When Tortoises Help

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Rainbow Dash decides to stop winter. However... there's a slight surprise she experiences before putting her plan into motion.

Cover art by: Eruvon

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Awesomo3000

Awesomo3000 #1 · May 28th, 2015 · · ·

Rainbow Dash poked his noise.

*nose

Awesomo3000

Awesomo3000 #2 · May 28th, 2015 · 1 · ·

Tank the Tortoise, voiced by Morgan Freeman!

NixWorld

NixWorld #3 · May 28th, 2015 · · ·

6028924 Thanks! I fixed it.

The Hat Mann

The Hat Mann #4 · May 28th, 2015 · 1 · ·

Luna shook her head. “I sense a disturbance in the horse.”

Other than that, this amused me. Well done.

AJ Asui

AJ Asui #5 · May 28th, 2015 · · ·

I like it

nioniosbbbb

nioniosbbbb #6 · May 28th, 2015 · · ·

6028935 What happened in the end?

NixWorld

NixWorld #7 · May 28th, 2015 · · ·

6029561 Tank appeared in the scroll Celestia just received.

nioniosbbbb

nioniosbbbb #8 · May 28th, 2015 · · ·

6029575 Yea I know... I just don't understand why RD would send her there. Plus I thought he was male.

Iron Sky

Iron Sky #9 · May 28th, 2015 · · ·

“I sense a disturbance in the horse.”

You're going straight to pun hell for that one.

the_sane_maniac

the_sane_maniac #10 · May 28th, 2015 · · ·

Luna shook her head. “I sense a disturbance in the horse.”

SON OF A-

*sound of the_sane_maniac flipping shit*

Coffee Bear

Coffee Bear #11 · May 29th, 2015 · · ·

What the fk just happened?

NixWorld

NixWorld #12 · May 29th, 2015 · · ·

6029624 Totally worth it!

Ultimus Pendragon

Ultimus Pendragon #13 · Jun 7th, 2015 · · ·

This review is brought to on behalf of the group: Authors helping Authors

Name of story: NixWorld's: When Tortoises Help.

Grammar score out of 10: 10, found no mistakes.

pros:

Luna shook her head. “I sense a disturbance in the horse.”

I facepalmed and spent about 5 minutes just saying: ''...wow.''

Tank raised an eyebrow. That one action was more expression she had ever seen in this tortoise in a whole month.

That, I would believe to be a compliment.

“So, what do you think I should do?” Rainbow asked.
“Well… unicorns seem to wrap up winter fairly quickly.”
Rainbow set a hoof on her chin. “Yeah, you’re right. But how do you expect me to get a Unicorn to wrap up winter for me?”
Tank seemed surprised. “Oh? You’re not a Unicorn?”
“What?! No! How do you expect me to be a Unicorn? I’ve got wings!”
Tank put his front leg on his forehead. “Oooh... yeah sorry about that. You’re an Earth Pony then.”
“No! I am a Pegasus!”
Tank raised an eyebrow once again. “Oh… yeah, my bad. It’s just all of you ponies look the same.”

Might want to get that eyesight checked.

Cons:

Just one:

“Okay, I want a queen sized bed, five meals a day and some Twilight Sparkle Coloured Bubble Gum to go with them.”

...The gum. I'm weak.

Enjoy your review! Please look out for me by checking out my story:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/263561/everfree-incident

NixWorld

NixWorld #14 · Jun 7th, 2015 · · ·

6067075 Thanks for the review! I'll be sure to check out your story!

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