A 47 year-old man named Gregary is sent to the hospital and put into an artificial coma after collapsing in a store and sees himself being reborn in a beautiful winter wonderland to talking deer. Of course, he doesn't realize it, but he's born to one of the most important families there, and the Deer lands sit next to the Crystal Empire of the ponies, which Gregary is unaware of.
How unfortunate it is, then, that he already had developed hearing and the first thing that reaches him is the word 'betrothal'. 'Who are the unlucky ones', one would wonder.
Now he must live through the life of a young stag with many employees surrounding him and a village that looks like it's in Christmas all year. Strangely, the adults and elderly look at him with a disconcerting gaze. Is it because he doesn't act anything like them? Maybe he's too open to the idea of meeting other races. Who knows? This hallucination is likely to prove loaded with amusement, and Gregary intends to take advantage of it until it ends. Something forbidden stretches towards the northern lands, however, in search of their vengeance on one that yet lives and another that no longer is, and this might be the last time snow shines like a diamond.
FINALLY a story with deers. I can say that will be an interesting story
6504183 Yeah, well, seeing it's current reception and lack of feedback (as always) you can expect me to update it very slowly, like all my other 'current' stories.
Looks very interesting!
The premise is certainly interesing, in my opinion. You have my curiosity.
6504809 First, your curiosity. Soon, your organs.
Well, somedeer certainly seem arrogant XD
Definitely following this story.
6505208 Oh, you'll love him quite a bit.
I love me some Deer stories, is this the first?
I'm looking forward to more, though I'm a bit saddened that so little was put up for the publishing.
6505241 I already love him
6505262 What do you mean?
I'm surprised there isn't a comedy tag for this fic, the disembodied human's reactions and thoughts cracked me up a few times. I do hope we get to see more soon, I have expectations for this story.
EX.PEC.TA.TIONS....cue dramatic lightning effect.
6505355 Updated with comedy tag. And so many comments from so many different people.
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Just 1.8k words is a very small amount to judge a story on, considering the description advertises a lot.
6505375 Ooooh. I did think of making a second chapter, but considering that my stories don't exactly get much attention nowadays, I'm kinda non-plussed about the whole thing. Don't worry, though. All these comments from several different people got me to start the next chapter.
This will be good, I can tell.
6505536 HOW CAN YOU TELL? ARE YOU LOOKING INTO THE FUTURE?! A witch!
6505410 thanks man it may look bad to have so little attention for your story, but it's orginal and I myself would be very happy to know what will hapen next.
6505796 It's mainly due to my need to share my ideas with everyone and to hear what they think that drives me. That's how I was able to release three chapters in two hours for one of my other stories from a year or two ago. When I don't get those reactions, I lose interest in the story. I've already gone through that depression, so it doesn't matter to me anymore, but it does mean that the story will only be updated erratically.
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6505804 I know the pain I am stuck with my story because of this shit even if I startet it like a lightning it quickly burned out and is going very slowly.
How very interesting! You wrote a really good first chapter to this story, you got me interested in reading more. I can already tell this story is going to have some unique world building in it, which is always nice to see in stories. I like the bits of characterization that you established, it's going to be interesting to see how they will develop later on in future chapters (man that Anglacite certainly has a bit of a... God complex doesn't he?
I also like how you portrayed the main character, he actually has character, and his reactions to the events in the chapter were pretty darn hilarious) . Your writing style is quite nice, good grammar and punctuation, it is always a nice thing to see in a story. I also like how you actually describe the characters and the atmosphere of the areas in the story 
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This chapter is a really great start, and I have a feeling it will be quite a grand story in the future (that is what my gut tells me anyways).
6506063 You can thank all the people and editors that have corrected me over the years for my spelling and writing skills...While I did correct a bit of the spelling, if you want to see how much of a train wreck I was when I first started, you can read my very first story. *deep inhale*
I would give it a
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Oh yes. I do love my world building. *serious face* I love it a lot, and I'll be able to create even more monsters to fit here. I've barely made any since I became obsessed with creating a monster class above Titan to classify my Nyum-Bunet.
