The moon is so beautiful, luring me from my daughter.
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metaphorception! I love it!
oh gawd! i did it!!!
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Thanks
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621484 dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_gaze.png
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Please don't spam the comments with Emoticons.
621491 a.deviantart.net/avatars/o/k/okayfaceplz.png <-- does this count as an emoticon? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_O_O.png
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Just serious comments only please
621499 In that case, I have nothing more to say here dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Pinkie_loool.png
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Thank you
I'm surprised this got pasted by the mods, must have been Knighty.
Anywho great story, looking forward for more.
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It was Knighty actually
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Knew it, hes the most lenient about the rules for the most part.
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Unless people are being really stupid
why cant i cry for this....
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Didn't you say you were all cried out?
621736 yes but i want to cry... sad
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Thanks
'but then I think. My daughter is in hospital.'
Nope. 'But then I think; my daughter is in hospital!'
Yep.
Seriously, this needs to be proof-read or something. It's a good idea, but the writing is below par.
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That's not a grammatical error at all. Semicolons and periods are practically interchangeable. Thanks for being a troll I guess.
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It's a very very bad punctual error.
Gahhh!!!!! Why do I have to read so fast?!?!?!!?!?!
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Do you even know what punctual means? It means on time. That has nothing to do with anything. If you are going to say something, please know what you are saying first.
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I have no idea.
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I know what I'm saying. Can't take a bit of criticism I guess. Punctual as in punctuation error. If you're going to type like you're the queen, at least actually write a good enough fic. Anyway, like I said, it's a good idea, I'll give you that, and some parts ARE well written. You obviously just need to refine your technique a little, just as I have to myself.
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I can take criticism, but when the person giving it to me is so obviously wrong....
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So obviously wrong eh? I've showed this fic to other people and they agree with me. Also ellipses are three dots. Not four.
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I don't even........
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Like I said. Nice story.
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Alright, whatever. If you want to believe that it is a grammatical error, that's fine. I'm not going to spend too much time convincing you otherwise.
Usually your stories are fun to read but i have no fucking idea what the hell i just read
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lol.... Gnome is so confused XD
622607 SO his girl has diabetes or something then he jumped out of a window
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No... He got pushed out a window. And you don't know what his daughter has.
I get the feeling that this story comes from The heart, you've went through some shit haven't you?
You don't have to talk about it, but I wouldn't mind listening
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I'm not a father, but yes, a lot of people have been showing suicidal tendencies.