My name is Nox. I am an immortal necromancer, once slave of King Sombra, now free. I was once human, a species unheard of here in the land of Equestria. I am the only one here that I know of, brought here after buying a costume from a Merchant. This
So far i see no problems. Letting him be the hand of death on the mortal plain is good and you can write long stories on this alone. And combined with the conflict between Nox and Celly and Noxs influence on the story can hold your fic for a good time. After that you could maybe make something like a sequel or you could introduce a new factor like an enemy here and there some displaced... you get my line of thought.
I did like it, it's just kinda silly that "all the power of death" and she just wants to sit back and be left alone, yet no one bothers to talk to her. She saved her guards from the train but Celestia immediately jumps the gun and shouts "evil". Maybe some context would help. We see Nox's pov, but maybe some insight why Celestia is all shoot first question never.
6214130 You, my fine reader, have given me deviously wonderfully evil ideas for the future. Oh the ideas you have given me, I'm looking forward to putting them in writing. So thank you, what is to come is entirely on your shoulders :3
Comment posted by ponyheart07 deleted Jul 17th, 2015
Comment posted by ponyheart07 deleted Jul 17th, 2015
“Interceptor Awaken.” I wait for the wraith hound to form. “Go and find the guard. Lead them here.” The hound takes off. “Baxter, Dex Star, Garfield Sleep.”
6214130 OK, I can see reason in that but how would you fell if a giant shadow like creature walked into your city with a creature reaking of dark magic?! also no one would talk to her probably because of her magic and tell me would you really approach a necromancer and talk to it without feeling any negative emotion's?
I know it's a little late to do this but hey no time like the present!
So far i see no problems. Letting him be the hand of death on the mortal plain is good and you can write long stories on this alone. And combined with the conflict between Nox and Celly and Noxs influence on the story can hold your fic for a good time.
After that you could maybe make something like a sequel or you could introduce a new factor like an enemy here and there some displaced... you get my line of thought.
And again, so far no complains.
cant wait for more
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Thank you! And I hope displaced show up eventually, I just haven't talked to anyone about crossovers yet. I may need to get on that.
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I did like it, it's just kinda silly that "all the power of death" and she just wants to sit back and be left alone, yet no one bothers to talk to her. She saved her guards from the train but Celestia immediately jumps the gun and shouts "evil". Maybe some context would help. We see Nox's pov, but maybe some insight why Celestia is all shoot first question never.
I think it is a awesome story so far. Keep the good work up.
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You, my fine reader, have given me deviously wonderfully evil ideas for the future. Oh the ideas you have given me, I'm looking forward to putting them in writing. So thank you, what is to come is entirely on your shoulders :3
WOOOO!!!!!!! GO DEATH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
6214130 WHAT DID YOU DO!
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Uhh.. Your welcome
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Woohoo go death!!
hah Garfield
And at this moment, the false prophet knew, she fucked up.
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OK, I can see reason in that but how would you fell if a giant shadow like creature walked into your city with a creature reaking of dark magic?! also no one would talk to her probably because of her magic and tell me would you really approach a necromancer and talk to it without feeling any negative emotion's?
I know it's a little late to do this but hey no time like the present!
i see what you did there