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And thanks for the compliments. I'm almost done with the newest chapter. You'll like the ki-...Wait. You made a punny. *slaps you*
6506080 Why, yes...yes I did make a punny
, that was quite deer of you to notice my pun!
On a serious note, I will say this again, great first chapter, can't wait for more
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(almost done with next chapter)
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(This is exciting!)
6506110 The Illogic aims to please, and so do I!
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(My brain is ready for the sweet illogical pandemonium!)
6506150 It's out!
6506163
Amazing! this story already has me hooked! And more story/character development, awesome. Gregary/Stelimus continues to be a hilarious character, I found the part about making fun of the whole 'Guy goes to convention' story type made me laugh. The way you described the places and objects , made me actually 'see' what was described (I liked that quite a lot). The armor design sounds pretty sweet as well. The way Stelimus hid under the blanket and started thinking that they would kill him if he slept made me feel bad for the poor dude, I mean going from an adult to an infant deer would be harrowing to say the least. The argument between Anglacite and the stag/doe got pretty heated there, I wonder what role they will play in the future. Kimlarius seems like an interesting character also. I am curious as to what the nature of the black snow is and why Anglacite despises ponies so much...
This chapter, in my opinion, was even better than the previous one! I only have one minor thing to point out, at the beginning of the argument between Anglacite and the elderly deer, you have
everything else is grand!
I will probably have to look at your previous stories to get the cameo.
Thank you for posting the second chapter, I will be looking forward to the future chapters.
The big reveal I'm waiting for is what pony he is being forced to marry.
6506271 *fixed
And yes. I was told some time ago that I wasn't detailing anymore (which comes from me being lazy), so I started doing it like I used to and it feels better this way.
I don't fully understand what is going on with the whole lineage and pony song thing, but I hope it can be further explained later on.
6506317 Alright! Thanks for posting the chapter!
Oh yes, the details make stories so much better, in my opinion at least, and the way you do it is really great.
6506319 Of course! It's not really meant to be understood at first. I'm doing it on purpose. *diabolical laughter*
6506299 Who is marrying what?
Possibly both?
So far the reading of this story is good, but I think that this story might become confusing with all the different things that happening
For that I can see the protagonist has been resurrected is a new born deer, that is now royalty as well, is some form of haft-bread and that he is being almost immediately being to be carted off to the Crystal Empire, for his education with the ponies, where he will be cutoff from his "heritage culture". The problem that I see in this story is that the protagonist doesn't seem to have even needed to have been human in order for the story function, that it has no bearing to the story if he can't interacted with the world, being a baby, and won't be able to for years to come. If he had arrived as more of a child or a teenager, than his origins as a human might have mattered because he could be able to interact with the word more on his own and his perspective as a human would matter more. Still, the HiE story is original as in I have never seen one that the protagonist arrive as a deer and that he is going to start his visit in the Crystal Empire instead of Ponyville is also different for a change.
I wander his Shining and Cadence will treat him like a son, what will he think of the deers if he is cutoff from them at such an early age and be already have a lifetime experience being an entirely different creature.
I am still looking to reading this more
Interesting fic so far, i shall keep my Eyes on it!
Liking it so far, couple of mistakes I spotted for you though.
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6506588 *directed by M. Night. Shyamalan* (this won't get old anytime soon)
6507725 *gasp* I did the unspeakable...atrocity of spelling.
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6506968 You misunderstood the chapter entirely. If I'm to understand this correctly, you thought Gregary was a half-breed because of the otherworldly appearance of the father, which is understandable...or it's because I keep using deer and reindeer interchangeably...
As for him being a human, it'll become influential in his judgement and experience later in the story as his memory becomes less and less frizzy. For now, it won't any purpose other than making references and using Godwin's law one too many times.
Also, you don't need to worry about everything that is happening. I usually remain focused on either one or two things when writing a story so that the events don't become too extreme for the readers.
