Scootaloo's Best Day Ever

by Obscure

Chapter 1

“Hiya Scoots!” called the most awesome pony in Ponyville.

“Hi Rainbow Dash,” the filly stood at eager attention having apparently spent no time traversing positions from when she had been laying down under the tree idly looking at the sky.

“Your wings look bigger now.”

Scootaloo looked back at her wings, they didn't look bigger at all. They had always been a little small for her age leaving her impatiently waiting for a growth spurt to correct them. It was a source of insecurity for her.

“Do you want me to teach you how to use them?”

“Really? I mean... do you think I can?” This was amazing, the best flier in Ponyville offering to teach her to fly!

“I think it's okay if we try.” Dash gave her a grin that made her little fan-filly knees quiver.

“Where do we start?”

“Just show me what you can do. See if you can get into a hover.”

“um,” Scootaloo knew this was where it would all fall apart. She didn't want to. She didn't want to be ashamed in front of her idol. Rainbow Dash wouldn't want to train a stunted little creature like her.

“Just try it,” Dash reached out nudged her wing.

The filly's wings popped open.

Grudgingly Scootaloo started her wings. There was a sputtering choking sound as they started and they fluttered intermittently threatening to stall. Once they where going at a good speed she put it into gear.

She came to a sudden stop, two hooves forward from her previous position with a terrible gear grinding sound.

“You have to keep the brake on. Now just slide it into first gear.”

The humming sound that Scootaloo's wings made took on a higher pitch.

“Angle the wing more like this to get your thrust focused down.”

To the filly's amazement the grass at her feet was starting to sway in the breeze.

“Good, good, now slowly ease off on the brake.”

Scootaloo's eyes went wide as her for-hooves left the ground.

“Just a little more gas.”

Scootaloo closed her eyes tight as she put more effort into her wing speed.

“Little more.”

A hind hoof left the ground. Just one more. One more leg and she'd be doing it.

“Just a little bit more! You can do it!”

The flight muscles across Scootaloo's chest were heating up. The hum of her wings was now a whine.

A hoof placed it's self under her's and carefully delicately picked her up. Like she weighed nothing.

“You're so close aren't you!” Rainbow Dash sounded proud.

The filly's eyes were closed and her face was dripping with sweat but she couldn't help grinning as she was held aloft by her beloved Rainbow.

Was this the most perfect moment of her life? Yes, yes it was.

And then her wings stalled. They didn't slowly slide to a stop. They just jammed mid stroke. And then Scootaloo fell. Just like she always did.

And then Rainbow Dash caught her. In her forelegs. Wrapped in blue as blue as the sky embraced to a muscular chest, safe, secure and in a wondrous place she had never imagined being.

“Easy kid, that was a great first lesson.”

She totally just said “first lesson.” As in of several.

Then Scootaloo was hugging Dash back. She didn't care if it was sappy. Or that her wings hurt or that she couldn't flying yet. Rainbow Dash, of all ponies, was going to take the time to teach her to fly. She cared about her. Her idol. Cared about her.

Today was the greatest day of her life.

A gentle hoof touched her face and lifted her up. Scootaloo was hesitant to stop nuzzling Dash's chest. She looked up into those glorious, bold eyes and she wondered what that expression they held was.

And then Dash kissed her.

Full on the lips. Aggressive.

It took a few seconds for Scootaloo to decide she was okay with this. She kissed back. Her wings stroked awkwardly at the air trying to push herself deeper into the kiss.

It was sweet and beautiful and something was out of place.

And then it was over.

Panting for breath the filly staggered to her feet. Did that just really happen? It was incredible. It was unbelievable.

A tail teasingly brushed her face.

“Come along Scoots. We should continue this in private.” That smug grin flashed.

Continue? What did that mean? She said it like it was obvious. She said it like everyone knew that there was stuff you did after a kiss.

There was stuff you did after a kiss? And she was going to get to do that, whatever that was, with Rainbow freaking Dash!?

Scootaloo trotted in place in joy her little fan-filly heart threatening to burst with excitement.

“Kiddo, you coming or what?” Dash sounded a little impatient.

And Scootaloo was at her side. There were speed lines.

“This is so awesome!” Scootaloo squealed.

“I am, aren't I?”

Dash led her a short ways to a rarely visited section of Sweet Apple Acres. The blue mare kept catching her in the face with her tail and making them both laugh.

Scootaloo found her self on her back, looking up at Dash. What did come after a kiss exactly? Another kiss apparently.

Slower this time, more careful. A tongue brushed past her lips and she welcomed it. Tongues moving together with slowly increasing vigor.

And the lips parted, the kiss stopped.

Scootaloo looked up at a breathless Rainbow Dash and knew that there was more, a lot more in store for her.

And then there was a rainbow coloured blur and the sound a sledgehammer makes when it impacts with wood.

Rainbow Dash was hurt! She was sprawled out against broken tree. Surrounded by fresh wood debris.

“What the hay do you think you're doing?!” Bellowed the mare looming over the prone Rainbow Dash.

Scootaloo got to her hooves, intent to defend her hero from... Rainbow Dash?

“Ha! Yeah, you got me.” Admitted the stricken Dash before bolting straight up in a streak of rainbow.

The two rainbows dueled in the sky. Scootaloo knew there could be only one winner. The real Rainbow Dash.

It was kind of exciting to watch.

If Scootaloo didn't already know.

The real Rainbow Dash would never kiss her and certainly never do anything that comes after kissing with her.

The real Rainbow Dash would never ever teach her to fly.

Scootaloo was very young still and as the feelings welled up in her knew she wouldn't be able to make it home. But she took pride in how tough she was, she wasn't soft like most other fillies.

