Howdy, I've returned...probably?
Spike was always an assistant and living in the shadows of ponies his species was mighty and greedy and even though he was a young dragon he was tired of being used by ponies the one he loved just used him and rejected his love and the person who takes care of him all of his life just uses him as a puppet, he wants to claim all of Equestria and beyond that for himself he will gain support from any pony that will help him take the throne from Celestia and the Mane 6.
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Weird, the word total is less than the published chapters length
Also...
6353778 i just love bender
OK, I'm just gonna tell you right now that this story needs a whole lot more work. First off, you really need to revise and edit; because there's a shit loud of capital letters that don't even need to be capitalize. Second, this chapter is just way too short; hell, it doesn't even feel like a chapter. If anything, it just feels like a short and rushed prologue summary. Bottom line, at least try to make this 3,000 words or longer.
6354963 I would go back and continue with my original plans of doing 4,000 words per chapter and I did plan on editing mistakes but I rather just do small chapters since its quite clear for part 1 of this story It's only spike recruiting ponies the 2nd part of this story will be Longer and edited more but I doubt I will edit the first part of any of the chapters and I slightly rushed this well the 1st chapter since I was tired while making it, I only get to make stories at night because I have to work in the morning so yea so if you do ever view the 2nd part of the story it will be edited more and most likely longer
6360047 I wanted to ask are you unsure about the 2nd chapter of this? its hard to tell since my vision is not very good and i can hardly tell what the Emoticons means
I... Please... Edit this chapter, as there are way too many errors. Capital letters in where there's not supposed to be. No punctuation marks in areas there are supposed to be.
Would you like help in editing? Really, I can help here.
6365116 I will be editing it possibly since tonight I am making another chapter so i "May" go back and edit that chapter it is somewhat unlikely I will edit it since at night I get really tired so while making the next chapter of the story its possible ill edit the red stallion chapter
6365127
I'm writing this at night as well, and I still have time for making sure it's fine. If you can't do it at night, fix it in the morning. Or ask someone else to do it. I can't really believe you in any case if you're comments look the same as your story. Unclean, broken, grammatically incorrect. Many things need to be fixed. Immediately.
6366123 Well right in the morning when I wake up I must go straight to work and do a few other things and I was raised to do things myself and not ask for help sorry if that upsets you that's just how I was raised.
6366452
Fine. Good luck with the story then.
i thought this was good, nice plot development and well thought out, don't listen to the ass-hats this was a good read.