I can't believe no comments and no views yet! This is great! And not just the sex of it, the interactions and all. I would read the fuck out of more of this, maybe even more because of the non sex part. Twi meeting shy and all that interaction, great stuff.
I'm not usually a fan of humanized ponies (Celestia, did I just type that?) but dammit Sleepless you always get me with your portrayal of the characters and your wonderful style, however, fading to black just as they start to have their wonderful intimate moment... for shame Sleepless
A lot of weird likely-parser based typos around here: "a polite little twirl around Twilight's lips." That weird numeric string pops up a few more times after that, but that's the first one I caught.
You never fail to impress, you know that, right? This was really, really enjoyable. Cute, sexy, with tons of dynamic characterisations. I really hope to see more of this in the future.
I'm really liking this. I'm a huge fan of your writing, though I've never gotten a chance to comment before. The way you describe things and let us into Twilight's head is just really... comfortable? That's the only way I can think to describe it. Reading your work is like settling into a warm blanket with a cup of tea. Looking forward to seeing where this is going. Very hot, kind of sweet, and I'm liking your take on the ponies as people genre. Ignore the haters, this is a lot of fun.
Female humans? That’s my fetish! And if– an apologize in advance to all lesbians, college students and other woman who may feel insulted by the following comment -said females are hot lesbian college chicks any author must try very hard to make me hate such a story.
So the sex scenes are juicy, what’s about the story? The plot is not very deep or complex but it fleshes out the characters and turns the story into more than just a collection of sex scenes. In my eyes it’s always a good thing if a Clop-Fic has more to offer than just sex. Really amazing that one single picture could lead to such a story.
Another good thing is the chemistry between Dash and Twilight. It feels believable and it’s close to the original characters (if they were hot lesbian college chicks, of course). And the thought of Dash yelling like a little girl after Twi slaps her with a towel is just hilarious. As soon as I had read that part I knew that I would like this story. Humor and Sex is an awesome combination.
If I had to pick something I didn’t like then it would be the fact that the beginning felt a bit rushed with Twi and Dash making out five minutes after the story started, despite the fact that they didn’t even seemed to know each other that well.
This story would’ve been a very good one-shot or two-parter but the author stated in his blog that there’s probably more to come. One the one hand I’m excited that there will be more stuff and more sexy adventures on the other hand it could get quiet boring if it’s only about Twi and Dash having sex. Even that stuff gets boring if nothing else happens.
However, I see lots of potential for good stories. Dash is probably kind of a player and Twi is neither the first nor the last girl that shared a bed with her. Twi’s reaction if she sees Dash with another girl could be quite interesting. While she get jealous or is it cool for her and the two end up as good friends (with or without benefits)? Also I wanted to know if Twi’s assumption about Dash being a swimmer is true or not. Normally humanized Dash is bike racer, a runner or a pilot so this would be something new.
Hopefully the author soon has an inspiration for the next chapter?( Curtains? Carpets? Bear Fur?)
I, for one enjoy the thought of humanized ponies. I also enjoy school fics. So humanized pony school fic with smut scenes to boot? I am quite enjoying this my friend.
Once again I find myself more interested in the characters of your story than the sex. The sex was fun, though. Intense and sensual.
Oh, and it seems mandatory to say I normaly care for stories about humanized ponies. So, I normaly don't care for stories about humanized ponies (well, except for fanart). But who cares? It was a new story by you and of course I enjoyed it. I like what you did with the characters. Spike being an Iguana had me laughing out load.
if you must know how I feel about this fic, well picture this. fifty billion rainbows and the sun is setting and the moon is setting also, and your there in a gazebo and then god decends from heaven and he gives you a million dollars. take that feeling, and put it into a fanfic.
this is, without a doubt, the -*BEST*- mlp fan fics I've read in a very long time. i love how well you understand the characters. keep this up man, good job.
It feels so good to read your fic, the dynamic, the characteristic of the people (not ponies xD), the chemistry and and and. i also love the hints you give, like Twi being impressed by the dorm RD/FS lives in and imagine her own, which implies she´s rather poor, smart but poor. Or how Twi acts to Shy, wishing others would be towards her like this which implies Twi is pretty lonley and probably hated/bullied for being smart/a nerd. Or that RD is a swimmer cause ya know. ^^
I hope that besides the sex, we´ll get some story, a bit slice-of-life of their school and dorm life, like part-time jobs, tests, sport festivals, friends and rivals and such. With sex ofc. Never forget the sex.
