An outsider in equestria

by SantaSam

Another player joins the game

Whilst Corvo was searching ponyville for clues to his targets whereabouts a dark mist was falling towards Manehattan, the ponies in alleys and on roof tops stared at the mist in a mix of fear and awe, that was intill it smashed into an old abandoned building were awe disappeared.

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A man lay on the floor of an old and crumbling building, this man was clad in a reddish brown leather coat and had large leather gloves on his hands, his hair was put back and his face looked to be aging. As this man was sleeping the world started to slow down and a dark mist appeared in the air then another man with black eyes came out of the smoke and floated above the man by now time had completely stopped. "Wake up, Daud." The Outsider said.

"Gurrgh" the man in the floor groaned looking up "what do you want?"

The Outsider smirked "I have a job for you, Daud," the Outsider began,"what do you say to killing three gods for me."

"Do I even have a choice in the matter?" Asked the ex-assassin.

"Not at all," the Outsider replied,"and by the way your in a land full of multicoloured ponies, and Corvo's here." He said just before disappearing into the same black mist that brought him here.

"What? What does he mean 'ponies'? And what does he mean Corvos here?" As Daud said this the door down stairs broke and he thought he heard a voice say.

"Okay, guardsmen it landed in here, search the building, check everything. We don't know what this thing is, so be prepared. Understood?" Said what Daud guessed was a commanding officer of so kind.

"Sir, yes, sir!" Multiple voices shouted, some of which sounded feminine.

'Well, looks like a good time to leave' Daud thought to himself as he blinked onto a neerby book case.

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Golden blade had been having a good day for the most part, he'd been able to go out with his family for lunch and was able to go see his friends in the trading district of the city. And then a giant black meteorite thing had to fall out the sky and crash into the old silver tooth mansion.

The building had been here since the city was nothing more then a small town, which was about three hundred years ago and had been left vacant for about sixty to eighty years and no one in the city wanted to go in let alone renovate it, the reason for this was that is was supposedly haunted by the last generation of the silver tooth family, who had all died at the dinner table from being poisoned by a maid. A motive for the crime was never found so it was just seen as a brutal case of mass murder, twenty seven lives silenced in an instant.

But right now ghosts were the least of his problems as he walked through the halls with the bane of his existence, Saber Fire. By no means was the kid a pony who he hated, he was just so annoying.

"So, Golden how's your day been?" Asked Saber.

"Good," was Golden Swords reply.

"OK cool, so err... how're the kids? Doing alright in school?"

"They're doing fine." Was the flat reply.

That's when Saber stopped trying to make small talk and decided to shut the hell up, well it seemed like he decided to any way what really happened was that Saber was currently being strangled by a bipedal assassin.

After hearing a thud from behind him Golden turned to see Saber lying on the floor next to a tall bipedal creature which was covered completely in clothes apart from its face which had a large scar running down the side of its face, as he was taking all this in it raised its arm and a green dart shot out and his whole world went black.

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Daud stood over the two unconscious horses in front of him, they looked like military horses the the only diffence being the one he'd choked out had wings.

"What the fuck has the Outsider gotten me into?" Daud questioned himself.

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Luna was in a very strange place right now. The reason why she found it strange was because of how empty it was, aside from some ckuncks of canterlot dotted around its abyss, which seemed to go on forever.

She was scared to say the least.

"Where are we?!" Luna questioned the void around her, not expecting a response.

So imagine her shock when she got one. "Well 'princess', your in my domain, the void." A distinctly masculine voice said, as the darkness around here condensed into a body. When the darkness finally finished making the body a tall bipedal creature floated above her, its black eyes piercing into her very being and a small but noticeable smirk on its face," and you have no power here."

"What art thou?!" She asked, going into old Equestrian.

"Well, fair maiden, I am but a humble creature, who only seeks to watch the lives of others who I deem entertaining," He said, bathing his words in sarcasm," but seriously, you interest me quite a bit."

"What do you mean, whoever you are?" Luna questioned the eternity old being.

This seemed to only make the creatures smirk a little bigger," well you see, luna I know about your little secret shall we say, and said secret has made you a very interesting pony, or should I say Nightmare. And my true name would kill you if you heard it, so just call me Outsider, everyone does."

Luna's eyes widened a little as her little "secret" was revealed" how do you know about that, Outsider."

"Well I watch everything so I know everyone's secrets." He said.

"So what do you want to do with this new information?" She asked the strange being.

"Well, all I want is to offer you a deal." The Outsider said with a smirk, "a deal that will make you the most powerful creature in the whole of Equs and have both your sister and Discord dead on the floor."

Now this got Nightmares attention, she would finally get to be the queen she deserved to be and her idiotic sister and that idiot Discord would be dead, but there's always a catch, "what do you want in return?"

"All I want is for the lunar guard to give two human assassin's free passage, and for then to be the ones to kill your sister and Discord. So what do you say?"

All she had to do is give two assassins free passage to her sister and Discord so they could kill them, and in return she would get to be the only ruler of her nation and no one would be able to stop her, it was too good to be true. But it was true, "how could I say no." She said with a slight smile.

"Then it is settled, have a good sleep, Nightmare." And with that everything faded to black.

Author's Note:

Sorry this took so long I honestly have no excuse for this exept laziness, and that's all.

Comments

[Dylanfang27]

I like it

[lordofmyth]

For starters, this story was already done before. And done VERY badly.

