To my faithful followers! And anyone else who scrolls down this low in the comments:
Chapter 5 just started. I really shouldn't be writing now, but the sooner I get this obligation off my chest the sooner I can enjoy my weekend. I hope I can finish this one come Friday evening, as I have a concert to attend. Come! Pour your praise and encouragement on me! And we just may see Pinkie's chapter done by tomorrow evening
Thank you, thank you, thank you for a lesbian RD that is more than just a walking stereotype who wants to vomit if she just imagines a penis. I especially mention this because I once stumbled upon a bad fic – don’t ask me which one I can't remember the name – in which an author with the subtlety of an sledgehammer made her say how gross, stupid, useless and so on they are just so that absolutely everyone knows that she’s a lesbian. Because all Lesbians hates them with passion. It was handled far better in this story with RD still dislikes them but doesn’t acts like a gang of penises killed her parents. Hmm I talking awful lot about male genitales... Topic change!
The RD chapter is certainly the best chapter of this story so far. The buildup between RD and Lilly that led to the sex felt about right, the sex scene itself felt more natural and for once it was nice to see that it wasn’t the Changeling who made the first move. So yeah this story is moving into a good direction.
However, there’s one small error I noticed. Once or twice Lilly said Jesus, which doesn’t make any sense since this story takes place in an humanized Equestria. But otherwise I’ve no complaints.
705882 I actually just noticed that myself... Wow, I guess you could say force of habit, huhn? I probably dropped God in there once or twice as well... I should go back and change that. As usual, your feedback is both appreciated and welcome. Thanks for the read, and I hope you enjoyed the story!
Yes. Chapter 4 does include the obligatory "Twenty percent" reference. You have been warned.
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Every time I read a chapter it captures my attention and at the same time arrouses me. You have the making of a great writer
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That was... Surprisingly beautiful. I hope you've written some other things like that. I'm going to have to read them, now >.>
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Well you'll just have to wait until chapters 6 and 7. I've decided to split them up, on account of last chapter being incredibly long.
And as for love...
Liliana's a changeling. Love is a foreign concept to them.
Why Ajax, he's not clean at all!
PINKIE HAIR-PIE NEXT!!! =3
I WANNA SEE PINKIE'S BIG, FLUFFY BUSH!!
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Clean? Where's the fun in that?
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Patience. At least let me get through my work week before I get on the next chapter. I'm exhausted.
To my faithful followers! And anyone else who scrolls down this low in the comments:
Chapter 5 just started. I really shouldn't be writing now, but the sooner I get this obligation off my chest the sooner I can enjoy my weekend. I hope I can finish this one come Friday evening, as I have a concert to attend. Come! Pour your praise and encouragement on me! And we just may see Pinkie's chapter done by tomorrow evening
Thank you, thank you, thank you for a lesbian RD that is more than just a walking stereotype who wants to vomit if she just imagines a penis. I especially mention this because I once stumbled upon a bad fic – don’t ask me which one I can't remember the name – in which an author with the subtlety of an sledgehammer made her say how gross, stupid, useless and so on they are just so that absolutely everyone knows that she’s a lesbian. Because all Lesbians hates them with passion. It was handled far better in this story with RD still dislikes them but doesn’t acts like a gang of penises killed her parents. Hmm I talking awful lot about male genitales... Topic change!
The RD chapter is certainly the best chapter of this story so far. The buildup between RD and Lilly that led to the sex felt about right, the sex scene itself felt more natural and for once it was nice to see that it wasn’t the Changeling who made the first move. So yeah this story is moving into a good direction.
However, there’s one small error I noticed. Once or twice Lilly said Jesus, which doesn’t make any sense since this story takes place in an humanized Equestria. But otherwise I’ve no complaints.
705882
I actually just noticed that myself... Wow, I guess you could say force of habit, huhn? I probably dropped God in there once or twice as well... I should go back and change that. As usual, your feedback is both appreciated and welcome. Thanks for the read, and I hope you enjoyed the story!
Holy shit! 2 weeks in and 2k views! Thank you, EVERYONE!