Rainbow Dash. Fastest flyer in Equestria. Tough. Made it out of many crashes mostly unscathed before.
Guess her luck just ran out.
Now most of her body has been replaced with robotic limbs, most of her brain with artificial intelligence. Suffering with and extreme case of amnesia and lack of emotion and personality, Rainbow has to get used to her new life, as do her friends, whilst one of them tries to hide her heartbreak.
Includes: TwiDash, Robo-Dashie and some gore. Maybe some sexual references.
Twilight is still a unicorn in this AU
Chapters (6)
To short and rushed to be a captive chapter, though I will admit that I like the idea of the story.
You make it hard to figure out who's talking.
Jesus, It's like she's Davros or Max Capricorn.
6309777 - Or General Grievous.
Now I'm picturing Rainbow in the role of Davros. I guess she'd be Dashros.
6309960 No, I refuse to believe that she would detonate the reality bomb.
Why the hell does she need rocket launchers and how do they fit in her shoulders?
They put $&@# ROCKET LAUNCHERS in her but couldn't figure out recognizing when a dragon is two feet tall and docile?!
Also, this story needs spoopy cover art ASAP
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6310464 The magic of science? Maybe she's also "bigger on the inside"
6310464 Science img2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20110707022725/thecreatures/images/d/dd/Rainbow_dash_shrug_by_dropletx1-d3j6g5i.png
6309710 Yeah, I have a problem with that and haven't found anyone to help me out yet :/
She could no longer feel emotions, and that made her saad
6312457 I like the way you think!
The only reason why I clicked this story.
Now I'm going to read it because it has a sad tag.
As explained later on, it's fake sadness. Programmed into her, AI so to speak. it may seem realistic to outsiders but it isn't
Seeing your friend so hurt like this, it fills you with determination!
(I'm rereading my own work and I couldn't help myself)
6309710 haven't read yet but yeah the chapter size is an issue. I usually aim for 7-10 pages for a chapter in my stories. but still going to give this a shot.
Okay. the concept has great potential but the executtion is where it's being hurt. Chapters too short and too rushed.
Example. the fact that Robodash after after encounter problems has an immediate reason behind it. Attack mode on Spike, She is at first confused then goes oh yeah, programing. She has too many answerrs. A better way is to have the doc answer those as he checks up on how she is doing. Merge some chapters to make bigger ones and flesh this out.
If need be get an editor, One of mine really helped me improve one of my stories so someone can help you to.
As is not worth a track to me. If improved I'll be back. Heck I was planning my own cyber Dash at some point so I like the idea.
You have my attention...
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I agree with you. Idea of the story is great, the rest, well, it could use some improvement.
♣ vis arbor ♣
i forgot this existed and after readind it again i see why.
But ill read the rest.
Poor Dash....
Really pulling on the old heartstrings here...
Throne, just so many feels in this story!
I like this story, but there are some logic flaws sometimes. The explanation of what a tree is was completely unnecessary. I try not to be too much of a meanie, and I'm usually pretty chill but it kinda annoyed me. (Since this is the first comment I have given you, I hope we aren't off to a bad start. :P) keep up the good work! ~
Hi Again! Again with the unnecessary weapons... But of course I'm just a big old meanie head huh? Although I'm very anal about things like this (hehe 'anal') I do enjoy the story, it could be longer, but I understand sometimes it's hard. As always keep up the good work! ~
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Gotta love Undertale
Do you know wan this story is go to continue
Where's the story? It's been years
“Short hatius” My butt