That's why she curled into a ball and hid her face behind her hooves. That is why she clenched her teeth just tight as she could.

In hope that no one would hear or see her wail like a baby.

Comments

[Lucefudu]

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[knightcommander]

That was completely and utterly... I don't even know

[abandoned2123]

This isn't cool man. If anything this is disgusting. Disgusting in that you have the capability to write, but you've squandered it on tripe like this.

[Sorren]

This, uh, this is.... ba..... terrible. I'm sorry, I normally try to provide help. but this... this is just.... bleh.

[Regidar]

At first I was like
And then I was like
But then I was all like
Great Job! I loved it!

[ChillzMaster]

It was a jumbled mess of different types of fics. Started off as a slice-of-life for Scoot and Dash, went into some underage nonsensical shipping, and ended with no resolution in a "Who's who?" ordeal.

Sorry guy, it's just no good dawg

[EquestrianAnarchist]

Changeling pedophile pics aren't good. Sorry, bro.

[tubaguy]

ummmm
that was interesting
may want to decide on what genre ur goin with before you right, interesting concept but came out as a bit of a mess
keep tryin though

[Brony0815]

I was 35% confused 15% what 25% kinda o happy 25% two rainbow

[Android]

Uh....
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[Obscure]

607328
606923
If there is one thing I know, it's that realistic stories don't hug genres.

[tubaguy]

607683 you don't need to hug a genre, just need to have some sort of basic idea of whats happening so if you are going from slice-of-life, to sadfic or shipfic or whatever else, the transition isn't a random, awkward jump. The story was honestly too short to cleanly go through that many twists and changes
You are a good writer with unique ideas, I really do hope to see some more out of you in the future

[gigisparkle]

that wasa liitle messed up at first then i just lost intrest at the 2nd Dash

overall it was ok?

[Speedway King]

I'm not sure what I just read... But I'd be lying if I said it wasn't interesting

[sunny_side_up]

Pegasi are cars in disguise.
I FUCKING KNEW IT

[Rainbow Bash]

I was confused most of the time. This did not make sense to me what so ever.

[thecrazybrony168]

wtf
lol

[Echo Night]

Changeling!! Sweet!!

[dashie76]

WAT

I guess it was well written, though.

[Silent Shadow]

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[Passion]

i get it

[Titanium Dragon]

Yikes.

I liked this story and people who complained about it were wrong. Though honestly the gas and brakes thing was just... out of place.

The overall idea was quite clever though, and the end bit quite nasty.

Well played.

[STYLE-95]

......MORE

[SUBJECTXVI]

So wait is RD a pedophile?!?

[Obscure]

3851885
nope

[SUBJECTXVI]

3852330 oh... I'm confused... also why do you have it labeled for sex when none occures? Also you should seriously add another chapter or I will be forcd to hunt you down, kill you, bring you back to life, and the force you to create another chapter. and don't think I can't do it.. you wouldn't be he first to doubt me.

[Titanium Dragon]

3851885
The Rainbow Dash who kissed Scootaloo is a changeling. Scootaloo is sad because the real Rainbow Dash would never do all this stuff for her.

[SUBJECTXVI]

5260074 Yes I know I have a brain. And who knows? Stranger things have happened here. No stranger would it be. If scoots and RD hooked up don't you see? (If you can name what book my modified saying comes from you will get an instant fallow? Follow? Whatever you know what I'm trying to say!

[Titanium Dragon]

5260875
The Hunger Games.

[SUBJECTXVI]

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[pterrorgrine]

I sorted my RiL shelf by rating and chose a fic from the last page. Based on that I think I can say that this is seriously underrated. (Also, I find it amusing that even though I can't remember anything about how this fic was recommended to me, I know for sure that it was 3259247.)

[Titanium Dragon]

5681878
Yeah.

I actually got a terrible idea for a fanfic out of this story, but I still haven't written it. Been sitting on it for over a year now, apparently. Shame on me.

Apparently Obscure's name is accurate, huh?

[pterrorgrine]

5681889
Holy shit you respond fast.

I "got" this in a way I didn't with "Rainbow Dash Gets an Abortion". And I found that (just now for linking, not originally) by sorting your Recommended shelf by rating. I can see some fics I'm almost offended got voted so low ("Biblical Monsters") and some I'm just fine with ("No Good Answers"), which I guess makes perfect sense -- anything that's just bad wouldn't be there at all, and anything everyone liked wouldn't be on the last page -- but it's still a bit of a "why doesn't everyone like the things I like! My subjective opinions are right!"

This story is the lowest-rated I've read if you don't count "The Legend of Dash Ketchum", which you shouldn't since that's a trollfic.

[Titanium Dragon]

5681942
Full disclosure: I originally downvoted Biblical Monsters because the story just felt pointlessly bleak to me. After a while, I finally decided that it was good after all and upvoted it, but I think Biblical Monsters gets downvoted a lot because it kind of skirts the edge of that line - no one doubts that it is well-written, but I think it is on the edge of being too dark, and a lot of people fall screaming into the abyss.

Looking at the lowest rated favorites of people like Bad Horse or myself is interesting because a lot of those stories are likely to be controversial ones; one interesting thing about controversial things, however, is that many of them are very good for a specific target audience. So if Biblical Monsters is your thing, you're likely to think it is a brilliant story, but if it isn't, there's a good chance you'll dislike it.

The other thing is that stories which basically trick the audience into reading them are likely to eat a lot of downvotes; both this and Rainbow Dash Gets an Abortion are not about what you might expect from their title and summary, and consequently are much more likely to have people read them who aren't going to like them and then downvote them because they didn't realize what the story was.

Holy shit you respond fast.

I'm waiting for To the Sun to be approved.