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While relaxing after a performance, the Rainbooms discover Sunset has scars that she definitely didn't have before the Fall Formal.
As of 9/14/2015, this story has a dramatic reading by Goombasa. Give it a listen!
7/7/2016: Now with cover art designed by the very generous Novel-Idea! Thank you so much!
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I'm a little frightened by how often our headcannons overlap. xD
Anyway, another awesome story! I love how you write these types of things, with the conflict coming up naturally, then life moving on afterwords (as it does in real life). Something else I really like is that Sunset was very self-aware (as she tends to be in your work), and acknowledges her mindsets before and after the Fall Formal debacle.
Hope this helped with your burnout!
Great story. Short, sweet, to the point. Just how Ah like 'em.
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Ha! I was wondering how many people had the scar headcanon!
Anyway, glad you enjoyed it so much! It was a lot of fun to get the chance to write Sunset interacting with the other girls in a supportive manner, since I usually only write her interacting with Twilight and Now You Need Us hasn't had a chance yet for all of them to have these kinds of moments as a group.
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Thank you very much! Glad you enjoyed the story.
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I don't see it very often, oddly enough! I can only recall one story right off the bat that even mentioned her having scars.
You write small intimate moments very well, and it's evident you enjoy writing them. :)
Ooh. Why am I not following you?
Very nice. Kinda overlaps with a headcanon of mine, in that Sunset's arms have a lot of scars (probs hidden by makeup) from her trying to work out how to make fire when she first became a human. Personally, I wish this story had a bit more imagery concerning the scars--but I understand the desire to avoid such gruesome things.
I enjoyed that quite a bit. It's nice seeing the Rainbooms interacting like this
Not bad, although it comes off as being less of a big deal than it could have been. Maybe this could be expanded.
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Glad you enjoyed! I did actually originally have a big more description of the scars, but the truth is... I had a hard time figuring out how to describe their appearance with the fact that humans in EG are multiple colors. Maybe for another idea, since I rather like this headcanon and would like to come back to it.
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Glad you enjoyed it so much.
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It may be one day. It's one of my headcanons, so I do plan to come back to it eventually.
Short and sweet is what you aimed for, and I'd say you hit the bullseye. Good job.
However, there is one minor thing I'd like to mention:
"Tae" is typically used when trying to convey a Gaelic accent (whether Irish, Scottish, or even Manx). While Southern accents do have their roots in Gaelic language, they are different enough that "tae" is considered unique to the Western and Northern parts of Great Britain, and if you consider it worth changing, "ta" would be a more natural choice. Again, this really is a minor thing, I just thought I'd provide it in case you think it's significant enough to consider.
Well, that wasn't an accurate depiction of how that would go at all.
The correct answer would have been "mega drama."
At first I wanted to say that Harmony would have healed her, but then I thought again. It cleansed her, but getting rid of corruption caused by a misused Element of Harmony must be difficult as all get-out, especially when there weren't any physical Elements, just the Bearers.
short and sweet...i really enjoyed the heart warming moments they all had with Sunset Shimmer.
ayy
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I didn't before, but I do now!
6192361 It does make a kind of sense, doesn't it?
6192329 Saw that coming.
Why throw out a perfectly good shirt just because of a blood stain?
6192679 You ever tried wearing a blood stained shirt out in public?
Yas, good. THis is good.
not bad. short sweet and to the point. a very nice one shot. keep up the good work /)
HEADCANON ACCEPTED
I love scars. Not like fetish-love, I'm not weird (well, I am, but not in that way) but I just somehow find that scars add depth. And I don't mean just random scars meant to make someone look cool, I mean the ones that hurt. That sting. That have a story and a meaning and a purpose.
In a weird way, I think the best kind of scar is the one that weighs on you.
So yeah, good story.
6192761 All the time.
6192329 That was the first thing I thought of too!
Very interesting idea, with the problem-transformation leaving injuries like that. Have a like!
Not the most impactful of fics one could read...
Still, the bit of headcanon you've got for this is very good. I liked it.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I really like the idea of these scars which came from Sunset transformation. I wish I will know one day if Sunset get rid of her scars. Good story! Keep going like this.
