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All grown up now, Applebloom can finally start working in her families business. One rainy day, she has to deliver an order to Diamond Tiara, who is also older.
Once she comes inside, she begins to feel things she never felt before when they were kids...and so does her old enemy.
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OMG I LOVE IT...IT WAS AMAZING APPLETIARA FTW ME WANT MORE APPLETIARA
it really was a good story it would be 20% cooler if sweetie belle was getting married too Scoots but that's just me lol
I love Scootabelle so much
6042272
Yay Thanks!
I'm deciding whether I should make a sequel or not. Also Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle would be so cute as a couple 
My nigga
Short sweet fluff, perfect for a good one shortie to end a night. Gotta say there were a couple of mistakes, and you used the word hand when it should have been hoof but other than that, it was pretty good. Paced a little too quick for me, but ultimately it moved at what it needed to, which is welcome. You're not one for flashy symantics, from what I've gathered, so the story pretty much told itself
6043316
Yeah figured it was fast paced, and i'll edit that hand thing. Thanks!
6043330
Noice.
6043266
it would be awesome you should totally put Sweets with scoots it would be awesome especially if they went on a double date 
please make a sequel
6043574
Awww, yeah, that would be cute. How a sequel In the future?
6044266
yeah i know you don't ship Diamond tiara x apple bloom but this is one of the best stories ever
could you imagine how the double would be like lol
6044648
Okay, and thanks! I'll think about it :3
Welcome to Fimfiction!
For something you sped through while writing, the story was really quite enjoyable. Even if you're not a fan of the ship, I'm happy to see you having run out of things to write about.
That said the above quote could use a bit of splitting up.
I loved Apple Bloom's confused and almost tearful response to her past tormentor. A look of "This isn't right! She brought me so much pain! Why is she being so nice?" was pretty strong. At least how I saw it.
You got a really nice cute one-shot here. Whatever your feelings on the story itself, you should be proud of it and give it due attention with the respect a story deserves if it's within your power to do so. It's FimFiction. Even people who don't like Diamond Tiara tend to like shipping these two, just so you know.
You have very basic typos and missing letters throughout. Much of them can be fixed by just taking a nice couple minutes to give your story a simple passover. Don't ever let anyone make you feel ashamed over liking or writing a certain ship. Thankfully for you, DiamondBloom is universal even among some of the not-quite-fans of Diamond Tiara.
If you ever need help finding an editor for this story, feel free to post for help on the forums at https://www.fimfiction.net/group/1280/the-diamond-cutters
For all other stories not related to, around, or with Diamond Tiara as a character, I'd recommend https://www.fimfiction.net/group/27/the-proofreader-group
P.S. Your story really was worth my time reading, as it was for those who bothered to go the extra mile by clicking those likes. 3-6 downvotes on a DT story per 15-25 likes is rather common around here even with perfect grammar. But never slack on trying to improve where you can, writing even fiction can help you in the real world, believe it or not.
Sorry for not noticing this little gem of a DT story earlier, I've been rather preoccupied to say the least. Again, Welcome to fimfiction!
Not sure what there's to hate on. Apple Bloom slash Diamond Tiara is hardly the strangest (or even that uncommon) paring out there.
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Just saying.
Story itself? Cute, but felt a bit rushed. That, and the romance itself had a few undercurrents of 'OMG, I don't want to die alo~one! Who's hot enough left for me to actually fall for?!'
So yeah, a bit more chemistry between the two would have been a good idea.
I do agree with many points 6054423 raised, though. How Apple Bloom kept waiting for the sucker-punch for quite a large stretch of the story (but was pleasantly surprised when it never came) was a really nice touch, and I do hope this gets a future continuation.
I honestly loved this fanfic. Although it had an absurd amount of typos. But those can be edited :)
This is a love story that needs more than one snip to tell. This should have ended with them starting a friendship. You can have the attraction there right from the start, as that will help smooth over the history they share, but they need to grow closer together before they can start making out.
All around great fic, the only thing that bothered me was the persistent switching between pony and anthro. It said things like mane and flank and then phrases like "hand on her hip". Also a couple words were missing the first letter but I really liked this, even though I don't really ship it. Adorable!
Aaw! So cute!
It was really good!!!
Keep up the good job!!!
I honestly thought it was pretty good. The only disappointing thing is the lack of a second chapter.