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TheOnionKnight69
The one, the only, Orion...Brony extraordinare! Writer of casual, clop, and anything requested.
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~ ticket for speeding 350$
Goin over 9000 in a 35 ...priceless
Slow it down a bit ... Read like a boulder goin down a steep hill from the top
6421706 Ticket for not making sense - 100$; reads like a boulder? Maybe, but I give credit for Lavon, he's from OG 80's My little Pony
~ I meant the pacing of the story starts to pick up too much speed there at the end
Boulder pun on the evul lava guy
6421732 Yeah it does! It's one of those shitty mysteries where it'll explain more as the story progress; Some people like it some don't; also I believe this story is a continuation of some sort
Stick around for the ride or don't, the Boulder must roll on
Could use a bit of work. Not bad. Pacing definitely needs work.
6422345 Defintely; I struggled to come up with the idea that the protagonist only knows so much about his own existence...One of those mystery type of story elements
not exactly everypony's cup of tea...
~ lil cliff note I preferred the lava monsters voice in the Orange text... Why switch to blue ?
6423845 Little bug, bro
Holy shit people be cruel! 16 Dislikes already!? I kinda wonder why, it didn't seem that horrendous to me
~ dis is getting good keep it up
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Well, truthfully, the reason may be in the character. I have yet to read the story, but, considering, not only the summary of the story, and the description on the author, this seems a bit like a self-insert (which are commonly disliked). Furthermore, the story seems rather rushed just from what I've glanced at from the first chapter alone. Couple that with the many notable cliches, and seemingly forced references, I'm afraid that, in general, people do not seek these kinds of things in a story. Most members of the site, including myself, have been members for a while, and have seen these kind of plotlines played out to death. Hell, the first story I wrote was essentiallly just as cliche, if not moreso, and I have had it on an unprecedented hiatus since.
However, I have not gotten rid of it. Why? Well, take a glance at the other stories I have written and improvement is seen. I use my first story as a benchmark, a way of showing how I've gotten better. Some may prefer to continue their first stories, sure, but I left mine there, untouched, for quite a while now. To you, and the author, I mean no offense, and am simply providing my contructive criticism by saying that the story, while with potential, is essentially an echo of an era long passed. If it came down to it, I'd be happy to assist in any way possible with advice. As of now though, I recommend--to the author--seeing how else you can better you writing as I have.
Cheers.
6425914 Meaning of life...revealed! I agree with everything said and wish to better myself from what is said here...Unfortunately I have a certain flow of cliche in my story and often it suffers, I suppose different folks have different strokes. Thanks for the input, though!
~ pony harem ... Nice ....
The clop alone makes this story redeemable
so far I like it so have a thumbs up.
6427924 Buck yeah!
~ finally a good story with screwball .. But where's discord ?
~ holy sheet that escalated quickly
6434568 The boulder has reached the station!
6434570 lol
Tell me, how many people did you expect to get that reference?
6435587 Well well well, I'm gonna say you're the first genius in the crowd here.
Kudos, my friend.
You need to be more clear with this story. Sometimes they seem anthro, other times they seem non-anthro.
6438474 dem hooves and tails! Though they wear clothes on a daily basis...There the normal mares from the show, so they'd be up to your waist while standing on all four hooves, and would be tall on hind legs
confuesed? So am I!
6435703 This fic is awesome!
6438517 I love this story, keep up the good work man! I can't wait for the next chapter!
6438884 Holy shit; your impressed with MY work? You do that legit Deathstroke and Deadpool story tho
I'm honored to have you as a fan
6438910 I'm happy to be a fan my friend!
~ I've noticed a trend in your stories since chapter five ...a Dropping word count in subsequent chapters and more rushed chapters with less detail and cohesiveness .. Slow down story telling isn't a race ...it's an art form
6440122 Sorry bro, it's just that I've failed my fans before; with strories with no chapter updates for months
I shouldn't rush, but I also don't wanna fall behind
6424200
Foalcon, and he didn't even warn about it.
Auto-downvote.
6442840 Geez, you and 34 other haters can't take a splash of wtf...Tis a shame! Better call the cops on me, one hint of foalcon!?
holy shit dude i actually like this story oh and dont worry im not bothered about foalcon or anything like that it doesnt bother me just ignore the other dick heads.
6444218 good to know! Obviously I can't please everypony but yeah...hehe the show must go on!
Story started decently but now it's just weirding me out, especially turning Derpy into a human.
6449388 Aww, come on...Just a little chaotic
~ wait wat just happen ... ? Zombies ...
6450627
Well, it IS a comedy called 'just a typical day'.
6451168 Haha, I was hoping I didn't have to explain it
That's exactly why it's called Just a Typical Day; so much retarted, uncalled for, unethical things happen in this fic, sort of my gimmick 
Why does this story have so many dislikes? I mean, it can't be that bad, right? ...Right?
8393918
Well, how bad is it?
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I love this story.
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You're welcome
6438474
That's what I'm thinking, I'm so confused
I can see I've nudged my good dude into writing again! I myself have been lazy as buck! But I'm glad I inspired you to get back into it!
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Oh you! I ripped your story off and you know it! We may call it a collab, but you know what this is.
I would like to point out an inconsistency between this chapter and chapter 6 "Spawn of Evil". in chapter 6, you mention that all the CMC are 16 years old. But in this latest chapter, you reduced their age to 13. I find this to be very inconsistent since Dr. Whooves said they were only going back one month.
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Oof, good eye! I’ll fix and update the chapter (I accidentally uploaded the 500 word version instead of the juicy 1300 word version.