Hello everybody! I like to read fanfics that involve Luna, the Princess of the Night, and I'll be writing some fanfics for you guys too, soon.
Princess Luna and Princess Celestia are heading to our dimension for a diplomatic meetings with the leaders of our world. The portal brings them to Asia, so they ride a private aircraft to Paris for their first diplomatic meeting. But when the plane crash lands on the outskirts of some unknown islands, they must fight to survive... and hope to be found. They are Stranded... Stranded Deep.
I do not own Stranded Deep or the Icon. Stranded Deep is made by Beam Team Games.
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A very nice start for your first story! I'd encourage you to look around for a prereader or editor to help you smooth out some of the errors in the story. You're doing well so far though, and you'll only get better!
I'll be watching...
~Doc
Oh Yeah:D
AND
Thanks Doc!
6306121
I mentioned that it was hard for them to fly in our dimension due to their undersized wings.
6309295
It's fine.
I loathe and detest how, when you try to reach other islands, the sharks ram into your teeny-tiny craft.
6309772
Yeah! I got knocked into the water with nothing but a water bottle once...
It's good, but there's just one thing. How'd the plane land? Is it a plane that can land on water? If it was a passenger plane, it'd probably just radio in the coordinates of the flare and then coast guard would go and check it out. Still a good story, atleast.
I'd recommend two fixes. One of which'll change a couple of lines, the other could expand the stories length.
Option A, the Short One: Make it a company that decided to fly the six ponies out to Paris personally, and the plane had the ability to land in water because the company did something like rescue and whatnot.
Option B, the Long One: Make it so the plane reports the flare's coordinates, the mane six join the coastguard on land, and then the group get the princesses, a storm starts and the ship is sunk near land, and yet another raft floats to the top from it, and the crew is either killed, stays in the story, or something like that. I'm not sure what'd happen there, but it's up to you.
Oh and, the coastguard could even use planes for this, but it's unlikely due to the possibility of the water being rough.
Good luck on the next chapter! I hope to read more in the future.
6342038
Thanks for pointing that out!
P.S: I forgot to add the fact that it is a Hydroplane, but you pointed out many things I missed! Thanks a lot!6343705 No problem.
epilogue please
Okay then!
Why doesn't this story have a crossover tag? Uh, you are still alive, right?