You started to debate the possibilities of the story.
That's so much fun! I'm starting the third chapter right away!
I think there's a mistake in this line here.
Pretty sure God-King Belarus doesn't mean to say that he will remain as part of the superior race of ponies.
Now, that being said, this is a cool premise. I like the idea, and I am interested to see what sort of worldbuilding you will put into this.
Oh deer...
So assassination attempt, great. And we get barely the bat of a eyelash from most parties? I smell either a more corrupt land than expected or some really messed-up characters. Maybe both.
I will however mention laughing at the bad touch line. Excellent.
Best line: Teach me to be an uneducated tundra bumpkin who judges without reason! It's the only thing keeping alive my will to live!
Well, the story is getting interesting with the characters survived first assassination attempt at his first few days of life, is there a party for such events. I am surprised that his 'mother' hasn't shown much concern about the assassination attempt on her son, didn't the guard told her anything about what happened? The doe was able to move on his own power so soon after birth? I know that actual deers can start moving on their own almost immediately after their birth but is it supposed to be the also the case in your story? What is the life cycle of your deer anyway? do they have the same life expectancy as a pony?
6508442 What are you talking about? That's not in there.
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6508526 As mentioned before, the lineage of the God-King develops much more quickly than normal reindeer. Gregary is just an aberration that developed much more quickly than even that. And the mother? Well, if she didn't react all that much one can assume that such an event wasn't that too unexpected coming from the culprit.
The story so far have really gotten me interested, can't wait to see waht the future will hold for our Young Prince, and i do love our main characters sarcastic comments, "Oh boy! Racial slanderizing! Please, mother. Teach me to be an uneducated tundra bumpkin who judges without reason!" Aaaah that one wass just brilliant.
You mister are a very bad mister and you should feel ashamed for the cliffhanger.
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(already writing next chapter)
Generic older sibling mad at main character for no real reason? Check
Older sibling getting crazy ridiculous punishment for trying to harm main character? Check
Describing every scene in detail, likely ignoring the rule of chekov's gun? Check
Giving away half the plot in the synopsis? Check
Generic old guard that punishes older sibling talking to an infant, then commenting out loud how ridiculous that is, then immediately doing both again? Check
Honestly, the tell is so strong in this story that it's just plain annoying. You're seriously padding the story by describing every little thing, using lines like 'as is usual in a royal castle' and such. Plus the rule I mentioned. 'If you mention a gun over the fireplace in act one. By the end of act 2 that gun is going off somehow'. It basically means don't describe things in detail unless it has major bearing on the plot at some point. The guards armor? How relevant will that be when the protagonist is shipped off to Equestria?
Sorry, but here, I'm done.
6508889 You do realize I'm doing that on purpose, right? I'm even saying it through the main character calling out the clichés. Heck, the second she walked in Gregary knew what was going to happen. His human memories and experiences serve him well.
Second, I'm describing the surrounding environments for the future so I don't have to repeat them. There's no 'chekov's gun' (I had to search what that was) here because they don't have any 'possible' purpose. This is a 'Super Contradiction' where you're telling me not to detail the surroundings when others tell me to do so. If I did not detail the guards, how would you know what they looked like? Do they have armor? Do they not? Are they flesh or are they golem? Can their ears hang low and wobble to and fro'?
Lastly, there is a reason for the sibling's anger, and I did hint at that, but the reason will be explained much later in the fic.
I understand your points, but I've been writing for quite a long time and those clichés have become muscle spasms that I avoid unless there's a reason. If you don't like the story, that's okay. Something can't be loved by everyone. It's impossible. After all, perfection is true imperfection.
Thanks for reading anyways. Just in-case, I don't intend to continue the clichés past the third chapter (but I'll do so just to troll you if you keep reading. 
) Also...Shipped off to Equestria? The Crystal KIngdom is literally right next door. There's no shipping off. YOU'RE ALL WEIRD!
Something tells me he's going to be king of the country before his body is fully formed....And I find this amusing.