And i love the way you described Twi, RD and Shy though Twi and RD were more detailed so far cause ya know. It´s how i always imagined them to be as humans, really well done.
I can't believe no comments and no views yet! This is great! And not just the sex of it, the interactions and all.
I would read the fuck out of more of this, maybe even more because of the non sex part. Twi meeting shy and all that interaction, great stuff.
I love you for finally posting this up here, bro. Fantastic writing, can't wait for more.
I'm not usually a fan of humanized ponies (Celestia, did I just type that?) but dammit Sleepless you always get me with your portrayal of the characters and your wonderful style, however, fading to black just as they start to have their wonderful intimate moment... for shame Sleepless
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jojojojojojojojo this is gonna be good lemme read and the i'll do a serious comment
I-I-I-I-I-I-I-I........All I can say is.....
DAAAAAAAAAYUUUUUUUUUUUMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMN!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_dayum.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Soarin_dayum.png I really like this, for the sex AND for the non-sex.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia.png It's really good, all in all. Continue, my good sir.
A lot of weird likely-parser based typos around here:
"a polite little twirl around Twilight's lips."
That weird numeric string pops up a few more times after that, but that's the first one I caught.
EXTREMELY solid, can't wait to see more. :3
Wait wait wait.
Incomplete?
Love what you did here, Sleepless! Cute, sexy and dynamic. Solid as usual.
Fuck. Yes.
Glorious, as usual. Can't wait for more.
Nice, I'm liking this.
Well...I can see you're too busy being awesome to answer my calls so...yeah
omg this look's that its going to be so good, u make my night once again
You never fail to impress, you know that, right? This was really, really enjoyable. Cute, sexy, with tons of dynamic characterisations. I really hope to see more of this in the future.
Keep up the great work!
Wow, when I first saw this I thought it was just a clop, but dear Celestia, this is fantastic!! this puts anything I can do to utter shame!!
but I have ot ask, Twilight's lips, what is with that? why not use the real words?
cant wait for more keep up the fantastic work!!
this looks a lot like not the twilestia ending for RR
don't hold out on me man c'mon I neeeeeeeeed it
still going to read it obviously.
Oh this is gonna be fun!
Read this. Faved it. NO REGRETS.
THREESOME, THREESOME, THREESOME, THREESOME, THREESOME, THREESOME
do it filly
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Alright, fixed those weird "Twilight's" errors. Looks like the BB code parser replaced a few apostrophes in weird ways.
Image is up now, as well. I'm gonna blather about this story on my fimfiction blog in a minute, if anyone is interested.
Thanks, everyone!
Hmmmm. Yes!
Continue, please.
I'm really liking this. I'm a huge fan of your writing, though I've never gotten a chance to comment before. The way you describe things and let us into Twilight's head is just really... comfortable? That's the only way I can think to describe it. Reading your work is like settling into a warm blanket with a cup of tea. Looking forward to seeing where this is going. Very hot, kind of sweet, and I'm liking your take on the ponies as people genre. Ignore the haters, this is a lot of fun.
Talk about your inappropriate situations!! No, really, Talk about them. Please? More chapters soon!!!
Female humans? That’s my fetish! And if– an apologize in advance to all lesbians, college students and other woman who may feel insulted by the following comment -said females are hot lesbian college chicks any author must try very hard to make me hate such a story.
So the sex scenes are juicy, what’s about the story? The plot is not very deep or complex but it fleshes out the characters and turns the story into more than just a collection of sex scenes. In my eyes it’s always a good thing if a Clop-Fic has more to offer than just sex. Really amazing that one single picture could lead to such a story.
Another good thing is the chemistry between Dash and Twilight. It feels believable and it’s close to the original characters (if they were hot lesbian college chicks, of course). And the thought of Dash yelling like a little girl after Twi slaps her with a towel is just hilarious. As soon as I had read that part I knew that I would like this story. Humor and Sex is an awesome combination.
If I had to pick something I didn’t like then it would be the fact that the beginning felt a bit rushed with Twi and Dash making out five minutes after the story started, despite the fact that they didn’t even seemed to know each other that well.
