Preparations halt when Princess Celestia forbids the playing of the Equestrian national anthem at a concert after a copy of its original is discovered to still exist. Despite her warnings, Octavia Melody endeavors to uncover the truth.
When five foals asked Princess Twilight Sparkle to please try and paint the moon purple, she only agreed because she thought she couldn't do it. She wished she had been right.
it's fine, but i was wondering if you would like to know a better wording? 'Luna walked three legged to the changing table' -- it's subtle, but it allows a much smoother flow. just read it to yourself and how it feels.
Sleep as your rocked by the stars
-you're- i think right?
Luna song faded
Luna's or however that punctuation works...
loved the story tho, and sorry for the edits, i edit for 2 others so i get in a habit. (can't wait for next chapter of 'the herd')
7616063 lol harmony pie was saying the same thing couple days ago. if i write, i usually like rewording things to sound smoother. from reading 'herd life' you certainly have gotten better.
loved it. it was very sweet.
it's fine, but i was wondering if you would like to know a better wording? 'Luna walked three legged to the changing table' -- it's subtle, but it allows a much smoother flow. just read it to yourself and how it feels.
-you're- i think right?
Luna's or however that punctuation works...
loved the story tho, and sorry for the edits, i edit for 2 others so i get in a habit. (can't wait for next chapter of 'the herd')
7615945 Thanks for pointing those out. I haven't looked at the story in a long time, and it's funny to see how my writing was back then.
7616063 lol harmony pie was saying the same thing couple days ago. if i write, i usually like rewording things to sound smoother. from reading 'herd life' you certainly have gotten better.
Nice bit of cute fluff that I some how missed. Very much enjoyed it.
I'm feeling a Prince of Egypt vibe with the lullaby
This was some nice cute Luna fluff
Im pretty sure he knows what she meant