,Peace from Midnight.
6192361 ditto
A well-done scene. Excellent character work, emotion, and magical mechanics. Thank you for this.
Did not go in the direction I thought it was. With the description I thought it would be about Sunset being a cutter or something.
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I thought so too at first. But the tags put me at ease, and I was pleased to see it was not about cutting.
Wow. I've seen people say they'd hear things in a character's voice while reading, but I didn't really 'get' that. I put things to characters' voices all the time, so what's the big deal, I'd think to myself. Now I get it, though. Because that wasn't putting the voice to it, that was the voice just being there, super vivid, without the slightest bit of effort on my end. And it was awesome and I see why people make such a big deal about that now. Congrats on being the first author ever to make me actually hear a character's voice, and let it be a testament to your skill 'til the final bell rings at the end of time.
Nice one shot. I never thought about Sunset's transformation like that before. It was a good idea.
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It wouldn't make sense. It said before the Fall Formal, which is when the whole "I'm going to turn into a demon by stealing the element of magic and shiz" happened. So, since it seems Sunset's life took a turn for the better after that, it would seem off. However, seeing as how the coverart show Sunset during her transformation, it is clear that the basis of this story revolves around what exactly happened during the transformation. You just need to pay attention.
Not bad. I really enjoyed this story! Sunset having these scars and also divulging her guilt even more really gives depth and growth to her character. If there's one thing done right, it's Sunset in Equestria Girls.
Hi Radiant,
As a rather huge Sunset Shimmer fan, I just wanted to say I quite liked this story. Dark, corrupted magic having consequences is always a great idea.
I wanted to touch on something from your author's note though, you said that this feels like a rather dark place to take MLP, and a bit outside cannon. In regards to that I'd like to point you to the first of the "Daring Do" Trilogy of books that Hasbro has officially released. The first chapter, of the first book, introduces our villian, who's motivation is based on the fact that his cutie mark was literally mutilated from his body by an attack by the main villian. It went to quite a dark place considering, but that is official fiction from Hasbro.
So don't be too hard on yourself over this.
"Scars can come in handy. I have one myself above my left knee that is a perfect map of the London Underground."
-Albus Dumbledore.
I'm glad that Sunset didn't turn to cutting. I figured that corrupted magic can do wonders to the body.
I never thought about the physical consequences to the transformation until now actually. I'm replaying the corruption in my head and I can see where you were thinking. Very nice piece of work here. Keep it up
This was a great story. You know, at first I was a bit nervous about reading this. But when I got through the first couple paragraphs, I was into it. Honestly, I never thought about the magic leaving scars, but that's actually a pretty good theory. MLP would never put that into the movies because MLP is kind of for kids (I'm not saying just kids) and I think getting into magical scars would be kind of gore-ish. I like what you did with that theory and made a piece out of. I also like what you did with this fic. Amazing. You've earned a like and a fave from me.
Welp. I love this idea and story. Very nice.
Wow, this was really, really good. You really captured Sunset Shimmer's character here, and the part where she was talking about how she thought she deserved it? Whewwww, that sent shivers right up and down my spine!!
Wait. What about Snips and Snails? They grew wings too, and I'm guessing she wasn't gentle about it.
But ya it does look like it was painful, she was even crying. And then having them ripped out wouldn't be pleasant so it makes sense that she would have scars.
As for it being in the show, it's not going to happen, but it wouldn't be too much to have a couple marks on her back as a reminder that actions have consequences.
I was kinda expecting that the high school students beat her or something. Cool story, anyway.
I like it! This could be a longer story; I know I want more!
Damn, I can't believe I never thought of that. I wish I could add in to my own stories. Excellent idea and story! Not much to say other than that.
You know now that I think about it, it kinda does make sense for there to at least there to be a mark. Nice little story, I really enjoy these small slice of life fics from the other side of the mirror.
I wonder what would happen to the scars after her second transformation during her song.
(Very dbz moment, that was.)
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I was thinking the same thing when I watched that video. Have you seen the new My Little Pony episode? Big Mac's transformation reminded me of the old Sailor Moon transformations.
Wow, that was pretty heavy