Secondly, Celestia once survived a castle piercing blast to the chest and got back up. To say a human, even with powers, killing her, let alone discord or anyone else, is implausible, is an utter understatement.

And thirdly, and the breaker here, Luna falling for that is about as contrived bullshit as you can go for in these stories.

So we have an completely implausible plot, completely out of character behavior, and a plot so utterly contrived that it hurts. Corvo is dangerous to humans cause humans lack powers. Everything is equestria has powers.

Basiocally what you are trying to make us believe corvo could do is basically kill the equivalent of the outsider five times over........ Shakes head.

[Phsyco Cell]

6705632

I have a few problems with your comment that I'd like to point out.

First off, you took an extremely biased point of view and assumed multiple things, rather then looking at the facts.

First off, we next to nothing about The Outsider. You assumed that Celestia is undoubtedly stronger then the outsider. We know that the Outsider likes to mettle in the affairs of mortals because he sees it as one big show. We also know he is very old and can grant mortals magical powers. Those fee facts are not enough to automatically say that Princess Celestial is far stronger. I'm not saying the Outsider is stronger, nor am I saying Celestial is. We just need more facts before we go around saying either one.

You also seem to be forgetting about Corvo's intelligence and skill. Nothing is invincible, and with a clever plan, even a weaker can defeat a superior one.

My final point, and your most biased point, when does another stories quality ever have anything to do with this one?

[lordofmyth]

6720340 Considering you did not actually read what i wrote, as i can clearly tell, you reply in invalid. But i shall explain.
For starters, i never said she was more powerful than the outsider. Albeit the outsider itself has shown no actaul powers outside of his own world, and giving the power of that world to mortals. you just pretended i did to try to invalidate my point.

More so, you forget that luna and celsetia are ALSO intelligent. And celestia has over a milennia of life experience, and has likely fought off and defeated numerous threats through her long life.
And more so, even if somehow a mortal of only a few decades is smarter than Celestia, the difference of power is indescribable. Corvo's powers are all about subtlety, as is most of these powers to begin with. Even at his strongest his powers are but parlor tricks to even weak unicorns.
And even if he can somehow avoid Celestia's magic, it would take only a single blow to either cripple or kill corvo. Cause she is also an earth pony.
And the worst part of it all is that she knows about time magic and it is more plausible to state that she would be able to detect and instantly dispel even that time stopping spell of his. Cause it is a spell that even mildly powerful ponies can use.

So i am using what ponies are capable of in comparison to corvo, and it seems he is weaker than even a normal unicorn in the majority of respects. He can't even levitate objects at will nor project energy.

Also you are brushing over the bullshit idea that luna would jsut GO evil again like that. That is just stupid.

[Phsyco Cell]

6720455

I really think you have little idea what you are talking about when it comes to The Outsider. I've played the Brigmore witches DLC. The Outsider is shown to have the ability to stop time in a large section of Dunwall, meaning that he obviously can effect the mortal world.

He also has complete control of the void's energy. We literally have no idea how powerful the Outsider truly is. Not to mention that fact that the Outsider has over 4000 years of experience that he could be lending Corvo, versus Celestia's 1000. Despite that, we still know little about the Outsider. He might actually be quite weak in comparison to the Royal Sisters.

Once again, you seem to be assuming things. I never said either if the princesses weren't intelligent. If done cleverly enough, Corvo could still defeat them. I'm going to have to pull an outside reference for this. If you've ever read the Inheritance Cycle, then you'll know who King Galbatorix is. He could literally control magic itself, bending any and every spell to his will with a single word, and yet, despite Galbatorix's near omnipotence, Eragon defeated him.

It just goes to show that nothing is truly invincible. Obviously, Celestial won't be defeated by shear force. But in a clever and thoughtful way.

Also, I didn't gloss over those last points. My comment was what I thought was wrong with your comment. If I hadn't agreed I would have pointed it out.

And I will quote directly from your post to prove that I did read it, "Basiocally what you are trying to make us believe corvo could do is basically kill the equivalent of the outsider five times over"

Is that not saying that Princess Celestial is five times stronger than the Outsider?

So no, I am not pulling non-existant sentences out of your posts just to try and get my point across (Even when you seem to be doing this). And yes, I have read both your posts through multiple times.

[SantaSam]

Luna wasn't tricked in any way she was already Nightmare moon from the start, so there goes your third point.

And then your point about Discord, and this is spoilers here, is that the Outsider himself will help with this.

And in my story the Outsider took all three of them working until unconscious to even attempt to imprison him, and they failed. So you tell me if in my story Celestia is more powerful then the Outsider.

Also I've never seen a unicorn be able to summon a massive swarm of rats out of nothing nor have I seen one be able to stop time, go backwards and forwards in time yes, but stop no. And Celestia wouldn't be able to dispel STOP time because she would be frozen in time slow time properly because she can still move and another thing no pony has ever been able turn into mist, we have never seen and proof of this, as well as the new ability Erosion that breaks down ANYthing, so yes Celestia can survive a fall through stone but can she survive having her stomach among other organs on the floor, doesn't matter about magical shielding either they melt too, and this starts with a touch when the power is being used and if upgraded it doesn't stop. He also has Dauds blink which stops time.

side note: Corvo will only be using stop time to escape NOT harm

[Whodafuq146]

Is this dead?