Ahh wonderful!!! Misunderstandings abound, in the next chapter. Sooo much like Twilight to jump the gun like that.
From the looks of this chapter, it seems strongly rushed. It was going fine until halfway into the party, it seems to have gone fast forward. It would have gone better if a dialouge was opened but basically it just escalated too quickly. I guess you can base Twilight's actions on herd instinct but immediately condemming withought proper investigation? I thought she learned not to judge a book from its cover. Isnt she supposed to be the princess of friendship? She's failing that now.
Feel free to ignore this,but next chapter, I'd like to see Twilight realize just how badly she screwed up! And that her actions may have just cost them a potentially powerful alliance... And a sister too, Barb already understands our fatherly protagonist, she'd be heartbroken if anything happens to him and Twilight was the cause.
Cool when is the next chapter coming out?
Also first
Nice descriptions given, I got an idea of what the outfits looked like without the need for the pictures. Those where a nice bonus.
Ahh wonderful!!! Misunderstandings abound, in the next chapter.
Sooo much like Twilight to jump the gun like that.
From the looks of this chapter, it seems strongly rushed. It was going fine until halfway into the party, it seems to have gone fast forward. It would have gone better if a dialouge was opened but basically it just escalated too quickly. I guess you can base Twilight's actions on herd instinct but immediately condemming withought proper investigation? I thought she learned not to judge a book from its cover. Isnt she supposed to be the princess of friendship? She's failing that now.
Feel free to ignore this,but next chapter, I'd like to see Twilight realize just how badly she screwed up!
And that her actions may have just cost them a potentially powerful alliance... And a sister too, Barb already understands our fatherly protagonist, she'd be heartbroken if anything happens to him and Twilight was the cause.
well twilight screws everything up
more?
7171906 the next chapter is all most done just got to wait for my editor to get done with it.
He had aged well would be more correct.
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Like always