It was a bright spring day in Ponyville and was the day that the town storyteller Parfait, would watch 6 special Fillies and colts, so their parents could spend time together as friends should.
(This is a one shot I couldn't help but write it, I wanted to do something different than action )
(Special Thanks to PrincessParfait for pre reading it and letting me use your OC)
(Stay tune for more I'm still writing my Fallout Equestria story just at a small rut in it for now, so trying clear my head of all the other Ideas I'm getting just by reading Fanfics here)
(Well here it is hope you enjoy it)
Chapters (1)
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This.......Was lovely.
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I'm glad you liked it I was experimenting with a different style than what I usually write
Please comments are welcomed so please if you read my story please give some feedback.
Thanks
Very well done in my opinion.
I look forward to reading your other work!
-Tag
I happened upon this in the Buried Treasures collection. It's sweet and happy, and I liked it. If you'll permit me a little (constructive, I hope) criticism, though?
Far too much of the bulk of the story is a synopsis of an episode. Synopses are fine, in general, but it left your characters almost totally undefined. I enjoyed the little foals, and felt that if we could get to know them—view their reactions, perhaps, to pieces of the story—it wouldn't be so easy to skim over the large paragraphs that represent Hurricane Fluttershy.
(Also:
*Sprained.)
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Thanks I was just trying a unique Idea so this was just kind of a test story
I'm used to writing action and intrigue with many sub plots inside the main plot 
I may turn this into a slice of life stories of these Foals when I have the time and if people think its worth fleshing the foals out more 
but right now I just don't see the demand for it 
Thanks again for reading it and I have taken your criticism to heart 
again I was just testing the waters with this oneshot 