After being knocked out during the iron pony competition, Spike has a dream of Rarity in a magical land. Unfortunately for him, his fantasy is taken away as he is brought back to reality.
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Ok story, I guess...
where is that pic from?
send me the link to the pic part of the movie
Oh Spike... one day mate, one day.
Well, the concept of this story was great. You could have expanded a lot more on it, but it's definitely nothing I've seen before. You weren't out of character with anyone, although you could have done AJ's Southern drawl a bit better.
Bad grammar seems to be your biggest downfall. Try and make sure that the punctuation is correct, and keep your paragraphs neat looking. It'd be a bit easier to read if you did so.
Other than that, good job.