Authors Note:This story will contain the supposed death of some of your favourite ponies, that is why I deemed it worthy of the dark and tragedy tags these tags are mainly for the supposed death of Luna, Spike and Celestia.If you cannot handle this, then please stop reading here.
If you don't like anything about the story, please don't hesitate to PM me or comment, and I promise you that I will not become indignant towards you. As I understand that is your opinion, and I welcome your criticism, and I adore the comments/messages from people saying they liked it. So don't be a coward and hide behind the dislike button. If there is nothing stated in this note that worries you, happy reading. (Click the "More" button to see the summary).
Brony Prophet
Book summary: In this story, Princess Luna is faced with her inner demons, but she only has the will to suppress them for so long. Princess Celestia suspects something is happening with her dear sister, yet she can't figure it out. Whenever she asks Luna, Luna can’t speak due to a curse. However as Celestia questions Luna, Luna’s inner demons grow stronger.
She ends up entering her inner self and attempts to fight it, but when she loses, all hell breaks loose and this time the elements can't stop this enemy, because as Luna loses. The elements of harmony are destroyed due to an ancient and forgotten power that Luna’s inner demon knows about. It is left up to a single alicorn to fight off this terrifying antagonist. Will this be the end of Equestria as we know it, or will the single alicorn sate the disaster?
Pre Readers:
will people stop hiding behind the dislike button please. Please provide feedback don't be a coward.
Since you want feedback so badly, I'll give you mine.
That's one thing that you don't need to worry about.
When I read this, I feel like a machine is telling the story. I can't really grasp the emotion of the characters. They seem so two-dimensional, unreal. 
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I like the overarching plot of the story so far.
However, The way you execute the plot is rather...bland and blunt, so to speak.
If you added just a little more detail to the emotional parts, I'll be satisfied.
(BTW, don't change the fight scenes, they are good enough.
6537125 thank you for the feedback but do you have a suggestion on how to change the mechanized monolog?
6537143
Well...it is your story, so I can't exactly tell you what to do.
But, if I were to change anything, I would lengthen the thoughts and have them speak in a more natural way. Oh, I almost forgot (and that's not a good thing). Maybe you should have more dialogue when Twilight speaks to the others about the 'evil' presence.
Again, my personal opinion. No offense to you or anything.
6537158 none taken however I'm scared to write dialog between the group as last time I did it was an epic failure they were out of character and the review was terrible that's why I avoided it but I was originally a going to do that but my fear got the better of me tomorrow night I will rework the story thanks for the time you put into helping it's more then most.
6537200
You're welcome!
I look forward to seeing how you rework it!
6537212 all you mate without you I would have never found the mistakes so you would do the CMC (Cutie Mark Crusaders) proud so thank you, you are a friend to me.
You have my attention!
This isn't gonna end well...
Damn! Luna's giving NM a hard time!
This is not gonna end well...
The Battle begins...
DEATH TO NIGHTMARE MOON!
6896237 Lol you should change your name to rapid fire, you comment a mile a minute, and I'm glad you like it
6896396 Eh heh...
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Mind if I drop in? *Teleports in with a squad of Deathwing Terminators*
Throne, this is getting intense!
6897279 What do you mean ?
6897373 *grumbles in exasperation* No one seems to get WH40K references....
Frag... Astartes, PERPARE FOR BATTLE!
Nuts... We've got two bad guys now...
6897704 sorry about miss reading your reference to warhammer however i have not played it so i guess thats why i didn't get it
ignore the nay sayers, i think you did a great job with this so far. id love for your thoughts on my stories sometime. unfortunately they have more dislikes then likes and i cant figure out why. I tried to do my best with 2 of them. Apparently others are too picky though.
ilove how you incorporated the Crusaders of the Lost mark into this, holding with continuity, i love it. I also loved how you mentioned Twilights corruption at the hands of Sombra. Keep up the good work man.
amazing man.
i know the feeling man, Im listening to Music you provided links to while reading this, and its 4 in the morning where i live. Ive been reading non stop. I think you did an awesome job. Feel free to read some of mine and tell me what you think okk. And keep up the great work.
WOW MAN, Now we get an EVIL TWILY? NICE.
i think its good as is, but thats me man.
DUDE> SOMBRA?!?!?!!? is my only guess at the Unicorn Stallion. DOES THAT GUY EVER STAY DEAD?? and again good job on the story man .
6918483 I'm glad you enjoyed my story, I hope you like the sequel as well. That has less dislikes but its not very popular.
By the Emperor! That was insane!
Damn, you do some amazing scenes!
Crap, Sombra! And I take my helmet off to you, I have enjoyed this story tremendously!
6920994 I'm glad you enjoyed my book so much I hope you find the sequel equally enjoyable