This story would’ve been a very good one-shot or two-parter but the author stated in his blog that there’s probably more to come. One the one hand I’m excited that there will be more stuff and more sexy adventures on the other hand it could get quiet boring if it’s only about Twi and Dash having sex. Even that stuff gets boring if nothing else happens.
However, I see lots of potential for good stories. Dash is probably kind of a player and Twi is neither the first nor the last girl that shared a bed with her. Twi’s reaction if she sees Dash with another girl could be quite interesting. While she get jealous or is it cool for her and the two end up as good friends (with or without benefits)? Also I wanted to know if Twi’s assumption about Dash being a swimmer is true or not. Normally humanized Dash is bike racer, a runner or a pilot so this would be something new.
Hopefully the author soon has an inspiration for the next chapter?( Curtains? Carpets? Bear Fur?)
I, for one enjoy the thought of humanized ponies. I also enjoy school fics. So humanized pony school fic with smut scenes to boot? I am quite enjoying this my friend.
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DITTO! I want to see how that 1 works. Maybe Fluttershy is crazy in bed and puts Dash to shame? I do hope so.
Brilliant and stunningly well-written! I love it and I cant wait for the next chapter!
Very interested to see where this goes from here.
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Exactly how I felt, until I read it...
But seriously, twilestia time go
YOu should continue this story, it'd be interesting to see the rest of the main six in college life
Aw lot of sex and even it's just the 2nd chapter. I wonder if Twilight Sparkle or Rainbow Dash is the nosier whwen the are in pleasure
I'm generally not a huge fan of present tense, but I really enjoyed this. I can't wait to read more.
Twilight's first girlfriend!
Once again I find myself more interested in the characters of your story than the sex. The sex was fun, though. Intense and sensual.
Oh, and it seems mandatory to say I normaly care for stories about humanized ponies. So, I normaly don't care for stories about humanized ponies (well, except for fanart). But who cares? It was a new story by you and of course I enjoyed it. I like what you did with the characters. Spike being an Iguana had me laughing out load.
Good job, I hope we'll see more of this.
NTL
You have posted the first humanized story that I ever fav'ed. Great stuff!
You good fellow have earned yourself another favorite
if you must know how I feel about this fic, well picture this.
fifty billion rainbows and the sun is setting and the moon is setting also, and your there in a gazebo
and then god decends from heaven and he gives you a million dollars. take that feeling, and put it into a fanfic.
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I know that feel bro.
Ah, man! That Fluttershy tag totally had me holding my breath for a threesome in this chapter!
So much disappoint
Looking forward to any possible continuation though
I wonder what Fluttershy's part is in all of this.
634553 Tobuscus much?
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good eye my frined
this is, without a doubt, the -*BEST*- mlp fan fics I've read in a very long time. i love how well you understand the characters. keep this up man, good job.
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You may or may not get a laugh out of this:
I was so curious as to where you got an image of that so small, that I actually opened the source code of this page and sifted through to find the url you personally used for that picture.
I found it.
its http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
the context is <div class="comment_data">
<img src="http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png" alt="" style="border:0px; max-width:100%;" /> </div>
On another note: This was great, and I can't wait for more. Truely interesting, there are so many places you can go right now!
Also: the sourcelink for the image is busted. it changes the last cluster in the URL, but takes you nowhere.
647567 Check the "blog" thing on my user page dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png
Love it!! Can't wait for more!
Amazing! I don't usually go for humanized stuff, but this has got me hooked.
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And, I just discovered I somehow downloaded some porn. How...? Ah well, fitting, I guess.
How can you be so good at writing?
It feels so good to read your fic, the dynamic, the characteristic of the people (not ponies xD), the chemistry and and and. i also love the hints you give, like Twi being impressed by the dorm RD/FS lives in and imagine her own, which implies she´s rather poor, smart but poor. Or how Twi acts to Shy, wishing others would be towards her like this which implies Twi is pretty lonley and probably hated/bullied for being smart/a nerd. Or that RD is a swimmer cause ya know. ^^
I hope that besides the sex, we´ll get some story, a bit slice-of-life of their school and dorm life, like part-time jobs, tests, sport festivals, friends and rivals and such. With sex ofc. Never forget the sex.
And i love the way you described Twi, RD and Shy though Twi and RD were more detailed so far cause ya know.
It´s how i always imagined them to be as humans, really well done.