this chapter, all I could think was "No, don't leave Rusty pony alone!" Nice story btw :D

Don't care what anyone says this right here is your best work followed closely by your portal crossover.  When I first got into the fandom and started to read some of the 6 star stories on Equestria Daily this was I do believe the 3rd fic I ever read and my god is it still as awesome as when I first read it.  This is why crossover Fics are the hardest and best IMO because of the simple fact that trying to tie together two completely different types of work (game and tv show) that are on totally different ends of genres (survival horror and children's show). But my god when it works it works epiclly.

I like a happy ending as much as the next pony, but why not another bitter-sweet ending, or a mysterious ending that could lead to a lifetime of sorrow ora sequel? I could see a short, sweet little story of Nyx growing up though. Great story, now I have to read that other one.

Might read it to my dad. "ONCE UPON A TIME!" "WHAT?!"

>>686698686698

falling brass- really? You read a crossover fic without knowing the stories?

>>764306764306

Yeah?

That could have gone better.

... wow, just wow.

I can see why you are such a praised writer now, I've heard great things about all of your stories but just like about 80 other stories I have them all on the read-it-later list.

Except this one, this one caught my attention; the first day that Alan Wake came out I spent 16 hours straight powering through the game on the hardest difficulty and found myself looking everywhere for any of the lost pages, the entire story in itself had me captivated and on the edge of my seat till the ending

That being said I was honestly reluctant about reading this, generally when one reads/sees/plays through an amazing story they aren't very excited to read something that was made by someone who had nothing to do with the original. But I am very glad that I took the plunge and read this amazing story, I will be honest, I found a few grammar errors here and there, but I only noticed them when I misinterpreted a sentence and had to re-read it to understand.

This story enthralled me from chapter 1, sucking me into the story that kept me on edge until the very last moment, just like a proper horror story, which in a twist of fate left everything better off than when it started.

Lastly, I just have to say that I will be reading the rest of your stories now, and that you deserve the praise you get!

My god.

This was incredible.

I have no more words.

Can't believe I held off reading this till now, damn that was quite the riveting tale you weaved there! And Nyx was such a great icing on this cake!

Astounding as always.

Gloried Moon those songs are gorgeous. I'm going to buy the crap out of these games.

And yeah, I've read actual published stories worse than this. Beautiful.

turns out to be a mask for a or the Dark Presence.

Might want to take a look at that.

I recently finished watching an LP of Alan Wake. I like its story and thought it was amazing and different from other those of other games.

And now, it's been only a few days and I have a crossover ponyfic of it. Hell yeah.

Hope I get to see the ending of this fic. Because I see a lot of decent stories going on hiatus halfway through and never continue.

...Oh, wait. It IS complete. HELL YEAH! #2

So, is this supposed to be in between Alan Wake and Alan Wake's American Nightmare?

It's great too see this story here. Easily one of if not the best MLP horror story.

I just d'awww'd throughout the whole page.

I was engrossed in the story so much, that I actually jumped when my mom walked in.

I wish I could write an essay on how awesome, enthrilling and touching this fic is.

I mean, when I first saw this fic, I only thought "Oh! An Alan Wake crossover? I just finished watching an LP of it!" and didn't expect that much from it.

But now I've finished reading this fic. I can only say that I am really, really, I mean, REALLY amazed at every single chapter you wrote.

This is by far the best crossover fic ever. It kept AMAZING balance between the two worlds, and it gave me an emotional touch, which probably never happened to me while reading other fics I could find here. Also, you maintained the characters' personality(both Alan's and Mane 6's) so well that I actually feel like I'm reading a story written by the actual writers of both Alan Wake and MLP.

To wrap it all up, I just want to say I think you are simply one of the VERY BEST writers EVER in this community. And even a comment made entirely out of capital letters wouldn't be able to describe how AWESOME you are! Now, I'm heading for your other stories. Really excited to read those!

>>698281698281

I doubt this was a prequel to Past Sins. If my memory serves me right: This Nyx was the inspiration for the same loveable foal that we all know and love. Plus the origin of the name is different. Here Twilight remembers the name coming from a love poem while in Past Sins, Twilight gets the name from a foalhood story that she read about a mare with the same name defending ponies from monsters in the night.

Hope that helps

This is one of those stories when you become really depressed because you realize you can only press the like button once

Holy crap that was awesome!

This is beautiful.

Does this remind anyone of a movie

Once again, I find myself enthralled by the magic you have woven with your words.

Maybe if I continue finding stories like this, there may be hope for this old, burn-out biker Jarhead.

Interesting, looks like I will be reading this next.

Nyx!

Well that was fairly awesome.

DAM, AJ no way

overconfidence can lead to mistakes

Nightmare you will pay