This story is a sequel to The Soul of a Pony
On a trip to see friends in Manehattan, Spike falls ill and cannot be woken up. Without knowing why he's asleep, there's little hope of finding a remedy, but it's not as though anyone can just ask him what's wrong. Well, it's a good thing Twilight Sparkle isn't just anyone.
Twilight hasn't had occasion to travel into anypony's head recently, but if there were ever a time to dust off an old spell, this is it. The only problem is, she can't go in herself this time.
If only there were another talented unicorn in Manehattan who could help...
Chapters (6)
IT BEGINS
I have been writing this story for more than a month now, and I only just noticed that Spike and Trixie have the same expression in their character tag icons.
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From Wikipedia: "Wyrd is a concept in Anglo-Saxon culture roughly corresponding to fate or personal destiny. Their concept of fate, wyrd, was stronger than that of the Classical Pagans as there was no resisting it. The word is ancestral to Modern English weird, which retains its original meaning only dialectically."
I actually took it from Macbeth's Wyrd Sisters. Most versions I've seen name them the Weird Sisters or just the Three Witches, but the first time I read it, they were Wyrd. It changes the meaning somewhat, and it's appropriate for what they do.
Very poor choice of words on Luna's part when speaking to Trixie. Looks like that princess needs a few more lessons on getting her point across. But, it was funny.
Curious to see how this plays out. Till next time!
I love the writing style you have. Cannot wait to read more of your story. Its captivating to say the least.
A good start. I look forward to more.
Will you explain why did Twilight choose Trixie of all ponies for the job?
Another enjoyable chapter. A little lacking in details, but otherwise Good job.
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Will I explain? Will the story explain? Will Twilight explain? These are very different questions.
As for the latter two, you'll just have to wait. I'm not in the habit of spoiling my own stories, you know.
If the story doesn't go into it, then I might. Generally, though, I prefer to leave details of the story to the story itself; if I wanted to talk about certain details, I would have included them where they were relevant.
I'll happily talk about the writing process and my inspirations, though.
Here's Chapter 3.
A horizontal rule seems to have disappeared somewhere between the chapter text and the published version; I'm working on fixing it, but I didn't want to throw off my schedule. Now I have to check the other chapters to see if the same issue pops up there.
A quick check has revealed that chapters 1 and 2 have no such issues with their scene breaks. There must be something weird with this chapter specifically. All the text is there, all the italics are where they should be, but no [ hr ]. Hmm.
I checked what I've written so far for the rest of the story, and the formatting is fine there. It appears to be only this line of this chapter that's having issues. Can anyone else see the rule between the two scenes, or is it absent for everyone?
I didn't "fix" it, but there is at least a line there now. I put [ hr ][ hr ] so that hopefully at least one of the tags would work. Now I can see one line that's lower than it should be. My guess is that there's a minor formatting issue on either the site or my browser. Stay tuned for more tales of formatting adventure!
The browser on my phone can see both lines. I guess the problem is specific to my laptop, so I'm going to remove the second tag and hope for the best.
So, it looks like Spike's personalities are fractured. Wonder what could have prompted that?
If Trixie will survive to find out, that is.
Another enjoyable chapter. Good job.
Chapter 4! Sorry it's late. Columbus Day means no classes, so I thought it was still Sunday and forgot to upload the chapter.
I'm pretty pleased with how this one turned out.
Young fool. Only now, at the end, do you understand.
Trixie's going to have some stories to tell after this is done, that's for sure.
Another enjoyable chapter. Good work.
This is actually great progress. The holder of Spike's memories values stories as currency, and how many great tales can Trixie spin on a moment's notice? She'll jump back in and sweet-talk that Beast into sharing some memories in no time.
Another enjoyable chapter. Well done.
Well, at least I managed to put this chapter up on the right day, even if it was a few hours later than intended. Wi-fi issues at my house delayed me a bit. Also, I guess this comment is even later than that.
One more chapter to go!
its a great read.
It's over!
Hmmm kinda disappointing that all that work was in the end for nothing. None the less great story.
I am... not sure what this is trying to do with Spike's character. There's quite a bit of stuff that is implied by it, although I think... especially the intellectual aspect of Spike is rather debatable, but the aspects are ultimately interesting bits of Spike's character that I liked reading about.
However, it doesn't seem like there's much exploration of them or tying of them together, nor any real... progress for Spike. The ending particularly doesn't really reconcile his different aspects, nor even goes into their conflicts, it just says "Oh! That's right, I'm one person. Okay." and then it ends.
I suppose it fits together with the idea that this wasn't Spike actually having a psychological problem so much as falling ill, but... it still leaves me a little underwhelmed. Like there was this buildup to a resolution, but instead of a resolution we just get a cessation of the buildup.
From my perspective, it seems we learned more about Trixie in this story than we did Spike. I suppose that's to be expected since we see all the events through Trixie's perspective.
Not sure how to think about this ending. It just sort of ends. Well, I at least got enjoyment out of the journey, so congrats on that!
Your writing here for the first fanfiction and sequel you've ever done is better than some other writers who have done many more. Keep writing!
Are you participating in NaNoWriMo? You should!
Did I miss something? Because I don't see why Twilight didn't go in herself.